Opinion essay smoking

[Märzmelodie]

Guten Tag/Abend ich muss einen Opinion Essay über Smoking schreiben und es wäre sehr hilfreich, wenn sich jemand mal kurz den text anschauen könnte.

PS: Sorry an alle Raucher, ist sehr umstritten das Thema deshalb hab ich mich mal ganz extrem auf die Seite der Nicht-Raucher gestellt


First of all I want to say that I agree with Bens opinion. It is my conviction that the tabak industry is exploiting us when we do not start to defend ourselves. All over the world people are smoking without knowing the risks which are connected with it.

On the one hand, I think Bens strong emotions are justified, because it is a fact that cigarettes are causing lung diseases which are often turning out deadly.Maybe one of his relatives has died, because of the substances which are contained in cigarettes. But on the other hand, I think he has to be objective even if it is hard to keep one’s feelings under control.

Many people say we have to blame advertisements for this. I take the view that advertising has an influence on people starting to smoke but not that much as everybody says. I do think that more people begin to smoke, because they cannot cope with their private or business related problems. So in this case I am uncertain about this. Anyway I think advertisements have an impact on people in regard to buying, because they think it is ok to buy cigarettes, because we are familiar with cigarettes which is a result of the large amount of advertisements we are forced to see every day.

In my opinion smoking is still socially accepted, because everyone is doing this and they are too addicted to get rid of cigarettes. So they are too blind to see the danger. In contrast to this it has been done something by the government but not enough. A prohibition of smoking in several local restaurants for instance in Austria is not really effective. Even if smoking will be more expensive, it would not change the situation.

In conclusion I am inclined to believe that although Bens reaction against the tabak industry was a little bit exaggerated, his message is right. The large amount of harmful substances in cigarettes should make somebody wonder, and advertisements, if encouraging the general purchasing power or not, in any case has an subliminal impact on people. Furthermore peope should call the tabak industry and their product into question and be more critical. As far as I am concerned I think so as not to end up sick and helpless we have to do something before it is too late.

[joy]

Guten Tag/Abend ich muss einen Opinion Essay über Smoking schreiben und es wäre sehr hilfreich, wenn sich jemand mal kurz den Text anschauen könnte.

PS: Sorry an alle Raucher, ist sehr umstritten das Thema deshalb hab ich mich mal ganz extrem auf die Seite der Nicht-Raucher gestellt

First of all I want to say that I agree with Bens opinion, and I am conviced that the tobacco industry is exploiting us when we do not start to defend ourselves. (Es ist der Staat, der uns ausnutzt, nicht die Tabakindustrie - Steuer auf Preisen) All over the world people are smoking without knowing the risks which are connected with it. (Nein, nein, alle wissen es, aber sie rauchen trotzdem - in der Schweiz steht auf der Packung "Rauchen ist tödlich" und es wird trotzdem geraucht)


MärzmelodieOn the one hand, I think Bens strong emotions are justified, because it is a fact that cigarettes cause lung diseases which often turning out deadly. Maybe one of his relatives has died, because of the substances which are contained in cigarettes. But on the other hand, I think he has to be objective even if it is hard to keep his feelings under control.

Many people say we have to blame advertisements for this. I take the view that advertising has an influence on people to starting smoking but not that much as everybody says. I do think that more people begin to smoke, because they cannot cope with their private or business related problems. So in this case I am uncertain about this. Anyway I think advertisements have an impact on people in regard to buying, because they think it is ok to buy cigarettes, because we are familiar with cigarettes which is a result of the large amount of advertisements we are forced to see every day.

In my opinion smoking is still socially accepted, because everyone (everyone?) is doing this and they are too addicted to get rid of cigarettes. So they are too blind to see the danger. In contrast to this it has been done something by the government but not enough. A prohibition of smoking in several local restaurants for instance in Austria is not really effective. Even if smoking will be more expensive, it would not change the situation.

In conclusion I am inclined to believe that although Bens reaction against the tobacco industry was a little bit exaggerated, his message is right. The large amount of harmful substances in cigarettes should make somebody wonder, and advertisements, if encouraging the general purchasing power or not, in any case has an subliminal impact on people. Furthermore people should call the tobacco industry and their product into question and be more critical. As far as I am concerned I think so as not to end up sick and helpless we have to do something before it is too late.

Grüsse von einer Raucherin
joy

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Guten Tag/Abend, ich muss einen Opinion Essay über Smoking schreiben und es wäre sehr hilfreich, wenn sich jemand mal kurz den Text anschauen könnte.

PS: Sorry an alle Raucher,
Märzmelodie das Thema ist sehr umstritten, deshalb habe ich mich mal ganz extrem auf die Seite der Nicht-Raucher gestellt

First of all, I want/would like to say that I agree with Ben's (Genitiv) opinion, and I am convinced that the tobacco industry will go on exploiting us if we do not start to defend ourselves. (Es ist der Staat, der uns ausnutzt, nicht die Tabakindustrie - Steuer auf Preisen. Ich stimme joy hier zu, vielleicht ist es einfach auch das falsche Wort, ich würde "seducing us to ruin our health" vorschlagen.) All over the world people are smoking without really understanding the risks (which are = kann wegfallen) connected with it. (Nein, nein, alle wissen es, aber sie rauchen trotzdem - in der Schweiz steht auf der Packung "Rauchen ist tödlich" und es wird trotzdem geraucht) Höhöhö, die Ente hat vor 10 Jahren aufgehört...

On the one hand, I think Ben's (s.o.) strong emotions are justified, because it is a fact that cigarettes can cause the often lethal lung cancer. Maybe one of his relatives has died because of the substances (which are) contained in cigarettes. But on the other hand, I think he should try to be more objective even if it is hard to keep his feelings under control.

Many people feel that advertisements are to be blamed for seducing young people. (Der Bezug ist hier falsch, Du meinst ja das Rauchen, nicht Bens Gefühlsausbruch, nöch?) I take the view that although advertising does have (Betonung durch Verwendung des "do", sparsam verwenden) an influence on people it is not quite as strong as everybody says. I think that more people take up smoking, because they cannot cope with their private or business related problems. (An sich gutes Argument, aber eher in Bezug auf Alkoholabusus, denn "normales" Rauchen bewirkt ja keine beruhigende Bewusstseinsänderung.) So in this case I am uncertain about this. Anyway, I think advertisements have an impact on people as regards their buying habits, though. They think it is perfectly normal to buy cigarettes since we are familiar with them as a result of the many advertisements we are forced to see every day.

In my opinion, smoking is still socially accepted, because so many people still do it. They are too addicted to get rid of the habit. And they are too blind to see the danger. Although something has been done by the government, it is not nearly enough. The prohibition of smoking in several (not all?) local restaurants in Austria, for instance, is not really effective. Even if smoking were made more expensive, it would not change the situation.

In conclusion, I am inclined to believe that although Ben's reaction against the tobacco industry was a little bit exaggerated, his message is correct. The large amount of harmful substances in cigarettes should make anybody (= jedermann) wonder. And advertisements, whether encouraging the general purchasing power (???) or not, in any case have an subliminal impact on people. Furthermore, people should call the tobacco industry and their products into question and be more critical. As far as I am concerned, I think we will have to do something soon, so as not to end up sick and helpless.

Grüsse von einer Raucherin
joy

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Duckduck

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