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[Deharry]

Hallo hab am Montag eine Schularbeit in Englisch und deswegen hab ich einen Article über die Regentschaft von Queen Viktoria geschrieben und die Veränderung die daraus resultierten. Kann jemand diesen Article bitte korrigieren da ich mir in machen Dingen überhaupt nicht sicher bin ob man das so schreiben kann
LG Deharry


Have you ever heard of Queen Victoria and the industrial revolution in the 19th century in Britain. No than it’s time to get information about this important time era of British history because in the Victorian era the live of the people had changed completely. Let me tell you some interesting facts about this time period which involved many changes. I am sure you will certainly fascinated about this era.
Of course I want to highlighted the social progress during this time which has still influenced the British population even today. This was the time of the great Queen Victoria regency . Her regency made the live certainly better . Particular the changes during her regency was great because in previous days the living conditions had been terrible. Today you couldn’t imagine what those condition like for example nor running water no drain system overcrowded rooms with more than 9 people. It was also the time of the cholera and the working class was very handicapped.




In spite of these social changes The Queen mastered these difficulties and improve the living conditions of the working class appreciable. For example the school system was based on the time and 1899 had to go every child to school .Throughout the children’s work was reduces. During her regency the plane to build up new buildings working class from Prince Albert was realized. Another important invention was the public water closet after the great stench, Joseph Bazelgett had built the London drain system which has been still used today. Throughout the drain system solved the problem of the cholera.
You see this era was quite interesting and has been influenced the life in England still today. Probably Queen Victory’s decisions make it possible that the industrial revolution was so successful in Britain because she realized the importance of the working class.

[Schnipsi]

Hallo!
Habe deinen Article korrigiert: rot - Fehler, blau - Satzumstellung, Wortumstellung, durchgestrichen - kannst du weglassen
Habe im mittleren Absatz die Sätze neu zusammengestellt, hört sich so besser an!
Liebe Grüsse und viel Glück für die Schularbeit!

Have you ever heard of Queen Victoria and the industrial revolution in the 19th century in Britain? No? Then it’s time to get to know something about this important time era of British history, because in the Victorian era the life of the people hadchanged completely. Let me tell you some interesting facts about this time period, which involved many changes and I am sure, you will certainly be fascinated about it.

Of course I want to highlighted the social progress during this time, which has still influences the British population even today. It was the time of the great Queen Victoria regency. On the one hand there was the cholera and the working class was very poor. Today you couldn’t imagine what those condition like for example no running water or drain system and overcrowded rooms with more than 9 people. But Victoria’s regency particularly improved the living conditions for the poor,because in previous days the living conditions were terrible. But the Queen mastered these difficulties and improved the living conditions of the working class appreciable. One important thing is that the school system is from this time, when in 1899 every child had to go to school for the first time and the children’s work was reduced. During Victoria’s regency Moreover the idea of Prince Albert to build up new buildings for the working class, was realized. Another important invention was the public water closet and because of the great stench, Joseph Bazelgett had built the London drain system, which has been still used today. This drain system also solved the problem of the cholera.

You see that this era was quite interesting and has been still influences the life in England today. Probably Queen Victoria’s decisions made it possible that the industrial revolution was so successful in Britain, because she realized the importance of the working class.

[Deharry]

Danke für die Korrektur