Bitte um Hilfe!Englisches Motivationsschreiben korrigieren

[Sumer]

Würde mich sehr freuen wenn jemand mal rübergehen würde bzw dankbar für jedes Kommentar.
Bin mir echt unsicher mit der Richtigkeit und ob es gut klingt schon gar nicht.


Herewith I apply for bachelor degree course International Business Management and send you my application documents.

I was always interested in economics and it was clear to me that I will also focus my professional career on that topic.

After I finished my A levels I went to china and worked there for a joint venture company named Jiuhuan China GmbH.

In this company which mainly deals with trading, business consultancy and intercultural communication I made my first real experiences in practice and was impressed by the large variety of economic procedures.
I was involved in several areas of responsibilities and developed different projects in an intercultural team.
The relation to china and my interest in the Asian culture arose in my early childhood, because I have already lived three years in China.

I am particularly interested in the various factors which are essential to make successful business and profits, especially in the interaction between soft skills like power to convince on the one hand and theoretical know how on the other hand
It is my ambition to gain extensive knowledge about the basics of business management as well as detailed workflow and procedures.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Würde mich sehr freuen wenn jemand mal rübergehen würde bzw dankbar für jeden Kommentar.
Bin mir echt unsicher mit der Richtigkeit und ob es gut klingt schon gar nicht.


Hereby I apply for bachelor degree course International Business Management and send you my application documents.

I have always been interested in economics and it was clear to me that I will also focus my professional career on that topic.

After I did my A-levels I went to China and worked there for a joint venture company named Jiuhuan China GmbH.

In this company which mainly deals with trading, business consultancy and intercultural communication I made my first real practical experiences and was impressed with the large variety of economic procedures.
I was involved in several areas of responsibilities and developed different projects within an intercultural team.
The relation to China and my interest in the Asian culture arose in my early childhood, because I have already lived in China for three years.

I am particularly interested in the various factors which are essential to make business sucessful and to gain profits, especially in the interaction between soft skills like power to convince on the one hand and theoretical know how on the other hand.
It is my ambition to gain extensive knowledge about the basics of business management as well as detailed workflow and procedures.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hereby I apply for the bachelor degree course "International Business Management"

Kleines Überseherle.

Grüße
Duckduck

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Danke dir ! Ist noch frueh am Tag .

Die Anfuehrungszeichen kannst du auch weglassen, macht keinen Unterschied .

[Sumer]

Jo cool, besten Dank für die schnellen Antworten und die Korrekturen.