Zeitungsartikel

[marvin92]

Hey Ich soll ein Zeitungsartikel schreiben und würde mich freuen, wenn Ihr mir Fehler korrigieren könntet und mir zudem sagen könntet was verbesserbar ist.
Danke =)

Science Daily (Sep.10, 1974)
Alabama – A disastrous hurricane has killed
at least 8 people in the federal state Alabama.
The public authorities suspect that the number
of victims in ruins still raises.
The hurricane is the most intense hurricane of
the hurricane season until now. Carmen brought
heavy rainfalls across the Gulf Coast of the United
States, and caused significant damage in
Yucatan Peninsula and in Louisiana.
The category 4 storm lasted from August 29 to
September 10, 1974, and affected also the shrimp
industry and offshore oil plattforms by its strong
winds flooding.
Members of the national guard will mobilize to
restore order in the active zone.
Also concerned were the bordering regions, inclued
Morgan City, Louisiana; Brandon, Mississippi; Kaplan,
Louisiana.
For these regions hurricanes aren´t a rarity anymore.

Forrest and Lieutenant Dan invested the money that they made with the shrimp boats in Apple Computer Company, which is why they got millionairs.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Hey Ich soll ein Zeitungsartikel schreiben und würde mich freuen, wenn Ihr mir Fehler korrigieren könntet und mir zudem sagen könntet was verbesserbar ist.
Danke =)

Science Daily (Sep.10, 1974)
Alabama – A disastrous hurricane has killed
at least 8 people in the federal state Alabama.
The public authorities suspect that the number
of victims in ruins will increase further.
The hurricane is the most intense hurricanes of
the hurricane season so far. Carmen brought
heavy rainfalls across the Gulf Coast of the United
States, and caused significant damage in
Yucatan Peninsula and in Louisiana.
The category 4 storm lasted from August 29 to
September 10, 1974, and also affected the shrimp
industry and offshore oil plattforms with its strong
winds and flooding.
Members of the national guard will be mobilized to
restore order in the active zone.
The bordering regions, including
Morgan City, Louisiana; Brandon, Mississippi; Kaplan,
Louisiana were also hit by the storm.
For these regions hurricanes aren´t a rarity anymore.

Forrest and Lieutenant Dan invested the money that they made with the shrimp boats in Apple Computer Company, which is why they got millionairs.

Der allerletzte Satz macht keinen wirklichen Sinn und hat an sich auch nichts mit dem vorhergehenden Text zu tun. Was moechtest du aussagen und inwiefern hat es mit dem Sturm zu tun?