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[Durant35]

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Michael Jordan
I admire Michael Jordan the best basketball player the NBA has ever had! He was born on the 17. February 1963 in Brooklyn grews up in a Village called Wilmington, North Carolina. 1977 he visiteds the Laney Higschool.
His favorite sport was basketball but in his first year at highschool he was not good enough for the highshcoolteam. So he begann to train basketball. He did it so often that two years later he was in the team. He played so good that he became a “sportstipendium” in the university of North Carolina.
Later he was drafted by the Chicago Bulls. In his first game he trowed the decides point. He became the Top scorer of the NBA. In his third saison he made 3000 points. Then he gots the price of the MVP! The most Valuable Player of the NBA. The following two years again. He was the best player of the NBA.
But then his father was murdered and he stopped his career. Two years later he came back and played again. For a basketball player he was very old and when the team of Shaquille O'Neal won the decised game most people began to doubt at his comeback! But then the Bulls transferred dennis rodman in the defense and they began to be the team they were. Then with 35 years explained Jordan who was six times champion and 5 times MVP the stop of his career!
At 2001 he played again but only in a team which was not very good! The money he gets there he bounties to the families of the victims from the 11.September 2001. He played with 38 years also very well! 2003 he stopped his career once and for all! I think he is an intelligent player and he has also many willpower! Of this case i admit him!

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Könnt ihr bitte schauen, ob der Text so richtig ist! Das wäre wirklich sehr nett, es ist sehr wichtig.

Hi Durant, willkommen im Forum! Aber gerne!

Michael Jordan
I admire Michael Jordan because he is the best basketball player the NBA has ever had! He was born on the 17th February, 1963 in Brooklyn and grews up in a village called Wilmington, North Carolina. In 1977 he started to go to the Laney Highschool.
His favorite sport was basketball but in his first year at highschool he was not good enough for the highschool-team. So he begann to train basketball. He did it so often that two years later he was in the team. He was so good that he got an athletic scholarship from the University of North Carolina.
Later he joined the team of the Chicago Bulls. In his first game he scored the matchwinning point. He became the "Top Scorer" of the NBA. In his third season he scored 3000 points. For this he was awarded the price of the MVP ("Most Valuable Player") of the NBA. In the following two years he repeated this feat. He was the best player of the NBA.
But then his father was murdered and he gave up his career. Two years later he came back and played again. He was by now quite old for a basketball player and when the opposing team around Shaquille O'Neal won the decisive game, most people began to doubt his abilities. But then the Bulls transferred Dennis Rodman in (to?) the defense and they began to be the team they used to be. At the age of 35 years Jordan, who had been six times champion and 5 times MVP, declared that his career was over.
In 2001 he played again but only in a team which was not very good. The money he earned there he gave to the families of the victims of 9/11. Even at the age of 38 he was a very good player. In 2003 he ended his career once and for all.
I think he was an intelligent player and he also had a lot of willpower. For this I admire him.

Insgesamt ein schöner Text, aber doch einige Fehler drin.
Wirklich wichtig: in der Vergangenheit (Past Tense) hat die dritte Person Singular (he, she, it) kein s am Ende.
Verwende nicht zu oft das ! am Ende eines Satzes.
Schaue beim Schreiben öfter mal in ein Wörterbuch, das kann ein online-Wörterbuch sein. Und leider ist nicht immer der erste Eintrag für ein Wort auch die passende Bedeutung. Da musst Du mit der Zeit ein Gespür entwickeln, aber es gibt bei http://www.dict.cc/ eine Reihe von Beispielformulierungen, die Dir helfen können.

Good luck says
Duckduck

[Durant35]

Wow das ging schnell. Hast mir sehr geholfen , vielen dank!

Super Forum !