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[Ronela]

Das ist eine freiwillige Übung für die kommende Schularbeit, also keine Hausübung oder etwas der gleichen. Falls keine Fehler vorhanden sind, was ich bezweifle mit auch melden. Danke

INTRODUCTION As requested, I have prepared an essay about the myth of generation N which tells you that adolecents can deal better with computers than the older generation.


ARGUMENTS
Teens are more willing to experiment with computers so they can handle it better because they are not worried about breaking their computers. The older people are worried because they have to pay. What is more, for many teens today learning to use a computer is no longer optional. Some teachers refuse to accept papers unless they are typed on a computer. So the teens just deal with computers, as they are forced to deal with many other aspects of their lives. It is a simply fact that the more time you spend using computers the better your understanding will be of such technologies.


CONCLUSION
The myth that adolescents can deal better with computers is incorrect because it is more about how much time you spend using computers.

[Uhu Uhuhu]

... breaking their computers. I recommend crashing instead of breaking.
... they have to pay. ??? they are afraid of asking for external help.
.... typed on a computer. A computer is not a typewriter. Typed on a text processing system like word or Open Office.
teens = youth generation
... is incorrect because... . You can also say "downright wrong" instead of "incorrect" but this is might be a very strong statement...

[Delfino]

Dies ist eine freiwillige Übung für die kommende Schularbeit,
es ist also keine Hausübung oder etwas der gleichen.
Falls keine Fehler vorhanden sind, was ich bezweifle, bitte auch melden.
Danke


INTRODUCTION
As requested, I have prepared an essay about the myth of generation N
which states that adolescents can use computers more intuitively than the older generation.

ARGUMENTATION
Teenagers are usually more open to employ a trial-and-error method when using computers.
They can also handle new challenging tasks better because they are very seldomly worried about crashing the software or even damaging their computer hardware.
Most older people are more worried because they know how much they paid for the hard- and software
and additionally often need to pay for technical support as well due to their lack of comprehensive knowledge of ICT.

Furthermore, todays students have no choice but to learn about using at least a text processing system like Word or Open Office
because many teachers refuse to accept handwritten papers.
So the young generation has to put up with the use of computers, as they are expected to deal with many other aspects of their lives.
It is a simply fact that the more time you spend using computers, the better you will be able to understand such new technologies.

CONCLUSION
The myth that adolescents can deal better with computers is incorrect because they spend significantly more time using computers and other new technologies.

The myth of Generation N
Not all kids are tech-savvy; how will they handle the wired future?
http://www.msnbc.msn.com/id/3078940/ns/ ... d_gadgets/

[Delfino]

Although you might not expect an elderly teacher to check your text against published articles on the Internet you should always include your references.
I was able to find quite a few phrases of your "original" text in the linked article and so will your teacher who probably even knows your current level of English.