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English essay Korrektur

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Hallo,

ich brauch mal wieder hilfe bei meinem essay und zwar wegen der grammatik und rechtschreibung .Wär nett wenn ihr es verbessern könntet
danke schon mal im vorraus
wenns geht noch bis heute abend, ich brauchs morgen :)


“Imagine you could be another person for one day…Who would you be ?”

This is a very difficult decision because I would be a lot of persons in the world. After long superior I decide to would be Lionel Messi.
He plays every Saturday or Sunday in a stadium with over 90000 spectators. I play football too, but not with so many spectators, but it is a big dream for me. When he was a kid he went to the FC Barcelona in Spain and since 2003 he plays football for this team.
At the beginning in his football career he was to little, to play in a football team but his parents pay money for a hormonal treatment with whom he raised. This all cost a lot of money and the FC Barcelona paid this money because the club sees that Messi is a big talent. A lot of people said Messi is the biggest talent all over the world and that is why so many like him, just like me. Besides he had a technique which not every has.
Messi had won a lot of prizes below the UEFA Champions league, the Spain mastery and a lot of own prizes like Player of the Year of Argentina 2005, 2007, 2009 and World Soccer Player of the Year 2009. This all are successes which everyone teenager wants to reach.
Lionel Messi is a ideal for me because it is very difficult to become a professional footballer. In addition it is very hard to play football if you are so little. But he has created it from a normal football player to one of the best players in the world and that pays of because with an annual gross income of just 33 million euros he is the top breadwinner under the professional football players.
Normally a little player had no chance to make goals but this makes him so unusual, with his quickness and necessity, he can outsmart everyone.
Because of all this reasons I would be Lionel Messi for one day, that I can experience how it is to play for so many spectators and that I can feel how it is to be the best football player of the world.
After all I think everybody can reached that but you must be have a talent and a very much luck to play on the same level like Lionel Messi. For me a big dream would be in fulfillment. But this level in which Messi play is unreachable and in the next years, there wouldn’t be found any player like Lionel Messi.

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deutschland111 hat geschrieben:Hallo,

ich brauche mal wieder Hilfe bei meinem Essay und zwar wegen der Grammatik und Rechtschreibung. Es wäre nett, wenn ihr es verbessern könntet.
Danke schon mal im Vorraus!
Wenn es geht, bitte noch bis heute abend, ich brauche es morgen :)


“Imagine you could be another person for one day…Who would you like to be?”

This is a very difficult decision because I would like to be a lot of persons in the world. After thinking for a while, I have decided that I would like to be Lionel Messi.
He plays football in a stadium with over 90,000 spectators every Saturday or Sunday. (Ort vor Zeit)
I play football too - but never with so many spectators. It has always been my dream, though. When he was a kid, he went to the FC Barcelona in Spain and has been playing for this team since 2003.
At the beginning of his football career he was too small to play in a football team, but his parents paid for a hormonal treatment and he grew. This all cost a lot of money and the FC Barcelona paid this money back to the parents because they saw that Messi is a big talent. A lot of people say Messi is the biggest talent worldwide and that is why so many like him, including me. Besides, he has a technique which few players can compete with.
Messi has already won a lot of prizes with the team, among others the UEFA Champions league, the Spain mastery (Heißt das so? Guck noch mal genau nach!) and a lot of personal prizes like "Player of the Year of Argentina" in 2005, 2007, 2009 and "World Soccer Player of the Year" in 2009. Every teenager dreams about being so successful.
Lionel Messi is an idol for me because it is very difficult to become a professional football player. In addition to that, it is very hard to play football if you are so short. But he has risen from a normal football player to one of the best players in the world. Furthermore, with an annual gross income of about 33 million Euros, he is the top earner among the professional football players.
Normally, a short player has fewer chances to score goals - but he is different and this makes him so unique. His quickness and mobility allow him to outsmart every other player.
Because of all these reasons I would like to be Lionel Messi for one day, so that I could experience how it is to play in front of so many spectators and that I could feel how it is to be the world's best football player.
After all, I think everybody can reach this goal but you have to have talent and a lot of luck to play on Lionel Messi's level. A big dream would come true for me if I could reach it. But this is hardly possible in the next years. There is only one Lionel Messi.
Good luck says
Duckduck

deutschland111

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danke dass du es soooo schnell hinbekomme hast

echt spitze ;)