vor kurzem habe ich ein Motivationsschreiben verfasst und da ich oft viele Fehler (vor allem Grammatik und Satzbaufehler) mache,
würde ich mich freuen, wenn ihr mir ein bisschen helft.
TEXT:
At school I have always been very interested in history and especially in the Holocaust. In my opinion the Holocaust is a very important theme, which should never fall into oblivion. I am also interested in description of contemporary witnesses and I appreciate it listening to their fatefulnesses. The Holocaust is one of the most important chapters of history and it would be an honor if I could deal more intensely with this theme.
I am really enthused in the United States of America and the Holocaust Memorial Service offers the opportunity to work and live in the USA for a year. I took a look at the homepages of the different museums andit really impressed me. The homepage illustrates through a virtual tour through the museum the Holocaust very well. Further on the numerously educational offers really aroused my interest. "Tolerance Through Education", this significant statement showed me that it is very important to diffuse the knowledge to younger generations. I also think the recon of the Holocaust is an important theme, especially in the United States of America. The civilian population only experienced the Holocaust through the media and maybe a lot of them aren't aware of the consequences of the second world war.
It's in everyone's interest to diffuse this the Holocaust history and I would like to find out what local residents think about it. This year abroad would be an formative experience in my life and I also could improve my speaking skills and getting to know the American culture.
Könnt ihr mir bitte helfen und sagen, wie gut mir der Text gelungen ist oder ob er katastrophal ist.
Ich danke euch
!
LG Patrick
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