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[tim16]

Soll mich Mittwoch schriftlich in englisch vorstellen , da es benotet ird bräuchte ich mal ein tipp ob das geschriebene so richtig ist bzw ob ich was verändern sollte.


Hello
My name is Tim H. and I´m 26 years old.
I was born on the 8th 1983 December in Osnabrück
I live alone, in a city apartment in Osnabrück
My parents are divorced, I have an older brother and a sister.
I learn 4 year the job as nursery nurse, on a vocational school and the nursery school.
After the 4 years i like to work in a children`s home
My hobby’s is swimming, listen music, reading a book and going out.
My favorite food is fast food

[joy]

Soll mich Mittwoch schriftlich auf Englisch vorstellen, da es benotet wird bräuchte ich mal ein Tipp, ob das Geschriebene so richtig ist bzw ob ich was verändern sollte.


Hello
My name is Tim H. and I´m 26 years old.
I was born on (the) 8th December 1983 in Osnabrück (AmE = on December 8th, 1983)
I live alone in a city apartment in Osnabrück
My parents are divorced, I have an older brother and a sister.
I did my 4-year training as a nursery nurse at a vocational school and the nursery school.
Since then, I have had the pleasure of working in a children's home. (Ich habe es so verstanden, dass du seit dem Lehrabschluss mit Freude in einem Kinderheim arbeitest)
My hobbies are swimming, listening to music, reading books and going out.
My favorite (BrE = favourite) food is fast food