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Korrektur Essay Medien

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Hallo,
ich sollte ein Comment dazu schreiben, ob Medien ihr ganzes Wissen preisgeben sollten.
Ich wäre für jede Korrekturhilfe dankbar

Hier mein Versuch :wink:

Media, they are everywhere. Television, the Internet and newspapers, everywhere. And everyone will be affected by them. They give us the latest information and help us to form our opinion. Also newspapers have a big responsibility and it raises the question whether they should disclose all their knowledge to the public. We experience the affection of our foreign minister to men, the marital problems of Brad Pitt and Angelina Jolie and angsteinjagende reports on murderers, rapists and kidnappers. Is it really necessary for society to learn all these things?
I think the newspaper should focus on significant and material things and bringing precise as possible to the point. The first morning reading should obviously serve to get information. The problem today is ,I believe, in sensationalism. This results in reports, which are full of exaggerations and scare the population to some extent. The first massacre at a school in Leipzig emblazoned all front pages. The topic was on everyone's lips, completely new and shocking for us. This was followed in short intervals attacks on other schools in Ludwigshafen and Winnenden. This raises for me the question whether these students are not the first offender took as a model and just get a big media hype and the resulting attention. Their act was introduced into the history. Of course this is with the help of "BILD" & co simple, because after ten minutes everyone from Bavaria to Ostfriesland will know about the incident. The question is whether these examples are included as a deterrent to potential offenders and the awakening of moral concerns or serve as an incentive to just generate a media hype. Then should media hype lead to such acts is this kind of report questionable.
Finally, I would consider the Situatuon of newspapers as difficult. On the one hand they want to sell as many editions and many are interested in rather ornate sensational story than for surveys of the policy. But on the other hand, the excessive flood of information is not acceptable in some areas for me, but anxious or insecure people. Maybe it is the fault of the society, who is swayed by media too much.

Duckduck (Contributor)

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Hi charleen,

ich habe jetzt gerade nur schnell den Text überflogen und ich frage mich, ob Du mit dem ersten Massaker nicht eher Erfurt meinst?

Grüße
Duckduck

charleen

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Hallo,

oh ja stimmt :jo: dankeschön;
könntest du vielleicht noch einen Blick auf die englische Sprache und Grammatik werfen ?

lg charleen

Duckduck (Contributor)

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charleen hat geschrieben:Hallo,
ich sollte ein Comment dazu schreiben, ob Medien ihr ganzes Wissen preisgeben sollten.
Ich wäre für jede Korrekturhilfe dankbar

Hier mein Versuch :wink:

The media - they are everywhere. Television, the internet and newspapers, we are surrounded by information. And everyone is affected by it. It is true, we are given the latest information and that helps us to form our opinion. But it also means that the media bear a big responsibility and it raises the question whether they should disclose all their knowledge to the public.
We learn about our foreign minister's love life and the marital problems of Brad Pitt and Angelina Jolie. We are confronted with frightening reports on murderers, rapists and kidnappers. Is it really necessary for society to know all these things? (Hier würde ich noch ergänzen, dass das "Recht auf Information" = "Right to Know" im Grundgesetz verankert ist, aber dass sich die Medien Deiner Meinung nach auf politische, wirtschaftliche, soziale usw. Themen beschränken sollten, also das Private ausklammern. Also den folgenden Satz noch etwas ausbauen, allerdings bitte nicht alles in einen Satz zwängen!).
I think the newspaper should focus on significant and material things and bringing precise as possible to the point. (s.o.)

Reading the newspaper in the morning should obviously serve to get information. But what kind of information is that likely to be? I feel, the real problem lies in today's lust for sensationalism. This results in reports, which are full of exaggerations and even scare the population to a certain extent. But even that is wanted. Reports on the first massacre at a school in Erfurt made the front pages everywhere. For a while, the topic was on everyone's lips, completely new and shocking for us. This incident was followed shortly after by attacks in schools in Ludwigshafen and Winnenden. That makes me wonder, whether it is not possible that the perpetrators took the first offender as a role model? Was their intention simply to generate a big media hype and be the centre of attention? Their doings will go down in history. Of course this is quite simple with the help of "BILD" and the like, because after ten minutes everyone from Bavaria to East Frisia will know about the incident. (Hier würde ich eher Twitter usw. nennen, denn die schnelle Verbreitung von Nachrichten läuft ja über das Internet!)

The question is whether the reporting of minute details of a crime acts as a deterrent to potential offenders and helps awakening the moral concerns of the public. Or does it serve as an incentive to generate a media hype? In the latter case, this kind of report should of course be considered questionable.

Finally, I want emphasize the fact that the situation of newspapers is a difficult one. On the one hand, they want to sell as many copies as possible and many readers are more interested in sensational stories than in politics. But on the other hand, the excessive flood of information about people's private lives is not acceptable. Maybe the development is society's fault, which influences the media with its interests and is influenced by the media in return.
Prima Text! Inhaltlich sehr gut, sprachlich noch etwas "gemischt" :wink: . Vielleicht möchtest Du die Anmerkungen (blau) noch einarbeiten? Stell sie dann ruhig noch mal rein.

Good luck says
Duckduck

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Duckduck hat geschrieben:
Finally, I want to emphasize the fact that the situation of newspapers is a difficult one.
Sozusagen Selbstzensur/korrektur...

Grüße :luck:

charleen

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Wow, also erstmal ein ganz großes Dankeschön für deine Hilfe und deine Anmerkungen.
Ich habe zu deinem Kommentar mit der Rechtslage versucht eine englische Version zu schreiben, aber ich denke, ich konnte das nicht wirklich gut in die Sprache umsetzen :(

Of course, the right to information is written in the "Right to know"(gibt es diesen englischen Ausdruck?), however, I think that this right is ,in my opinion, unfavorable in certain points. I would prefer it if the media put political and economic issues to the foreground and ignore the private issues.

Ich würde mich über nochmalige Hilfe freuen :jo:

Lieben Gruß
Charleen

Duckduck (Contributor)

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Hallo, da bin ich noch mal!

Wie wäre das hier:

Many journalists justify the breach of privacy with the public's "Right to Know" which is even laid down in the "Basic Law for the Federal Republic of Germany". But although it is very important as far as politics, the economy and social issues are concerned, I feel that people's privacy should be protected - no matter whether a politician's, an artist's or anybody else's.

Hope that helps.

Grüße
Duckduck

charleen

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Nochman vielen Dank! :jo: Ich hoffe es kommt beim Lehrer gut an :wink:
Liebe Grüße
Charleen

Duckduck (Contributor)

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Hi Charleen!

Du hast die Regel missachtest, dass wir in diesem Forum kein Cross Posting dulden. Das ist ärgerlich und geht nicht in Ordnung.

Duckduck