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Toeffel Test-Essay: Bitte mal prüfen

Beitrag von eeboot »

Hi, hab hier so ein Übungsbuch für den Toeffel und mich mal an einem der Beispielthemen versucht, zu denen man einen Aufsatz schreiben soll. Ich habe nach jedem Satz ein Zeilenumbruch gemacht, weil ich in einem einfachen Wordpad getippt hab, damit die Rechtschreibprüfung nicht vorhanden ist und man die Sätze lesen kann, da Wordpad keinen Zeilenumbruch macht.


Bitte überprüfen :). Danke!


Aufgabe:
A person you know is planning to move to your town or city.
What dou you think that person would like and dislike about living in your town or city. Why?
Use specifiy reasons and details to develope your essay.




Meine Ausarbeitung:


I think the person would like my town very much.



My town has about 10.000 inhabitants spread about a really large area which used to be several independent small villages a few decades ago.

So there a lot of green areas here that will make anyone happy who likes nature and country landscapes.

Several smaller rivers offer the opportunity for swimming, fishing and other water sports. Of course, we even a lake.

For people who are interested in indoor activities 3 fitness clubs offers a wide range of different possibilities for doing sports.



The neighbours are usually very friendly and try to help each other out.

So there will be no problems to find new friends or at least friendly people to spend the day or evening with.

The neighbours see themselves often as a big family and everyone usually know each others.



Within my town there are several small companies of different industries.

Finding a new job in my town or the town area should not be too difficult as well.



Of course, such a lovely and friendly environment also attracts families with children to move to my town.

Therefore lot of kids are running and playing around outside and are noisy.

This really can be annoying at least sometimes.



Furthermore, such a small town does not have any big clubs or discotheques to which you could go to.

If you are searching for a big party you usually have to drive to the next bigger city which takes at least 1 hour.

So you are pretty much stuck in this little town, especially in the evening bus or train does not drive regularly.

During the night and the early morning they do not drive at all.

A car or a motorbike is needed if you want to be flexible.



Although my town is quite small the taxes here are quite high compared with other towns of this size, so living here is quite expensive




My town sure is not perfect, but which one is?

Anyway, I really do expect that the person will like my little town I am living in and will not make him regret it to be moved here.

joy

Re: Toeffel Test-Essay: Bitte mal prüfen

Beitrag von joy »

eeboot hat geschrieben:Hi, hab hier so ein Übungsbuch für den Toeffel und mich mal an einem der Beispielthemen versucht, zu denen man einen Aufsatz schreiben soll. Ich habe nach jedem Satz ein Zeilenumbruch gemacht, weil ich in einem einfachen Wordpad getippt hab, damit die Rechtschreibprüfung nicht vorhanden ist und man die Sätze lesen kann, da Wordpad keinen Zeilenumbruch macht.


Bitte überprüfen :). Danke!
Aufgabe:
A person you know is planning to move to your town or city.
What dou you think that person would like and dislike about living in your town or city. Why?
Use specifiy reasons and details to develope your essay.




Meine Ausarbeitung:


I think the person would like my town very much.



My town, which consisted of several independent small villages a few decades ago, has about 10.000 inhabitants spread over a really wide area.

So there are lots of green areas here that will make everyone happy who likes nature and country landscapes.

Several smaller rivers offer the opportunity for swimming, fishing and other water sports. Of course, we have even a lake.

For people who are interested in indoor activities, 3 fitness clubs offers a wide range of different possibilities for doing sports.



The neighbours are usually very friendly and try to help each other out.

So there will be no problems to find new friends or at least friendly people to spend the day or evening with.

They often see their neighbours see themselves often as a big family and everyone that is why they usually know each other.

Within my town there are several small companies of different industries.

Finding a new job in my town or the surrounding area should not be too difficult as well.



Of course, such a lovely and friendly environment also attracts families with children to move to my town.

Therefore lot of kids are running and playing around outside and are noisy.

This really can be annoying at least sometimes.



Furthermore, I must say that such a small town does not have any big clubs or discotheques to which you could go to.

If you are searching for a big party you usually have to drive to the next bigger city which takes at least 1 hour.

So you are pretty much stuck in this little town, as, especially in the evening, there is no regular bus or train service.

During the night and the early morning they do not drive at all.

A car or a motorbike is needed if you want to be flexible.



Although my town is quite small the taxes here are quite high compared with other towns of this size, so living here is quite expensive




My town sure is surely not perfect, but which one is?

Anyway, I really do expect that the person will like my little town I am living in, and that he will not make him regret it if he moves here.