Korrektur meines Essays

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Korrektur meines Essays

Beitrag von Nirvana »

Abend!

Ich hoffe, dass jetzt noch jemand online ist, auf jeden Fall bräuchte ich dringend eure Hilfe.
Ich bin keinesfalls schlecht in Englisch, ich kann mich jdoch heute leider nicht konzentrieren, da das ein recht aufregender Tag für mich war...
Ich habe gerade mein essay, geschrieben, hatte jedoch auch innhaltlich schon kleine Schwierigkeiten.

Es ist etwas länger, ich denke, jedoch, dass einmal drüberlesen ausreichen dürfte...


Hier das essay:


Before I don`t finish the school, I am unconcerned about work. Probably I want to study after school astronomy, but I am not sure. I have worked every summer, often I helped the father of a friend of mine, because he needed some help at the building. I also worked in some fabrics, which are specialized at mechanical engineering, but to work in a workshop I don`t like so much. I am not the sort of man, who likes to become dirty by working at a machine. I think working in an office is much comfortable and for me it`s better, because I am a theoretician and I like to calculate some prefabricated parts, or construct something on the computer, or on a piece of paper.
There are a lot of different works and for each work you find people, which like to make this works. It is unbelievable, how much different works are exists on the earth. In every branch
you find different ones. For example you find in the gastronomy branch some works like waiter, hotel keeper, innkeeper, or char. In the metal branch there are some works like metalworker, constructing engineer or welding operator.
There are also some social jobs, like nursery school teacher or a teacher for elementary school. Musician is also a great job I think, but you must to manage, that you have your hobby as a
work. I never can make a hobby of mine to a job, because I think, that hobbies are a compensation for the job, but I also think, that a lot of people are disagree my mind. There are a
lot of exhausting and dangerous jobs. I have a lot of respect of the people, which are making this works. For example a woodcutter in the great Canadian woods. I think it`s very hard to work, when the it is so cold, especially, when the work is so hard like cutting wood. Another very exhausting job is a kind of work, where you need a lot of endurance. I hope that I have given you a little insight in my thinking of the different works.



Am besten ist sowieso das Thema Work. Beim letzten essay schrieb ich einen 1er, aber da ging es auch um music, das ist mein Fachgebiet. :mrgreen:

Vielen Dank im Voraus.

Gruß

joy

Re: Korrektur meines Essays

Beitrag von joy »

Nirvana hat geschrieben:Abend!

Ich hoffe, dass jetzt noch jemand online ist, auf jeden Fall bräuchte ich dringend eure Hilfe.
Ich bin keinesfalls schlecht in Englisch, ich kann mich jdoch heute leider nicht konzentrieren, da das ein recht aufregender Tag für mich war...
Ich habe gerade mein essay, geschrieben, hatte jedoch auch innhaltlich schon kleine Schwierigkeiten.

Es ist etwas länger, ich denke, jedoch, dass einmal drüberlesen ausreichen dürfte...


Hier das essay:


Before I don`t finish the school, I am unconcerned aboutwork.?? Meinst du: As soon as I finish / leave school I will look for a job. Probably I want to study astronomy after leaving school astronomy, but Iam not sure. I have worked every summer, often I helped thefather of a friend of mine, because he needed some help at the on the building site. I also worked in some factories, which are specializedat mechanical engineering, but to work in a workshop I don`tlike so much. I am not the sort of man, who likes to becomedirty by working at a machine. I think working in an office ismuch more comfortable and for me it`s better, because I am atheoretician and I like to calculate some prefabricated parts, orconstruct something on the computer, or on a piece of paper.
There are a lot of different jobs and for each one you can findpeople, who like to works. It is unbelievable what a wide choice of vacancies there is on the earth! In every fieldyou will find different works. For example, in the gastronomy area you will find works for waiters, hotel keepers,innkeepers, or cleaners.
In the metal area there is works for metalworkers, construction engineers or welders.You will also find social jobs, for example as a nursery school teacher ora teacher for elementary school.
Besides, there are offers in the social area such as jobs for nursery school teachers or teachers for elementary schools. Musician is also a great job I
think, but you must consider the fact, that you have your hobby as ajob. I never could make one of my hobbies to a job, because Ithink, that hobbies are a welcome change from the job, but I alsothink, that a lot of people are disagree my mind. There are alot of exhausting and dangerous jobs. I have a lot of respect ofthose people, who are doing such works / tasks, for example awoodcutter in the great Canadian woods. I think cutting wood is very hardto work, even harder when the it is bitterly cold.
Another very exhausting job is a kindof work, where you need a lot of endurance. I hope that I havegiven you a little insight in my thinking of the different career prospects.
Am besten ist sowieso das Thema Work. Beim letzten essay schrieb ich einen 1er, aber da ging es auch um music, das ist mein Fachgebiet. :mrgreen:

Vielen Dank im Voraus.

Gruß