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[Lerner 007]

Hi ich hoffe einer von euch findet die Zeit sich mal kurz meinen kleinen Text anzusehen. Bitte gebt mir eine Note für diesen text

Look Tv or go to sport

First of all I think it's better to go to a sport activity, then only look Tv the hole day. There are many reasons for this. As, for example the sport you can build better condition. Second you can find new friends with the sport. One of the contra arguments is, that one hurt the sport more quickly, then the Tv. Althought it's true, it would be wrong to claim that sport is bad for the health.

In summing up it can be said that sport is very much better then Tv.

[Mexx]

Hi ich hoffe einer von euch findet die Zeit sich mal kurz meinen kleinen Text anzusehen. Bitte gebt mir eine Note für diesen text

Watching TV or going to sport?

First of all I think it's better to make a sport activity instead of watching TV the whole day. There are many reasons for this. For example in sport you can build a better condition [besser: By making sport regular you can reach a better condition] and you can find new friends, too.
On the other hand you can hurt by doing sport faster, than the by watching TV. Althought it's true, it would be wrong to claim that sport is bad for the health.

In summing up it makes more sense to do sport instead watching TV.

Wäre meine Verbesserungsvorschläge, soll sich aber bitte nochmal jemand anschaun Um dafür eine Note zu geben müsste ich wissen in welche Klassestufe du gehst =P