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[goaly11]

Dear …:
I am writing to apply for a 4-6 month internship starting around February 2011, to gather practical experience in the ______ . Being a globally-oriented student of international business administration in _____, Germany, I specialize in Human Resource Management. I found out that _______ and I am convinced that an internship with your company would be a great learning experience for me.

During my time at university, I studied Finance, Marketing, Human Resources, Accounting, Financial Maths, Economics, Sociology, Law and Management. Besides the subjects I also have learned a lot in the field of social competence as well as soft skills. Therefore I am confident that these will contribute to my future career goals. While I will have been a semester abroad in Chile I will have also taken extra courses like __________. In my future studies I intend to focus on Human Resource Management on Marketing.

Your country is well-known to me as a tourist destination. My great wish is to work in the area of tour operation. Being a native German speaker with very good English and Spanish communication skills, I am confident that my overall qualifications will be adequate. I believe that with my initiative, willingness to learn and flexibility as well as my interpersonal skills, my business expertise and practical experience in the field of project development & direction as well as marketing, I am the perfect candidate for your internship. I would like to improve my knowledge and experience in the Banking/Investment field through an internship at your company and simultaneously get an insight into your company, the _____ people and business culture. This internship will not only help me to improve my English or my interpersonal and work skills but your company will also benefit.

Also, I will be provided with health insurance as required by U.S. regulations. However, I will not receive any financial aid, so any compensation you could offer would greatly help to cover my basic living expenses.

I would appreciate hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Please let me know if I should supply any additional information. Thank you very much in advance for giving me this opportunity.
Sincerely,

[Delfino]

Dear …:
I am writing to apply for a 4-6 month internship starting around February 2011, to gather practical experience in the ______ . Being a globally-oriented student of International Business Administration in _____, Germany, I specialize in Human Resource Management. I found out that ____ ___ and I am convinced that an internship at your company would be a great opportunity for me to gain practical experience.

During my time at university, I studied Finance, Marketing, Human Resources, Accounting, Financial Maths, Economics, Sociology, Law and Management. Besides these subjects I have gained a lot in the field of social competence as well as soft skills. Therefore I am confident that these will contribute to the career goals for my future.
While I will have been a semester abroad in Chile I will have also taken extra courses like __________.
In my future studies I intend to focus on Human Resource Management and Marketing.

Your country is well-known to me as a tourist destination.
My great wish is to work in the area of tour operation.
Being a native German speaker with very good English and Spanish communication skills, I am confident that my overall qualifications will be adequate.
I believe that with my initiative, flexibility and willingness to learn as well as my interpersonal skills, my business expertise and practical experience in the field of project development & direction as well as marketing, I am the perfect candidate for your internship. *
I would also like to improve my knowledge and experience in the Banking/Investment field through an internship at your company and simultaneously get an insight into your company, the _____ people and business culture. *
This internship will not only help me to improve my English, interpersonal and work skills but your company will also benefit. HOW???

Of course I will be provided with health insurance as required by U.S. regulations.
However, I will not receive any financial aid, so any compensation you could offer would help me to cover my basic living expenses.

I would appreciate hearing from you at your earliest convenience. you should not try to apply pressure...
Please let me know if I should supply any additional information.
Thank you very much for taking the time to consider my application.

Sincerely,
...

capitalise the title of your course / program

* => use shorter sentences

What's the current status of your studies? Which semester now/then?

Which of your soft skills do think are relevant for the job?
Facts...

When and how long are you going to be in Chile?

company: tour operation and Banking/Investment
Are you trying to apply for two interships at once?
but you specialised in Human Resource Management
Are you sure they need your skills in these departments?

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Zwei kleine Sachen noch:

Dear …,

I am writing to apply for a 4 to 6 months internship starting around February 2011, to gather practical experience in the ______ .

Bei solchen Texten ist es grundsaetzlich keine gute Idee, Dinge einfach wegzulassen, denn damit machst du uns das Verbessern schwer. Fuege das naechste Mal bitte etwas fiktives ein, damit es den Kontext nicht sinnlos zerreisst. Danke!

[goaly11]

danke für die schnelle hilfe, echt super.

und die sache mit den verschiedenen departments war auch eigentlich rot gekennzeichnet d. h. wird jeweils angepasst, weil so wie es immoment im text steht ergibt es keinen sinn .