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Brief für Auslandsjahr... kann mir wer sagen was falsch ist?

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Ich möchte ein Auslandsjahr in den USA machen und dafür sollte ich einen Brief an meine noch unbekannte Gastfamilie schreiben... könnt ihr mir sagen was ich verbessern könnte? Ich bin nich so das Englisch Ass.... :)

Dear host family,
With this letter I want to give you a view into my life. I'm already very pleased to have my High School year in the United States and I’m excited to meet you next year. I know that my exchange year is only possible because you’re so hospitable and for that I can’t thank you enough.
My name is Sophie ******. I was born on *******. So I’m 16. I live in the village ******. It’s near the small town ***********. It is famous for its choirs. I’m in a special School for music. I get additional education in musical subjects. I sing in a very good choir which is called "**********". It's widely known. With this and my previous choirs, I had the opportunity to travel a little in Europe and Germany. With my Choirs I was for example in France and Denmark. Even with my family I like to travel. In the last years we were in Italy, Egypt, Austria and Croatia. I love to spend my summer vacations on the beach and in the sun. I like summer more than winter. But I’m able to drive Ski and I like it.
I’m a friendly, honest, helpful and open person. I need people around me because I’m sensitive and I don’t like being alone. Most of the time I have good mood because I’m optimistic. At first, I’m usually shy and a bit quiet but that change with time.
My school takes much of time and so music is my biggest hobby. I also like being around with my friends or going out with my dog. I’m very interested in fashion. When I have time I also like to read books. Also I’m interested in other peoples and cultures. I also like drawing but I’m not very talented in it.
I have 3 older sisters. They are 24, 30 and 36years old. One of them has already 2 small children. But I don’t see them often because we all live far apart. My father is a 60-year-old dental engineer and my mother is 46 years old and is a chemical engineer. To all of them I have a good and trusting relationship.
I’m a vegetarian. I’m not demanding in my diet and you don’t have to cook extra for me.
At the end of my letter I would like to give you some insight into my daily routine. In the school time I have to get up very early because I need a little bit more time in the morning. I’m not grumpy in the morning but I need my time to wake up. I come to school by bus. From 7:30 until 13:00 I have the normal subjects and after that, I have for example voice education, piano lessons or choir. At the evening I’m at home.
From my exchange year I hope for many new experiences, new friends and personal progression. I am very interested in the American lifestyle and culture and would like to make my own picture of it. Also I hope to improve my English and I like to spend a good year for me and you.
Thanks for reading my letter, I hope to hear from you soon.
If you have any questions please write me a e-mail to ******* or look for me on facebook.
Yours Sincerely

Delfino

Re: Brief für Auslandsjahr... kann mir wer sagen was falsch ist?

Beitrag von Delfino »

Sophiechen hat geschrieben:Ich möchte ein Auslandsjahr in den USA machen und dafür muß ich einen Brief an meine mir noch unbekannte Gastfamilie schreiben.
Könntet ihr mir bitte sagen was ich verbessern könnte? Ich bin nicht so das Englisch Ass.... :)

Dear host family,

My name is Sophie ****** and with this letter I want to give you a little insight into my life. I'm already very pleased to have the opportunity to spend one of my high school years in the United States and I’m excited to meet you next year. I know that my exchange year is only possible because you@re so hospitable and for that I can’t thank you enough.

I was born on *******. So I’m 16 now. I live in the village ******. It's near the small town ***********. It is famous for its choirs. I'm attending a music school which means I get an additional education in certain musical subjects. I sing in a very good and widely known choir which is called "**********". With this one and my previous choirs, I had the opportunity to travel a little in Germany and Europe. With my choirs I was, for example, in France and Denmark. I like to travel with my family too. In the last years we've been in Italy, Egypt, Austria and Croatia. I love to spend my summer vacations on the beach and in the sun. I like the summer more than the winter. Although I'm able to ski and I like it.

I have 3 older sisters. They are 24, 30 and 36 years old. One of them has already 2 small children. But I don't see them very often because we all live rather far apart. My father is a 60-year-old dental engineer and my mother is a chemical engineer and 46 years old. To all of them I have a good and trusting relationship.

I'm a friendly, honest, helpful and open person. I need people around me because I'm sensitive and I don't like being alone. Most of the time I'm in a good mood because I'm an optimist. At first I'm usually shy and a bit quiet but it changes over time. I'm a vegetarian, but I'm not demanding in my diet. So you don't have to cook anything extra for me.

My school takes much of time and music is my biggest hobby. I also like spending time with my friends or with my dog. I'm also very interested in fashion. When I got some time I like to read books too. I'm interested in other cultures and peoples. I also like drawing but I'm not very talented.

At the end of my letter I would like to give you some insight into my daily routine. During school days I have to get up very early in the morning because I need a little bit more time to get ready. I'm not grumpy in the morning but I need my time to wake up. I go to school by bus. From 7.30 a.m. until 1 p.m. I have the normal subjects and afterwards I have musical lessons, for example, voice education, piano lessons or choir. In the evening I'm at home.

I am very interested in the American lifestyle and culture. So I hope my exchange year will allow me to get familiar with it on a broad base, to find some new friends and to improve my English skills. I'd also like to widen my perspective on the world and my outlook on the future by many new experiences. Finally, I hope that we enjoy our time together during this year.

If you have any further questions please write me an e-mail to ******* or look for me on Facebook. Thank you for reading my letter, I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,

Sophie ******

Delfino

Re: Brief für Auslandsjahr... kann mir wer sagen was falsch ist?

Beitrag von Delfino »

Depending on the plans for your professional future (your dream job)
you may want to consider taking private musical classes during your time abroad
otherwise you may not be able to keep up and progress like your classmates.