Korrektur von einem kurzen Text.

[heyho]

Hallo Leute,
ich soll einen Vortrag halten der nicht länger als 2 min sein soll.
Ist ein wichtiger Vortrag, deshalb bitte ich um Korrektur und evt. bessere Formulierungen.
Werden evt. noch 1/2 Sätze hinzugefügt, jedoch erst mal das.
10. Klasse jedoch nicht der Hellste in Englisch.

The topic of my presentation is the United Nations.
The United Nations or simply UN is an international organisation whose main aims are to safeguard the world peace and the promoting of international security and cooperation. The UN was founded in the year 1945 after the second World War to take the place of the League of Nations(Völkerbund), to stop wars between countries, and to provide a platform for dialogues. At the beginning there were only 51 nations who sign the UN-Charta however currently there are 192 member states. These are almost all countries in the world. The headquarter of the United Nations is in New York, additional offices are located in Genf, Wien and Nairobi. The International Court of Justice is in Den Haag, which is also part of the UN. At the moment the president of this organization is the Secretary-General, Ban Ki-moon of South Korea, who attained the post in the year 2007.

Gruß

[Delfino]

The topic of my presentation is the United Nations.

The United Nations or simply the UN is an international organisation whose main aims are to safeguard the world peace and to promote international security by cooperation.
In 1945, after the second World War, the UN was founded to replace the League of Nations(Völkerbund), to stop wars between countries, and to provide a platform for international dialogue.
In the beginning the UN-Charta was signed by only 51 nations.
However, there are currently 192 member states.
These are almost all countries of the world.
The headquarters of the United Nations is in New York,
Additional offices are located in Genf, Wien and Nairobi.
The International Court of Justice, which is also part of the UN, is in Den Haag.
The current president of this organization is the Secretary-General, Ban Ki-moon of South Korea, who attained this post in the year 2007.

Im Englischen werden im Allgemeinen kürzere Sätze verwendet als im Deutschen.
Im Gegensatz zu schriftlichen Ausführungen sind für mündliche Vorträge auch möglichst einfache Satzstrukturen zu verwenden.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

The topic of my presentation is the United Nations.

The United Nations or simply the UN is an international organisation whose main aims are to safeguard the world peace and to promote international security by cooperation.
In 1945, after the second World War, the UN was founded to replace the League of Nations(Völkerbund), to stop wars between countries, and to provide a platform for international dialogue.
In the beginning the UN-Charta was signed by only 51 nations.
However, there are currently 192 member states.
These are almost all countries of the world.
The headquarters of the United Nations is in New York,
Additional offices are located in Genf, Wien and Nairobi.
The International Court of Justice, which is also part of the UN, is in Den Haag.
The current president of this organization is the Secretary-General, Ban Ki-moon of South Korea, who attained this post in the year 2007.

Im Englischen werden im Allgemeinen kürzere Sätze verwendet als im Deutschen.
Im Gegensatz zu schriftlichen Ausführungen sind für mündliche Vorträge auch möglichst einfache Satzstrukturen zu verwenden.

@heyho,
schöner Text, finde ich, und jetzt mit Delfinos Verbesserungen besonders prima. Vielleicht möchtest Du bei den Städtenamen auch die englischen Formen benutzen?!
Genf = Geneva (Dchöniewa)
Wien = Vienna (Wieänna)
Den Haag = The Hague (Häig)

Grüße
Duckduck

[heyho]

Schon einmal einen großen Danke an beide.
Wenn im Englisch die Ständte so verwendet werden, werde ich es dann auch so übernehmen, kommt bestimmt besser an.
Dann habe ich noch einen Handout vorbereitet.
Da sollen dann auch mehr Informationen drauf sein.
Ist zwar jetzt nicht sehr kurz aber wäre sehr nett, wenn da jemand auch mal drüber guckt. Wenns zuviel ist, kann ja auch Abschnitt für Abschnitt korriegiert werden, ist ja auch etwas. Hauptsache der Text enthält weniger Fehler.

UNO
United Nations Organisation
What is the UNO?
• United Nations Organisation
• Founding on 26th June 1945 at the UN conference in San Francisco
• Guaranteed the political independence of all states
• 2nd Attempt at a world organization ( after “League of Nations” * )
• 51 countries signed the UN Charta (26 June 1945)
• UN (Headquarters New York) splits into a complex system
• Save all peace-loving states the inclusion
• Now 192 member states
• Presindent: Secretary-General, Ban Ki-moon of South Korea

What are the main-aims?
• To safeguard World peace and international security
• To develop relations between nations
• Principle of equality and Self-determination* (selbstbestimmung)
• Promoting of international cooperation to work out* every type of problems
• To safeguard the human rights and the Civil Liberties
• To organize the UN as the center of the nations to realize these aims

What is the UN-Charta?
• Constitution of the UN
• Signed by 51 states on 26th June 1945 in San Francisco
• Came into force on 24 October 1945
• modifications of the Charta require a two-thirds majority
• Content: Rules, Member states, votes and another parts of the UN
• 111 articles and 19 chapters

What are the organs of the UNO?
• Most significant organs: General Assembly*, the Security Council, the Secretariat, the International Court of Justice*, the Economic and Social Council
• General Assembly: Assembly of all member States (190), discuss about UN-issues
• Security Council: five permanent members (USA, UK, France, China, Russia) and 10 temporary members (elected by the General Assembly for 2 years), responsible for the maintenance* of peace
• Secretariat: administrative organ of the UN
• International Court of Justice: 15 judges from 15 member states ; clarify disputes between member states
• Economic and Social Council: directs the work of specialized agencies like UNICEF, UNESCO etc.

*Vocabulary:
“League of Nations” ~ Völkerbund ; self-determination ~ Selbstbestimmung ; to work out (a problem) ~ (ein Problem) lösen
Assembly ~ Versammlung ; International Court of Justice ~ Internationale Gerichtshof ; maintenance ~ Aufrechterhaltung

Gruß

[Delfino]

@Duckduck
Thank you for correcting the remaining flaws and the finishing touch (pronunciation).

@heyho
for an introduction and an ending see:
ftopic8862.html

[Delfino]

Schon einmal einen großen Dank an euch beide.
Wenn im Englisch diese Städtenamen so verwendet werden, werde ich sie auch so übernehmen, es kommt bestimmt besser an.
Dann habe ich noch einen Handout vorbereitet.
Da sollen dann auch mehr Informationen enthalten sein.
Ist zwar jetzt nicht sehr kurz aber wäre sehr nett, wenn da jemand auch mal drüber guckt.
Wenn es zu viel ist, kann ja auch Abschnitt für Abschnitt korrigiert werden, ist ja auch etwas.
Hauptsache der Text enthält weniger Fehler.

UN

Organisation of the United Nations

What is the UN?
• United Nations
• founded on 26th June 1945 at the UN conference in San Francisco
• guaranteed the political independence of all states
• 2nd attempt at a world organization ( after “League of Nations” * )
• 51 countries signed the UN Charta (26 June 1945)
• UN (Headquarters New York) splits into a complex system
• save all peace-loving states the inclusion
• now 192 member states
• current president: Secretary-General, Ban Ki-moon of South Korea

What are the main aims?
• to safeguard World peace and international security
• to develop relations between nations
• principle of equality and self-determination* (Selbstbestimmung)
• promoting of international cooperation to work out* every type of problems
• to safeguard the human rights and the Civil Liberties
• to organize the UN as the central international organisation to realize these aims

What is the UN-Charta?
• constitution of the UN
• signed by 51 states on 26th June 1945 in San Francisco
• came into force on 24 October 1945
• modifications of the Charta require a two-thirds majority
• content: rules, member states, votes and another parts of the UN
• 111 articles and 19 chapters

What are the organs of the UN?
• most significant organs: General Assembly*, the Security Council, the Secretariat, the International Court of Justice*, the Economic and Social Council
• General Assembly: Assembly of all member States (190), discuss about UN-issues
• Security Council: five permanent members (USA, UK, France, China, Russia) and 10 temporary members (elected by the General Assembly for 2 years), responsible for the maintenance* of peace
• Secretariat: administrative organ of the UN
• International Court of Justice: 15 judges from 15 member states ; clarify disputes between member states
• Economic and Social Council: directs the work of specialized agencies like the UNICEF, the UNESCO etc.


*Vocabulary:
“League of Nations” ~ Völkerbund
self-determination ~ Selbstbestimmung
to work out (a problem) ~ (ein Problem) lösen
assembly ~ Versammlung
International Court of Justice ~ Internationale Gerichtshof
maintenance ~ Aufrechterhaltung

Regeln der Groß- und Kleinschreibung beachten, d.h. Word AutoFormat nicht übernehmen

capitalisation of nouns
http://www.englisch-hilfen.de/en/gramma ... _names.htm

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Schon einmal einen großen Dank an euch beide.
Wenn im Englischen diese Städtenamen so verwendet werden, werde ich sie auch so übernehmen, es kommt bestimmt besser an.
Dann habe ich noch einen Handout vorbereitet.
Da sollen dann auch mehr Informationen enthalten sein.
Ist zwar jetzt nicht sehr kurz aber wäre sehr nett, wenn da jemand auch mal drüber guckt.
Wenn es zu viel ist, kann ja auch Abschnitt für Abschnitt korrigiert werden, ist ja auch etwas.
Hauptsache der Text enthält weniger Fehler.

UN

Organization of the United Nations (Wie Du die Schreibung wählst AmE oder BrE, ist Dir überlassen, aber sie muss einheitlich sein)

What is the UN?
• United Nations
• founded on 26th June 1945 at the UN conference in San Francisco
• guaranteed the political independence of all states
• 2nd attempt at a world organization ( after “League of Nations” * )
• 51 countries signed the UN Charta (26 June 1945)
• UN (Headquarters New York) splits into a complex system
• save all peace-loving states the inclusion (meinst Du hier: Sichert allen friedliebenden Staaten die Mitgliedschaft zu?, dann besser: warrants membership to all peace-loving states
• now 192 member states
• current president: Secretary-General, Ban Ki-moon of South Korea

What are the main aims?
• to safeguard World peace and international security
• to develop relations between nations
• to strengthen the principles of equality and self-determination* (Selbstbestimmung)
• to promote international cooperation
• to work out* all conceivable problems between states
to safeguard the human rights and the Civil Liberties
• to organize the UN as the central international organisation to realize these aims (Schreibung s.o.)

What is the UN-Charta?
• constitution of the UN
• signed by 51 states on 26th June 1945 in San Francisco
• came into force on 24 October 1945
• modifications of the Charta require a two-thirds majority
• content: rules, member states, votes and another parts of the UN (Was meinst Du hier genau? votes? "another" (sg) passt nicht zu "parts" (pl)
• 111 articles and 19 chapters

What are the organs of the UN?
• most significant organs: General Assembly*, the Security Council, the Secretariat, the International Court of Justice*, the Economic and Social Council
• General Assembly: Assembly of all member States (190), discussions about UN-issues
• Security Council: five permanent members (USA, UK, France, China, Russia) and 10 temporary members (elected by the General Assembly for 2 years), responsible for the maintenance* of peace
• Secretariat: administrative organ of the UN
• International Court of Justice: 15 judges from 15 member states ; clarification of disputes between member states
• Economic and Social Council: directs the work of specialized agencies like the UNICEF, the UNESCO etc.


*Vocabulary:
“League of Nations” ~ Völkerbund
self-determination ~ Selbstbestimmung
to work out (a problem) ~ (ein Problem) lösen
assembly ~ Versammlung
International Court of Justice ~ Internationaler Gerichtshof
maintenance ~ Aufrechterhaltung

Regeln der Groß- und Kleinschreibung beachten, d.h. Word AutoFormat nicht übernehmen

capitalisation of nouns
http://www.englisch-hilfen.de/en/gramma ... _names.htm

Grüße
Duckduck

[Delfino]

@Duckduck
Thank you for taking a closer look.
I just saved the changes which I made until the update of the forum software started.

Duckduck
What is the UN-Charta?
• ...
• content: rules, member states, majorities and other regulations of the UN
• ...