Hallo bin ziemlich schlecht in Englisch und versuch deshalb mein englisch etwas aufzubessern, habe zwei zusammenfassung der ersten zwei Kapitel von dem Buch "are you experienced?" von william sutcliffe gemacht.
Vielen danke schon mal im Voraus für die Verbesserung!
She`s acting differently
The passage taken from William Sutcliffe’s “are you experienced?” deals with two peoples, which names is Liz and David. Liz and David are in an aeoplane, because they want travel to India.
In the aeroplane the seat from Liz is broken and she cans not budge it.
She wants to change the seat with David. He is just writing a book sie dagegen wants to sleep and lean back with her seat.
David wants a window seat, so that he could see the views. And so he ignores Liz.
But Liz asks him again. Can we change the seat?
However David changes the seat with Liz.
And Liz is shaking her head, that why David thinks that she thinks he is immature, selfish, bigoted and arrogant.
He cannot understand why she shaking her head, because he gives her the seat.
David is the opinion that Liz is acting differently and is changed.
Pure blind fear
The passage taken from William Sutcliffe`s “are you experienced?” deals with the arrival
(Ankunft) from Liz and David in India.
If Liz and David arrive in India they search for a bus. In the bus Liz and David notice that no one else on the bus have their bags with them, so they got out of the bus and found ourselves back in a different crowd of People. They put their bags on the roof of the bus. After the bus dropped they off, they go to the Ring Guest Hose.
They search for a hotel. If they arrive in the hotel. In the hotel there were no double rooms available. So Liz and David have to take beds in the dorm. There they get a room. In the room lives one other person, too. His J. a short for Jeremy. Liz and Jeremy talk together. Dave is jealous of Jeremy, because in his opinion Jeremy and Liz are flirting. And that’s why he wants to talk with Liz privately about Jeremy. Liz cant understand Dave. She wants that Dave be friendly to Jeremy, because he is a long time in India and has a lot of information which can help them. After they talk Dave go to take a look at the city. In the city Dave to be persecuted from a little India girl, which wants money from Dave.
Bauche eine korrektur...
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Duckduck (Contributor)
Re: Bauche eine korrektur...
Prima Texte, wenn auch noch einige Fehler drin sind. Aber das macht sich! Immer schön weiter üben, schreiben und posten, das wird schon!tanijan hat geschrieben:Hallo, ich bin ziemlich schlecht in Englisch und versuche deshalb, mein Englisch etwas aufzubessern. Ich habe Zusammenfassungen der ersten zwei Kapitel von dem Buch "Are you experienced?" von William Sutcliffe gemacht.
Vielen Dankeschon mal im Voraus für die Verbesserung!
Hi tanijan und willkommen im Forum!
Prima, dass Du an Deinem Englisch etwas rumfeilen willst. Dabei wollen wir Dir gerne helfen! Achtest Du aber bitte auch im Deutschen auf die richtige Schreibung?
Los geht's!
She's acting differently
The passage taken from William Sutcliffe’s “Are you experienced?” deals with two peoplescalled Liz and David. Liz and David are in an aeroplane, because they want to travel to India.
In the aeroplane Liz' seat is broken and she can't tilt it backwards.
She wants to swap places with David. He is just writing (schreibt er wirklich ein Buch, oder liest er vielleicht eines, dann wäre es reading) a book whereas she wants to sleep and lean back on her seat.
But David wants to keep his window seat so that he can look at the view. And so he ignores Liz.
But Liz asks him again:"Can we change the seat?"
Finally David swaps seats with Liz.
But then Liz shakes her head. And because of this David suspects that she thinks he is immature, selfish, bigoted and arrogant.
He cannot understand why she should shake her head when he has given her the seat.
David is of the opinion that Liz is acting differently to him and that she has changed.
Pure blind fear
The passage taken from William Sutcliffe's “Are you experienced?” deals with Liz' and David's arrival in India.
When Liz and David have arrived in India they look for a bus. In the bus they notice that the other passengers don't have their bags with them. So they get out of the bus and find themselves back in a different ("unterschiedlich, anders"? das verstehe ich nicht ganz) crowd of people. They put their bags on the roof of the bus. After the bus has dropped them off, they go to the Ring Guest House.
They search for a hotel. When they arrive in the hotel, there are no double rooms available. So Liz and David have to take beds in the dorm.There they get a room.In the room there stays one other person. His name is J., a short form for Jeremy. Liz and Jeremy talk together. Dave is jealous of Jeremy, because in his opinion Jeremy and Liz are flirting. And that’s why he wants to talk with Liz privately about Jeremy. Liz can't understand Dave. She wants Dave to be friendly to Jeremy, because he has been in India for a long time and has a lot of information which can help them. After their conversation Dave goes out to take a look at the city. In the city Dave is persecuted by a little Indian girl, who wants to beg money from him.
Gute Nacht
Duckduck
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tanijan
Re: Bauche eine korrektur...
Vielen Dank 
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Bin froh dass ich auf diese Internetseite gestoßen bin.
Die Seite ist super!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Bin froh dass ich auf diese Internetseite gestoßen bin.
Die Seite ist super!!
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tanijan
Re: Bauche eine korrektur...
Das sind die weiteren Kapitel:D
Danke schon mal im Voraus!
They ignore it
In chapter “They ignore it” from William Sutcliffe`s “are you experienced?” David comes back to the hotel. There he catches Liz and Jeremy how they both are on a bed and look together in a map of India. When David entered the room, they stopped laughing.
David has the idea to go eat.
So they discuss about what they want to eat. David wants to eat meat, but Jeremy is vegetarian and Liz doesn’t want eat meat in India, because in India the meat is unhealthy. For this reason they decide to eat in a vegetarian restaurant.
En route to the restaurant they are following from the little girl, which wants money. Jeremy scares the girl. Then tell Jeremy to Liz and David that the girl isn’t really a beggar girl; she is in a gang, which must begging for theirs pimps (für ihre Zuhälter). In the restaurant David doesn’t know what he can eat, because he always eats meat. He decides for rice. After the meal they take a malaria tablet as a dessert. On the way back from the Restaurant to the hotel the little girl follow David, Liz and Jeremy. She accosts Liz, and Liz says very angry that she hasn’t money and shaking her. Then the girl goes away. And Liz David and Jeremy go unhurriedly (in aller Ruhe) to the hotel.
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It’s not compulsory, you know
The chapter “It’s not compulsory, you know” from the “book are you experienced?” by William Sutcliffe’s deals with David’s and Liz first meeting.
The school is finish; the university begins in a year. Group from the school is meeting up for a final drink together. David is also there. James the best friend from David comes with his India girl friend Liz. That’s the moment where David meets Liz.
Liz, David and James are talking about the holidays. James wants to make a world trip whit his school friends. David cans not hear it. His friends are saying that David is a faintheart, because he doesn’t come with them. He goes just for a month to Switzerland to works there.
Liz the girlfriend from James doesn’t goes with James and his school friends to make a world trip, because she wants to visits a special rate (Sonderkurs) in the university.
As Liz hears that David makes a world trip she gives him here number. In this moment David fall in love with Liz.
James to be jealous of David. But David is very happy because the whole time of their friendship, James was predominant, but now is David predominant because James girlfriend gives him here number.
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You are. You are asking me out
In chapter “You are. You are asking me out” from the book are you experienced by William Sutcliffe’s talks David to awake to (bewusst werden) that his friend are right, that he is a faintheart (Feigling).
He wants to make a world trip but he hasn’t the courage (Mut).
He know that when he visit a poor land he cans learn much from it. But he doesn’t like the dirt and the disease in a poor land and so he doents want visit a poor land.
However he doesn’t know what to do when he get back from Switzerland, because all his friends visit other lands.
But Liz is here, the girl friend from James. David wants to call her. And so he takes the telephone and call Liz. On the telephone they like each other and so David invite Liz to a restaurant.
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Hier nochmal ein paar Sätze, die auch berichtigt werden müssen:
Dave tries all that the little girl leaves him alone. He goes fast but the girl traced (follow) David. He says to her that he hasn’t money. But she doesn’t understand him and traced him. After all (Schließlich)
David turns round and push here away. So the girl didn’t follow and David walked away.
Danke schon mal im Voraus!
They ignore it
In chapter “They ignore it” from William Sutcliffe`s “are you experienced?” David comes back to the hotel. There he catches Liz and Jeremy how they both are on a bed and look together in a map of India. When David entered the room, they stopped laughing.
David has the idea to go eat.
So they discuss about what they want to eat. David wants to eat meat, but Jeremy is vegetarian and Liz doesn’t want eat meat in India, because in India the meat is unhealthy. For this reason they decide to eat in a vegetarian restaurant.
En route to the restaurant they are following from the little girl, which wants money. Jeremy scares the girl. Then tell Jeremy to Liz and David that the girl isn’t really a beggar girl; she is in a gang, which must begging for theirs pimps (für ihre Zuhälter). In the restaurant David doesn’t know what he can eat, because he always eats meat. He decides for rice. After the meal they take a malaria tablet as a dessert. On the way back from the Restaurant to the hotel the little girl follow David, Liz and Jeremy. She accosts Liz, and Liz says very angry that she hasn’t money and shaking her. Then the girl goes away. And Liz David and Jeremy go unhurriedly (in aller Ruhe) to the hotel.
__________________________________________
It’s not compulsory, you know
The chapter “It’s not compulsory, you know” from the “book are you experienced?” by William Sutcliffe’s deals with David’s and Liz first meeting.
The school is finish; the university begins in a year. Group from the school is meeting up for a final drink together. David is also there. James the best friend from David comes with his India girl friend Liz. That’s the moment where David meets Liz.
Liz, David and James are talking about the holidays. James wants to make a world trip whit his school friends. David cans not hear it. His friends are saying that David is a faintheart, because he doesn’t come with them. He goes just for a month to Switzerland to works there.
Liz the girlfriend from James doesn’t goes with James and his school friends to make a world trip, because she wants to visits a special rate (Sonderkurs) in the university.
As Liz hears that David makes a world trip she gives him here number. In this moment David fall in love with Liz.
James to be jealous of David. But David is very happy because the whole time of their friendship, James was predominant, but now is David predominant because James girlfriend gives him here number.
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You are. You are asking me out
In chapter “You are. You are asking me out” from the book are you experienced by William Sutcliffe’s talks David to awake to (bewusst werden) that his friend are right, that he is a faintheart (Feigling).
He wants to make a world trip but he hasn’t the courage (Mut).
He know that when he visit a poor land he cans learn much from it. But he doesn’t like the dirt and the disease in a poor land and so he doents want visit a poor land.
However he doesn’t know what to do when he get back from Switzerland, because all his friends visit other lands.
But Liz is here, the girl friend from James. David wants to call her. And so he takes the telephone and call Liz. On the telephone they like each other and so David invite Liz to a restaurant.
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Hier nochmal ein paar Sätze, die auch berichtigt werden müssen
:Dave tries all that the little girl leaves him alone. He goes fast but the girl traced (follow) David. He says to her that he hasn’t money. But she doesn’t understand him and traced him. After all (Schließlich)
David turns round and push here away. So the girl didn’t follow and David walked away.
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Duckduck (Contributor)
Re: Bauche eine korrektur...
Hallo tanijan,
Du warst ja wirklich fleißig. Und wir werden auch gerne wieder korrigieren. Aber ich habe Deine Texte eben mal durchgelesen und gemerkt, dass eine ganze Reihe Fehler drin sind, die Du auch selbst verbessern kannst.
Bitte überarbeite sie noch einmal und achte besonders auf diese Punkte:
1. Der Titel des Buches wird mit einem Großbuchstaben begonnen.
2. Schreibe im Präsens und achte darauf, dass bei der 3. Person an das Verb ein "s" angehängt wird, allerdings nicht an Hilfsverben wie "can".
Sei so gut und mach Dir die Arbeit, dann korrigieren wir gerne den Rest, OK?
Gute Nacht
Duckduck
Du warst ja wirklich fleißig. Und wir werden auch gerne wieder korrigieren. Aber ich habe Deine Texte eben mal durchgelesen und gemerkt, dass eine ganze Reihe Fehler drin sind, die Du auch selbst verbessern kannst.
Bitte überarbeite sie noch einmal und achte besonders auf diese Punkte:
1. Der Titel des Buches wird mit einem Großbuchstaben begonnen.
2. Schreibe im Präsens und achte darauf, dass bei der 3. Person an das Verb ein "s" angehängt wird, allerdings nicht an Hilfsverben wie "can".
Sei so gut und mach Dir die Arbeit, dann korrigieren wir gerne den Rest, OK?
Gute Nacht
Duckduck
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tanijan
Re: Bauche eine korrektur...
Ich habe versucht mich an die Punkte zuhalten, welche ich verbessern sollte. Habe jedoch nicht viele Fehler davon gefunden :S.
They ignore it
In chapter “They ignore it” from William Sutcliffe`s “Are you experienced?” David comes back to the hotel. There he catches Liz and Jeremy how they both are on a bed and look together in a map of India. When David enters the room, they stopped laughing.
David has the idea to goes eat.
So they discuss about what they want to eat. David wants to eat meat, but Jeremy is vegetarian and Liz doesn’t want eat meat in India, because in India the meat is unhealthy. For this reason they decide to eat in a vegetarian restaurant.
En route to the restaurant they are following from the little girl, which wants money. Jeremy scares the girl. Then tells Jeremy to Liz and David that the girl isn’t really a beggar girl; she is in a gang, which must begging for theirs pimps (für ihre Zuhälter). In the restaurant David doesn’t know what he can eat, because he always eats meat. He decides for rice. After the meal they take a malaria tablet as a dessert. On the way back from the Restaurant to the hotel the little girl follows David, Liz and Jeremy. She accosts Liz, and Liz says very angry that she hasn’t money and shaking her. Then the girl goes away. And Liz David and Jeremy go unhurriedly (in aller Ruhe) to the hotel.
__________________________________________
It’s not compulsory, you know
The chapter “It’s not compulsory, you know” from the book “Are you experienced?” by William Sutcliffe’s deals with David’s and Liz first meeting.
The school is finish; the university begins in a year. A Group from the school is meeting up for a final drink together. David is also there. James the best friend from David comes with his India girl friend Liz. That’s the moment where David meets Liz.
Liz, David and James are talking about the holidays. James wants to make a world trip whit his school friends. David cannot hear it. His friends are saying that David is a faintheart, because he doesn’t come with them. He goes just for a month to Switzerland to works there.
Liz the girlfriend from James doesn’t go with James and his school friends to makes a world trip, because she wants to visits a special rate (Sonderkurs) in the university.
As Liz hears that David doesn’t make a world trip she gives him here number. In this moment David fall in love with Liz.
James to be jealous of David. But David is very happy because the whole time of their friendship, James was predominant, but now is David predominant because James girlfriend gives him here number.
__________________________________________
You are. You are asking me out
In chapter “You are. You are asking me out” from the book “Are you experienced” by William Sutcliffe’s the leading character David thinks that his friends are right, that he is a faintheart (Feigling).
He wants to make a world trip but he hasn’t the courage (Mut).
He knows that when he visits a poor land he cans learn much from it. But he doesn’t like the dirt and the disease in a poor land and so he doesn’t want visit a poor land.
However he doesn’t know what to do when he get back from Switzerland, because all his friends visit other lands and he is alone.
But Liz is here, the girl friend from James. David gets the idea that he can call her. And so he takes the telephone and calls Liz. On the telephone they like each other and so David invites Liz to a restaurant.
Hier nochmal ein paar Sätze, die auch berichtigt werden müssen :
Dave tries all that the little girl leaves him alone. He goes fast but the girl follows David. He says to her that he hasn’t money. But she doesn’t understand him and follows him. After all (Schließlich)
David turns round and push here away. So the girl does not follow David again, so he can walk away.
They ignore it
In chapter “They ignore it” from William Sutcliffe`s “Are you experienced?” David comes back to the hotel. There he catches Liz and Jeremy how they both are on a bed and look together in a map of India. When David enters the room, they stopped laughing.
David has the idea to goes eat.
So they discuss about what they want to eat. David wants to eat meat, but Jeremy is vegetarian and Liz doesn’t want eat meat in India, because in India the meat is unhealthy. For this reason they decide to eat in a vegetarian restaurant.
En route to the restaurant they are following from the little girl, which wants money. Jeremy scares the girl. Then tells Jeremy to Liz and David that the girl isn’t really a beggar girl; she is in a gang, which must begging for theirs pimps (für ihre Zuhälter). In the restaurant David doesn’t know what he can eat, because he always eats meat. He decides for rice. After the meal they take a malaria tablet as a dessert. On the way back from the Restaurant to the hotel the little girl follows David, Liz and Jeremy. She accosts Liz, and Liz says very angry that she hasn’t money and shaking her. Then the girl goes away. And Liz David and Jeremy go unhurriedly (in aller Ruhe) to the hotel.
__________________________________________
It’s not compulsory, you know
The chapter “It’s not compulsory, you know” from the book “Are you experienced?” by William Sutcliffe’s deals with David’s and Liz first meeting.
The school is finish; the university begins in a year. A Group from the school is meeting up for a final drink together. David is also there. James the best friend from David comes with his India girl friend Liz. That’s the moment where David meets Liz.
Liz, David and James are talking about the holidays. James wants to make a world trip whit his school friends. David cannot hear it. His friends are saying that David is a faintheart, because he doesn’t come with them. He goes just for a month to Switzerland to works there.
Liz the girlfriend from James doesn’t go with James and his school friends to makes a world trip, because she wants to visits a special rate (Sonderkurs) in the university.
As Liz hears that David doesn’t make a world trip she gives him here number. In this moment David fall in love with Liz.
James to be jealous of David. But David is very happy because the whole time of their friendship, James was predominant, but now is David predominant because James girlfriend gives him here number.
__________________________________________
You are. You are asking me out
In chapter “You are. You are asking me out” from the book “Are you experienced” by William Sutcliffe’s the leading character David thinks that his friends are right, that he is a faintheart (Feigling).
He wants to make a world trip but he hasn’t the courage (Mut).
He knows that when he visits a poor land he cans learn much from it. But he doesn’t like the dirt and the disease in a poor land and so he doesn’t want visit a poor land.
However he doesn’t know what to do when he get back from Switzerland, because all his friends visit other lands and he is alone.
But Liz is here, the girl friend from James. David gets the idea that he can call her. And so he takes the telephone and calls Liz. On the telephone they like each other and so David invites Liz to a restaurant.
Hier nochmal ein paar Sätze, die auch berichtigt werden müssen
:Dave tries all that the little girl leaves him alone. He goes fast but the girl follows David. He says to her that he hasn’t money. But she doesn’t understand him and follows him. After all (Schließlich)
David turns round and push here away. So the girl does not follow David again, so he can walk away.
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Duckduck (Contributor)
Re: Bauche eine korrektur...
tanijan hat geschrieben:Ich habe versucht mich an die Punkte zuhalten, welche ich verbessern sollte. Habe jedoch nicht viele Fehler davon gefunden :S.
They ignore it
In the chapter “They ignore it” from William Sutcliffe's “Are you experienced?” David comes back to the hotel. There he catches Liz and Jeremy sitting on a bed and looking at a map of India. When David enters the room, they stop laughing.
David proposes to goesout and have something to eat.
So they discuss about what they want to eat. David wants to eat meat, but Jeremy is a vegetarian and Liz doesn’t want to eat meat in India, because it is unhealthy. For this reason they decide to eat in a vegetarian restaurant.
On their way to the restaurant they are followed by the little begging girl. Jeremy scares her away. Then Jeremy tellstoLiz and David that the girl isn’t really a beggar girl, but that she is in a gang and has to beggingfor her pimps. In the restaurant David doesn’t know what to eat, because he usually eats meat. Finally he chooses rice. After the meal they take a malaria tablet as a dessert. On the way back from the restaurant to the hotel the little girl follows David, Liz and Jeremy again. She accosts Liz, and Liz answers very angrily that she hasn’t got any money and shakes her. Then the girl goes away. And Liz, David and Jeremy go to the hotel unhurriedly.
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It’s not compulsory, you know
The chapter “It’s not compulsory, you know” from the book “Are you experienced?” by William Sutcliffe’sdeals with David’s and Liz' first meeting.
School is finished and university will begin in a year. A group of pupils is meeting up for a final drink together. David is there also. His best friend James comes with his Indian girl friend Liz. That’s the moment when David meets Liz for the first time.
Liz, David and James are talking about the holidays. James wants to go on a world tour with his school friends.David cannot hear it.His friends call David a coward, because he doesn’t want to come with them. He will go to work in Switzerland for a month.
Liz will not go with James and his school friends, because she wants to visitsa special course intheuniversity.
When Liz hears that David doesn’t want to go either, she gives him herenumber. This is the moment when David falls in love with Liz.
James is jealous of David. But David is very happy because during their friendship, James used to be predominant all the time, but now it is the other way round.
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You are. You are asking me out
In the chapter “You are. You are asking me out” from the book “Are you experienced” by William Sutcliffe’sthe leading character David thinks that his friends are right when they call him a coward.
He wants to go on a world tour but he hasn’t got the courage.
He knows that when he visits a poor country he canslearn much from the experience. But he doesn’t like the dirt and the diseases you meet in a poor country and so he doesn’t want to go there.
However, he doesn’t know what to do when he gets back from Switzerland, because all his friends are visiting other countries and he is alone.
But Liz is there, James' girl friend. David takes the telephone and calls her. They like each other and so David invites Liz to a restaurant.
Hier nochmal ein paar Sätze, die auch berichtigt werden müssen
Dave tries his hardest to make the little girl leave him alone. He walks fast but the girl follows him. He tells her that he hasn’t got any money. But she doesn’t understand him and follows him. Finally, David turns around and gives her a push. The girl stops following David and he can walk away.
Sehr fleißig, prima, aber doch noch einige Fehlerlein. Es wäre schön, wenn Du Dir die Korrekturen genau ansiehst und versuchst, sie Dir einzuprägen, damit Du die Fehler mit der Zeit nicht mehr machst.
Good luck says
Duckduck