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Hallo erstmal will ich mich über die spitzen Arbeit hier im Forum bedanken !! :tup: da mir bei einen review sehr gut geholfen wurde
Könnte ich wer schnell bitte diesen Artikel durchsehn hab am Montag Klassenarbeit
thx mfg


Modern technologies has changed our life in a positive way. Nearly everyone has an I pod a mobile phone or a computer. These modern gadgets make our life much easier. Let me tell you all the fascinating facts about these great devices.


Mobile phone:
First of all I want to talk about mobile phones. This little machine has become a integral part of our everyday life and makes our life much easier. You can make a phone call whenever you want and you are reachable 24 ours a day. Furthermore it is very helpful when you are in trouble for instance when you are involved in a accident you can call the police and ambulance immediately . Today a mobile phone is a multifunctional device. Ass well as that this gadget offers so many functions. For example you can type text messages or can listen to music or even watch videos o surf in the internet. You see these functions are really fascinating and I promise you it leaves no room for boredom. It helps you to get out of the daily stress.


Computer:
I also want to talk about another important invention the personal computer. Nearly everyone has a computer an access to the internet. The pc is a multimedia machine for instance you can play computer games or listen to music and much more .
Meanwhile the computer and internet is the information source number one because you have the opportunity to look for information on “google” or “wikipedia” or read an online newspapers. You can also communicate with friends in other countries via chats or social networking web pages like “facebook” and “twitter” or “Skype” In addition the internet allows you to listen to over 100 different web radios or watch films and videos on “Youtube”
Conclusion
So you see the mobile phones and the Computer are important components of the daily life and they make our life much easier. Now we're looking forward to new inventions in few years.

joy

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MK2690 hat geschrieben:Hallo erstmal will ich mich über die spitzen Arbeit hier im Forum bedanken !! :tup: da mir bei einen review sehr gut geholfen wurde.
Könnte jemand schnell? bitte diesen Artikel durchsehen. Ich habe am Montag Klassenarbeit
thx mfg


Modern technologies have changed our life (da generell - besser ohne "our") - und zur Orientierung: "our life" falsch - "our lives" richtig ) in a positive way. Nearly everyone has an iPod, a mobile phone or a computer. These modern gadgets have made our life much easier. Let me tell you all the fascinating facts about these great devices.


Mobile phone:
First of all I want to talk about mobile phones. This little machine has become an integral part of our everyday life and makes our way of life much easier. You can make a phone call whenever you want and on the other hand you can be reached 24 hours a day. Furthermore it is very helpful when you are in trouble for instance when you are involved in an accident you can call the police and ambulance immediately. Today a mobile phone is a multifunctional device and offers so many functions. For example you can type text messages or can listen to music or even watch videos or surf in the internet. In my opinion these functions are really fascinating and I promise you it leaves no room for boredom. It helps you to get out of the daily stress.


Computer:
I also want to talk about another important invention; the personal computer. Nearly everyone has a computer providing an access to the internet. The PC is a multimedia machine for instance you can play computer games or listen to music and much more.
Meanwhile the computer and internet is the information source number one because you have the opportunity to look for information on “Google” or “Wikipedia” or read an online newspapers. You can also communicate with friends in other countries via chats or social networking web pages like “Facebook” and “Twitter” or “Skype” In addition the internet allows you to listen to over 100 different web radios or watch films and videos on “YouTube”
Conclusion
As I see it, the mobile phones and the computers are important components of the daily life and they make our life much easier. Now we're looking forward to new inventions in a few years.
Hi MK2690
Eine Frage: Musst du nicht die Vor- und Nachteile beschreiben und zum Schluss deine Meinung kundgeben? Hier gibt es nur Vorteile!!!???
Für das nächste Mal rate ich dir, uns mehr Zeit für die Korrektur einzuräumen - es ist ein Zufall, dass ich gerade Zeit hatte. Du kannst also nicht immer damit rechnen, dass es schnell geht - dies machen wir freiwillig, dann, wenn wir Zeit haben.