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[MissPrincess]

Hallo meine Lieben!!! Da ich Anfang nächsten Jahres ein Praktikum in China machen möchte, muss ich eine Bewerbung auf Englisch schreiben. Naja, mein Englisch lässt zu wünschen übrig. Aber vlt. findet sich ja trotzdem jemand nettes der für mich der Text korrektur liest.


LG aus Russland


Application for a an internship at the department of Human Resources


Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to apply for the internship that you recently advertised on ……..


The internship should last from 5-6 months in the period from March 2011 to August 2011.

I am presently studying Business Economics majoring in Organization/ Human Resources and minoring in Accounting/ Controlling at the University of Applied Sciences of xyz (Germany).

I doing at the moment an internship at a state enterpris in Russia and after that I will write the bachelor thesis about „The Demographic Change and the effect on the personnel development“. Befor I startet with the consecutive Master programme in the WS 2011/ 2012 I wish to attend a internship in China.

During a 8-month internship (Acconting, Sale and Technical department) and a 3-month internship (Acconting) I get first practical experience.

Also, I always try to improve my language skills. I have learn Russian (B2/C1), Englisch (B1/B2), French (A2) and Chinese (A1).

For the internship it is important get on successfully with people and being independent. I have these both characteristics and additionally I am ambitious, a teamworker and creative.

Please do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you.


Yours sincerely,

[joy]

Hallo meine Lieben!!! Da ich Anfang nächsten Jahres ein Praktikum in China machen möchte, muss ich eine Bewerbung auf Englisch schreiben. Naja, mein Englisch lässt zu wünschen übrig. Aber evtl. findet sich ja trotzdem jemand nettes der so nett ist und für mich den Text korrigiert.


LG aus Russland


Application for a an internship at the department of Human Resources


Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to apply for the internship that you recently advertised on ……..

If possible, I would very much like to join your firm for 5-6 months in the period from March 2011 to August 2011 to do the internship.

I am currently studying Business Economics majoring in Organization/ Human Resources and minoring in Accounting/ Controlling at the University of Applied Sciences of xyz (Germany).

At the moment I am doing an internship at a state enterprise in Russia and after that I will write the Bachelor thesis about „The Demographic Change and the effect on the personnel development“. Before I startet with the consecutive Master programme in the WS 2011/ 2012 I wish to attend an internship in China.

During an 8-month internship (Accounting, Sales and Technical department) and a 3-month internship (Accounting) I gained first practical experience.

Also, I always try to improve my language skills. I have learned Russian (B2/C1), English (B1/B2), French (A2) and Chinese (A1).

Essential criteria for the internship are, working independently and knowing how to handle people successfully. I have these both characteristics because I see myself as a team player and besides, I am ambitious and creative. So I am confident that my skills I acquired during my student days will be useful for the internship in your company.

If you require any additional information, please do not hesitate to contact me by phone or mail? I am looking forward to hearing from you.


Yours sincerely,

Viel Glück!
joy

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hallo meine Lieben!!! Da ich Anfang nächsten Jahres ein Praktikum in China machen möchte, muss ich eine Bewerbung auf Englisch schreiben. Naja, mein Englisch lässt zu wünschen übrig. Aber evtl. findet sich ja trotzdem jemand nettes der so nett ist und für mich den Text korrigiert.


LG aus Russland

WOWOWOWOWOWOWOW JOY , das ist einfach SUPER! Nun ist ja Keswick unsere Bewerbungsspezialistin und sie ist im Moment nicht greifbar, so scheint es, aber ich finde, Du hast das perfekt gemacht - für meinen kleinen Verstand zumindest. Ein, zwei winzige Kleinigkeiten, aber sonst PERFEKT!!!!!

Application for a an internship at the department of Human Resources


Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to apply for the internship that you recently advertised on ……..

If possible, I would very much like to join your firm to do the internship for 5-6 months in the period from March 2011 to August 2011.

I am currently studying Business Economics, majoring in Organization/Human Resources and minoring in Accounting/Controlling at the University of Applied Sciences of xyz (Germany).

At the moment, I am doing an internship at a state enterprise in Russia and after that I will write the Bachelor thesis about "The Demographic Change and the effect on the personnel development“. (Falls Du den Titel Deiner Arbeit selbst bestimmen darfst, würde ich ihn evtl. ändern in "Demographic Change and its Effect on the Personnel Development".) Before I starting the consecutive Master programme in the WS 2011/ 2012, I wish to attend an internship in China.

During an 8-month internship (Accounting, Sales and Technical department) and a 3-month internship (Accounting), I gained first practical experience. (Hier kannst Du evtl. noch ergänzen, in welchem Jahr Du die Praktika gemacht hast)

Also, I have consistently been improving my language skills with good results, having so far reached the levels (B2/C1) in Russian, (B1/B2) in English, (A2) in French and (A1) in Chinese.

Essential criteria for the internship are working independently and knowing how to handle people successfully. Besides having the above characteristics, I see myself as a team player and, on top of that, I am ambitious and creative. So I am confident that the skills I acquired during my student days will be useful for the internship in your company.

If you require any additional information, please do not hesitate to contact me by phone or mail. I am looking forward to hearing from you.


Yours sincerely,


Viel Glück!
joy

Dass das so bläulich schimmert, liegt nur an den allgemeinen Anmerkungen.

Viel Glück auch von
Duckduck

[joy]

Toll! Vielen Dank Duckduck. Wir sind auch gute Team Players

noch schönen Sonntag
joy

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Right you are, dear joy!!!