Bewerbungsanschreiben (Englisch) Hilfe

[psychogr]

Erstmal guten Tag.

Ich habe gestern ein Anschreiben in Englisch geschrieben,weil ich mich bei einer interressanten Stelle bewerben will die ich gefunden habe und brauche nun ein kleines bisschen Hilfe.

Ich wollte mal wissen ob ich das Anschreiben so lassen kann oder ob Fehler drinn sind.

Vielen Dank



AXX SXX
xyz
9XX NXX
+xyz
+xyz
xyz@gmx.de



xyz
xyz
xyz 11
xyz
Austria


Apply for a position as an German Customer Service / Support representative.


Dear Ms.xyz,

as an modern and expanding Company is xyz AG certainly
always looking for talented and motivated applicants who can personally and professionally enrich a young and dynamic team.

I personally think that I have these qualities and I would like to apply for the following job vacancy in your Company: German Customer Service / Support representative in Vienna.

In 2002 I´ve finished my apprenticeship and got my degree as an mechanic for constructions. Specialization (thin sheet metal engineering).
In 2006 I´ve finished my apprenticeship and got my degree as an IT Systems engineer.

Currently I am looking for the next challenge and step up in my career and I want to expand my skills and knowledge hopefully in your company.

Iam a team player and with my distinct willingness to learn, I am always striving to develop myself personally and professionally.

I am fluent in German,English which enables me to work bilingually in all areas of my job. I am also a Greek native speaker.

I would be happy to accept an invitation and personal interview with your company and will be available.

Yours faithfully

xyz

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Erstmal guten Tag.

Ich habe gestern ein Anschreiben in Englisch geschrieben,weil ich mich bei einer interessanten Stelle bewerben will die ich gefunden habe und brauche nun ein kleines bisschen Hilfe.

Ich wollte mal wissen ob ich das Anschreiben so lassen kann, oder ob Fehler drin sind.

Vielen Dank

Application for the position as an German Customer Service / Support representative.


Dear Ms xyz, (kein Punkt hinter Ms, Mr oder Mrs)

as a modern and expanding company is xyz AG is certainly
always looking for talented and motivated applicants who can enrich a young and dynamic team on a personal and professional level.

I personally think that I have these qualities and I would like to apply for the following job vacancy in your company: German Customer Service / Support representative in Vienna.

In 2002 I have finished my apprenticeship and received my degree as a mechanic for constructions. I have specialised on thin sheet metal engineering.
In 2006 I have finished my apprenticeship and received my degree as an IT Systems engineer.

Currently I am looking for the mychallenge and step forward in my career and I want to hopefully expand my skills and knowledge in your company.

I am a team player and with my distinct willingness to learn, I am always striving to develop myself personally and professionally.

I am also a Greek native speaker, and I am fluent in German and English which enables me to work bilingually in all areas of my job. .

I would appreciate an invitation and personal interview with your company and will be available at your convenience.

Yours faithfully

xyz

- Keine Abkuerzungen in geschriebenen Texten (z.B. I've)
- an schreibt man nur vor Woertern, die mit einem Vokal beginnen, z.B. an apple, nicht an mechanic!

[psychogr]

Vielen Dank Keswick hat mir sehr geholfen!!!!

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Currently I am looking for the my challenge and step forward in my career and I want to hopefully expand my skills and knowledge in your company.

Sorry, Fehler.