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Samy06

Any mistakes in this resume?

Beitrag von Samy06 »

Oct 20XX - present time XY UNIVERSITY MUSTERSTADT

Bachelor of Arts in Business Administration (Expected June 20XX)
Modules included:
Financial Accounting, Mathematics, Business Law, Business IT, Statistics,Microeconomics
Average grade of X.0 on a scale from 1.0 (best) to 5.0 (fail)

Aug 19XX – Jun 20XX GRAMMAR SCHOOL XY
Majors in Mathematics and Physics
Obtained A-levels with an average grade of X.Y
Jul 20XX – Mar 20XX ALTERNATIVE CIVILIAN SERVICE
XY Neurological Hospital, Musterstadt
Arranged appointments with the patients´ health care professionals
Helped the patients to get to their therapy appointments in time
Monitored the amount of medical supplies in the storage
Oct 20XX – Nov 20XX INTERNSHIP
Sparkasse Oberfranken (savings bank), Musterstadt
Edited and checked accounts with the applications S-Kiss and Lotus Notes
Wrote formal letters to customers
Created a classified advertisement for giro accounts
Voluntary commitment
STUDENTS´ ASSOCIATION XY
Organized an event for the university together with other students
Participated in a presentation training course

Languages
Native language German
Proficient in spoken and written English
(Attended Business English course)
Conversant with Russian

Computer skills
Advanced user of Microsoft Word, competent knowledge in
Microsoft Excel and Access (obtained computer certificate)
Basic knowledge in Lotus Notes and S-Kiss

If someone could check my CV for bigger mistakes, I would be very thankful. :)

Kind regards

Keswick (Contributor)

Re: Any mistakes in this resume?

Beitrag von Keswick (Contributor) »

Samy06 hat geschrieben:Oct 20XX - present time XY UNIVERSITY MUSTERSTADT

Bachelor of Arts in Business Administration (Expected June 20XX)
Modules included:
Financial Accounting, Mathematics, Business Law, Business IT, Statistics, Microeconomics
Average grade of X.0 on a scale from 1.0 (best) to 5.0 (fail)

Aug 19XX – Jun 20XX GRAMMAR SCHOOL XY
Majors in Mathematics and Physics
Obtained A-levels with an average grade of X.Y
Jul 20XX – Mar 20XX ALTERNATIVE CIVILIAN SERVICE
XY Neurological Hospital, Musterstadt
Arranged appointments with the patients´ health care professionals
Helped the patients to get to their therapy appointments in time
Monitored the amount of medical supplies in the storage
Oct 20XX – Nov 20XX INTERNSHIP
Sparkasse Oberfranken (savings bank), Musterstadt
Edited and checked accounts with the applications S-Kiss and Lotus Notes
Wrote formal letters to customers
Created a classified advertisement for giro accounts
Voluntary commitment
STUDENTS´ ASSOCIATION XY
Organized an event for the university together with other students
Participated in a presentation training course

Languages
Native language German
Proficient in spoken and written English
(Attended Business English course)
Conversant with Russian

Computer skills
Advanced user of Microsoft Word, competent knowledge in
Microsoft Excel and Access (obtained computer certificate)
Basic knowledge in Lotus Notes and S-Kiss

If someone could check my CV for bigger mistakes, I would be very grateful. :)

Kind regards
Du haettest deine Uebersetzungsanfrage (search.php?search_id=egosearch) doch auch gleich hier stellen koennen :) . Ansonsten ist der Text okay, ein bisschen unuebersichtlich, ich hoffe du hast ihn in deinem Cv mit Absaetzen aufgebaut ;) .

Samy06

Re: Any mistakes in this resume?

Beitrag von Samy06 »

Ja im CV ist das übersichtlicher gestaltet :)

Ansonsten vielen lieben Dank für das Korrekturlesen ;)

Und natürlich auch für die Tipps in dem anderen Beitrag, sehr nett :)

Viele Grüße

Duckduck (Contributor)

Re: Any mistakes in this resume?

Beitrag von Duckduck (Contributor) »

Hallo Samy,

ich habe kürzlich erfahren, dass im englischensprachigen Raum die Reihenfolge bei der Aufzählung der Ausbildungs-Stationen anders ist als im Deutschen, nämlich von jetzt in Richtung Vergangenheit. Beim Nachgucken im Netz habe ich Beispiele für beide Varianten gefunden, wie es jetzt wirklich ist, weiß ich nicht sicher, aber ich dachte, ich sag's mal.

Grüße
Duckduck

Samy06

Re: Any mistakes in this resume?

Beitrag von Samy06 »

Hallo DuckDuck,

danke für den Hinweis. Ist in der Tat so, dass man anders als im Deutschen die aktuelleren Jobs zuerst erwähnt.

Die relevanteren Sachen sollen einem als erstes ins Auge fallen. Muss man auch erstmal wissen :)

Viele Grüße

Samy