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[Lala007]

Hello together,

i`m new here and I hope you`ll be able to help me...

Wir sollen eine summary zu einer Kurzgeschichte schreiben. Allerdings ist mein schriftliches Englisch echt schlecht. Gramatisch sind bestimmt einige Fehler drin und ich habe leider immer Probleme mit den Übergängen, meine Sätze sind immer nur aneinander gereiht. Das klingt alles zu deutsch. Wäre echt lieb, wenn das jemand korigieren könnte. Vielen Dank!

The short story `Civil War` by Liam O` Flaherty focuses on a revolt of the irish people against the British.
At the beginning of the forth day the Republican headquarter is surrounded an on the piont of capture.
Lieutnant Jim Dolan and Quatermaster Tim Murphy are on the roof from the post. Around them only corpses and silence.
Murphy is fanatically and filled with hatred, like a devil. The other one is a 22 young man, who is very shattered and fears of Murphy.
The situation is hopless, but they still hold their position.
In the morning they are hearing sounds and than they can see two soldiers. They creep up on the house. They just walking into Murphys tramp. Because when they are closed to Murphy he would going to shoot at them. Dolan screams and threw himself on Murphy but he fight against him and treats the Lieutnant with his gun. However the soldiers fired from the sreet and hit Murphy several times. He dies.
Afterwards the soldiers come up the stairs and the Quatermaster realized that this people are his enemies. They appear at roof and Dolan give oneself up to the soldiers, but they shoot in his head.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hello together,

I'm new here and I hope you'll be able to help me...

Wir sollen eine summary zu einer Kurzgeschichte schreiben. Allerdings ist mein schriftliches Englisch echt schlecht. Grammatisch sind bestimmt einige Fehler drin und ich habe leider immer Probleme mit den Übergängen, meine Sätze sind immer nur aneinander gereiht. Das klingt alles zu deutsch. Wäre echt lieb, wenn das jemand korigieren könnte. Vielen Dank!

Hi Lala und willkommen im Forum!

The short story "Civil War" by Liam O'Flaherty focuses on a revolt of the Irish people against the British.
At the beginning of the fourth day of the fight, the Republican headquarters are surrounded and on the point of being taken by the British.
The two main characters, Lieutenant Jim Dolan and Quartermaster Tim Murphy of the IRA are on the roof of their headquarters, surrounded by corpses and silence.
While Murphy is a fanatic, filled with hatred and in this resembling a devil, the other one is a young man of 22 years, very shattered and afraid of Murphy.
The situation is hopeless, but they still hold the line.
In the morning, they suddenly hear sounds and then discover two soldiers, creeping up to the house. They are not aware of the men on the roof and are about to walk straight into Murphy's trap. As soon as they are close enough, Murphy is going to shoot them. But then Dolan screams and throws himself on top of Murphy. They fight and Murphy threatens the lieutenant with his gun. At that moment, however, the soldiers start firing from the street and hit Murphy several times. He dies.
A little later, the soldiers come up the stairs and only then the quartermaster realizes that these people are his enemies. When they appear on the roof and Dolan surrenders himself to them, they shoot him in the head.

Hallo Lala, da ist ja nun doch etwas viel bunt, aber lass Dich nicht entmutigen, durch Fehler lernt man. Wenn Du eine Korrektur nicht verstehhen solltest, frage gerne nach. Einiges ist eben auch Geschmackssache. Sieh natürlich immer zu, dass Du nicht schon beim Abschreiben in Worte Fehler einbaust, das ist ärgerlich, nicht? Und nimm beim Tippen des Apostrophs die Taste neben dem "ä" und für die Anführungsstriche die Taste "2"

Good luck says
Duckduck

[Lala007]

Hello Duckduck,
thank you very much!

Ja, ich gebe mir Mühe mein Enlgisch zu verbessern, aber ohne Korrekturen ist das schwer möglich, also vielen dank!