Bitte um Text Korrektur

[saturn]

Hallo, Ich habe einen Text geschrieben, ich weiß nur nicht, ob er richtig ist. könnte sich das bitte jemand angucken und gegebenfalls korriegieren?

In my opinion TV is good. But it's not so good to watch so long TV because it's not so goog for the eyes. A few say that TV makes stupid. I think TV not always makes stupid. It all depends on what you watch. When you always watch long TV and things like thrillers, that isn't so good. I often watch long TV. But there are days where I only watch a hours per day. I like to watch Formula 1, Ski jumping and Rallye, so it comes a few hours together. But I like to watch soap operas and telenovelas like "Sturm der Liebe" or "Charmed". It's better to watch programmes like news and documentations. I like to watch "RTL Aktuell" because so I can see what happens in the world. But there are other programmes where you can haer what happens in the world, for example N 24, N-TV,CNN or BBC. If I watch Formula 1 races I can learn about the countries. For example Australia or Malaysia, if they drive there. They show the country and say something about the country, for example how much people live in the city/counry and they show the important buildings and so on. So I can learn about the countries. Normally I don't know about they,for example about China, Turkey or Singapore. So I think you cal learn something if you watch Formula 1. Sometimes I watch documentations on N24 or N-tV. There they often bring documentations about history. For example they bring documentations about the history of German Democratic Republic or about Anastasia. I am not borned at this time. I was 2 years old as the wall fall. With the historical stories I can see how it was at this time. It's very interesting to see this all. But the programm "Who wants to be a millionaire" is good if you want to broaden your general knowledge. I think it's important to watch TV but you shouldn't watch so long. So I find TV good. The documentations and news are good but the thrillers are bad. So you must have a good balance.

Danke im Voraus.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hallo, Ich habe einen Text geschrieben, ich weiß nur nicht, ob er richtig ist. Könnte sich das bitte jemand angucken und gegebenenfalls korriegieren?

In my opinion TV is a good thing, although watching too many hours at a stretch can damage your eyes. Some people say that watching TV makes you stupid. I don't agree to that. It all depends on what you watch. If you always watch things like thrillers, that isn't so good. I often watch long TV. But there are also days when I only watch for an hour. I like watching Formula 1, ski jumping and rallyes, so that adds up to quite some hours. But I also like watching soap operas and telenovelas like "Sturm der Liebe" or "Charmed". Of course, it's better to watch programmes like news and documentaries. I like watching "RTL Aktuell" because so I can see what happens in the world. But there are other channels where you can get informed about what happens in the world, for example N 24, n-tv, CNN or BBC. When I watch Formula 1 races I can learn about the countries, where the races take place, for example Australia or Malaysia. They show the country and say something about the country, for example how many people live in the city/country and they show the important buildings and so on. So I can learn about the countries I don't know about, for example China, Turkey or Singapore. So I think you cal learn something if you watch Formula 1. Sometimes I watch documentaries about historical events on N24 or n-tv. For example documentaries about the history of the German Democratic Republic or about Anastasia. I wasn't born or much too young at the time these events happend. I was only 2 years old when the Wall fell. These historical stories show what it was like at the time. It's very interesting to see all this. But the programme "Who wants to be a millionaire" is good if you want to broaden your general knowledge. I think it's important to watch TV but you shouldn't watch for too long. So I find TV good. The documentaries and news are good but the thrillers are bad. So you must have a good balance.

Danke im Voraus.

Inhaltlich würde ich das so nicht ganz unterschreiben, aber das ist ja Ansichtssache. Bitte schaue Dir die Vorschläge an und wenn Du Fragen hast, frage!
Wenn es eine Hausaufgabe sein sollte, checke, ob Du Kurzformen (I'm, don't) verwenden darfst, oder die Langformen nehmen musst.

Grüße
Duckduck

[saturn]

Ich danke Dir für die Korrektur. Aber müsste Skispringen und Rallye nich groß geschrieben werden? Es sind ja wie die Formel 1 Sportarten .Da ich aber nich alle Rallyes,sondern nur die Rallye Wrc gucke, sollte ich es noch dazu schreiben.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Ich danke Dir für die Korrektur. Aber müsste Skispringen und Rallye nich groß geschrieben werden? Es sind ja wie die Formel 1 Sportarten .Da ich aber nich alle Rallyes,sondern nur die Rallye Wrc gucke, sollte ich es noch dazu schreiben.

Hi saturn,

ja genau das war meine Überlegung. Eine Sportart selbst wird nicht groß geschrieben, also Du sagst ja "I play football", nicht?

Erst, wenn es ein bestimmtes und benanntes Ereignis ist, schreibst Du es groß. Also Formula 1 ist ein Eigenname der Klasse, die Rallye wird, wenn Du das Wrc - was immer das ist - dahinter stellst auch zu einem bestimmten Ereignis. Skispringen wird erstmal nicht weiter definiert und deshalb klein geschrieben.

Grüße
Duckduck

[saturn]

Danke. Dann muss ich nur Skispringen klein schreiben, denn es gibt die Rallye Dakar wie auch die Rallye Wrc.Dankeschön.