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Bitte noch einmal um Hilfe

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Hallo miteinander. Ich habe noch mal mein Text überarbeitet und etwas umgeschrieben. Es wäre echt nett, wenn sich das noch mal jemand angucken könnte, ob jetzt alle Fehler weg sind.:|

Prince Charles criticizes the professors of architecture , who have experimented thirty years with new building materials. They found out that a man is a machine. But Prince Charles criticzes the building planners and architects , too , who believed that the buildings should reflect the new spirit of the age. In his opinion the new public and commercial buildings seem to be ugly, dull and heartless. Prince Charles believes he had to do something but he was too young earlier. He did not imagine that the buildings will destroyed some day. For him these (oder this ? ) is an attack on the old principles that affected the music , education , architeture and art. The architecture of the fifties and sixties not arrive (reach ) all cities and villages. Prince Charles thinks that England have ended up with Frankenstein monsters because what the buildings should reflect is unpopular - apart from professors of architeture , who like these buildings. The people , who do not like this architeture must live with these buildings. The architects want build the buildings so that they reflect a high technology. Thus the past is irrelevant. But Prince Charles warns against that man will forget the past , loses their souls and the buildings will lose their souls , too. If you give up the principles of 2, 500 years of architeture , are suffering the people. The buildings only show the technology of the moment.

So , ich hoffe ich habe keine Schreibfehler mit eingebaut.:wink:

LG und vielen Dank im Voraus:)

Keswick (Contributor)

Re: Bitte noch einmal um Hilfe

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saturn hat geschrieben:Hallo miteinander. Ich habe noch mal mein Text überarbeitet und etwas umgeschrieben. Es wäre echt nett, wenn sich das noch mal jemand angucken könnte, ob jetzt alle Fehler weg sind.:|

Prince Charles criticizes the professors of architecture , who have experimented with new building materials for thirty years. They found out that a man is a machine. But Prince Charles criticizes the building planners and architects , too , who believed that the buildings should reflect the new spirit of the current era. In his opinion the new public and commercial buildings seem to be ugly, dull and heartless. Prince Charles believes he should have acted earlier but he was too young earlier. He did not imagine that the buildings would be destroyed some day. For him these (oder this ? ) is an attack on the old principles that affected the music , education , architecture and art. The architecture of the fifties and sixties did not arrive (reach ) all cities and villages. Prince Charles thinks that England has ended up with Frankenstein monsters because what the buildings should reflect is unpopular with the ordinary people with the exception of professors of architecture , who like these buildings. The people , who do not like this architecture must live with these buildings. The architects want to build the buildings which reflect a high technology. Thus the past is irrelevant. But Prince Charles warns against that man will forget the past , lose their souls and the buildings will lose their souls , too. If you give up the principles of 2, 500 years of architecture , the people will suffer. The buildings only show the technology of the moment.

So , ich hoffe ich habe keine Schreibfehler mit eingebaut.:wink:

LG und vielen Dank im Voraus:)


Hi Saturn,

ich habe mich beim Lesen deines Textes etwas schwer getan, denn ganz strukturiert ist er nicht. Ich an deiner Stelle wuerde erst auf die Gebaeude eingehen, schreiben wie sie aussehen, wieso sie so aussehen und die Meinung der Menschen und der Architekten. Und dann wuerde ich auf die Stellung von Prince Charles eingehen. Was meinst du?

LG
Keswick

saturn

Re: Bitte noch einmal um Hilfe

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Hallo Keswick. Danke für deine Hilfe und deinen Rat. Werde ihn befolgen.
Lg
saturn