Bewerbung:Auslandsjahr

[nele.peter]

Ich bitte darum, dass sich mal jemand diese kurze Bewerbung anschaut...ich bin mir bei vielen Formulierungen nicht so sicher.
Dankeschön!


Dear Schoolteam of xx !

My name is Nele Peter,i am 16 years old and i live together with my family in the german hanseatic town Rostock.
I go to the Waldorfschool Rostock and i really like the teacher and the lessons there.
But upon a time i expressed the wish to discover other cultures and to live for a time abroad in Australia because since a long time i am fascinated of this land. It was important for me to visit during my time in Australia a Wladorfschool. So my attentiveness was caught by your webside.
i would be very happy about informations and to become acquainted with the possibilities of the accomodation.

thnak you,Sincerely yours
Nele Peter.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Ich bitte darum, dass sich mal jemand diese kurze Bewerbung anschaut...ich bin mir bei vielen Formulierungen nicht so sicher.
Dankeschön!


Dear Schoolteam of xx! (direkt die Person ansprechen oder aber nur "Dear Sirs" oder "Dear Sirs and Madams")

My name is Nele Peter, I am 16 years old and I live together with my family in the Hanseatic town Rostock in Germany.
I go to the Waldorf school in Rostock and I really like the teachers and the lessons there.
But a while ago I expressed (du hast den Wunsch ausgedrueckt?) the wish to discover other cultures and to live abroad in Australia for a while. The reason for this is my fascination of this country which I have had for a long time. Visiting a Waldorf school is very important to me during my time in Australia. So your website caught my attention.
I would be very happy about more information about your school, as well as about the available accomodation.

Thank you.

Sincerely yours
Nele Peter.

Du musst aufmerksamer sein, Nele. Du schreibst selbst den Namen deiner Schule falsch. Lies deine Texte bitte noch einmal durch bevor du sie postest.

[nele.peter]

herzlichen dank für die schnelle verbesserung...

[Delfino]

But a while ago I expressed the wish to discover other cultures and to live abroad in Australia for a while.

Wem gegenüber hast du deinen Wunsch geäußert?

My sincere wish is to discover other cultures and to live abroad in Australia for a while.

Sincerely yours,
Nele Peter

... und verwende keinen Punkt nach deinem Namen

Herzlichen Dank für die schnelle Verbesserung...

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Steiner Schools in Australia, also called Waldorf schools
http://www.steiner-australia.org/alphabet.html

The National Education Directory Australia Pty Ltd - WALDORF SCHOOL
http://www.education.net.au/search_result.php