Letter of motivation

[ismael]

Hallo!
Ich muss einen Motivationsbrief schreiben. Es wäre sehr, sehr nett, wenn jemand mal drüber gucken könnte, wo Fehler liegen, oder wo es besonders kindisch (schlechtes englisch) formuliert ist.
Also hier ist der Text (nicht soo lang):

Letter of Motivation


Dear Sir or Madam,

Hereby I would like to express my motivation for studying Physical Chemistry Master of Science for one year at a university in Turkey.
After graduating from school in 2007, I started to study “Materials Science - Advanced Materials”, a new created and innovative field of study at the University of Munich, which I will presumably graduate at July 2010. In this subject, the emphasis was on chemistry and physics, combined with special courses of materials science. For the compulsory optional subjects, assignment and the bachelor thesis I always preferred the special field of physical chemistry.

As a son of a trukish father and a german mother, I know since very early the advantage of the harmonic relations between two cultures. During my studies in Germany my increasing interest induce me to taught the turkish script by myself. So, I strive for the goal to build my academic, linguistic and individual abilities in Turkey.
Due to my willingness and my interest for your study program I am sure I can accept and accomplish the challenge of studying at your university.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

xyz

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So, das wars.
Ich wusste einfach nicht was ich schreiben soll. Hat jemand noch höfliche Füllsätze?

Danke Euch!!

[Delfino]

Earning a master degree in one year is pretty fast compared to other universities in Germany and the States
where it can take at least 1.5 or even 2 years.

Dear Sir or Madam,

Hereby I would like to express my motivation for studying Physical Chemistry
to earn a Master of Science degree in one year at a university in Turkey.

After graduating from school in 2007 I started to study “Materials Science -
Advanced Materials”, a new created and innovative field of study at the
University of Munich, where I will presumably graduate in July 2010.
In this course the emphasis lies on chemistry and physics
combined with special units in materials science. For the compulsory optional subjects,
assignments and the bachelor thesis I always preferred the special field of physical chemistry.

Growing up in Germany as a son of a Turkish father and a German mother,
I knew from a very early age about the advantages of harmonic relations between two cultures.
During my studies in Germany my increasing interest induce me to learn the Turkish script by myself.
So, I aim to improve my academic, linguistic and personal skills in Turkey.
Due to my high motivation and my interest in your master program
I am sure I can accept the challenge of studying at your university.

Thank you very much for considering my application.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

ismael (Unterschrift)

Try to find out who you are writing to or include the proper name of the university.
Btw. did you consider writing in Turkish? You father might be able to help you...

FYI: Turkish language, alphabets and pronunciation
http://www.omniglot.com/writing/turkish.htm