Eine Korrektur wäre sehr nett.

[Chris00]

Hallo zusammen,

hab schon viel mit gelesen, aber bisher noch nichts von mir gepostet.
Heute hab ich einen kleinen Text. Das Thema ist "My brother(s)"


My brothers

My parents have beside me, two other children. I am the first born, my second born brothers name is Marvin. He is twenty years old. At the moment, he attends the university in Berlin. The subject, which he study is “Informatik”. Every two weeks he spends his weekend at home. Unfortunately, the distance between Berlin and our home is round about 150 km. If he spends a weekend at home, he tells me a lot about his experiences he did during the last two weeks. Mostly, I like the thinks he tells me. Sometimes we talk about problems, which he has to answer in his homework. He must declare the problem with a short statement and answer the problem with a (mostly) small application. Sometimes he ask me about some programming languages, because I have a lot of experiences with programming. During my leisure-time, I spend a lot of time with programming. After I pass the a-level, I will attend an university an study “Elektrotechnik”.

The third born child of my parents is Martin. He is nineteen years old and is a pupil like me. During the next 2 months, he will finish his a-level. After that, he would like to become a teacher. I think that is a very interesting job, too. I hope he will pass all exam with good grades.

Beside the school, he plays guitar. I suppose, he did it since five years. If I remember, how he played five years ago, I fall in faint. Today his skills with his guitar are really well and I am a little bit proud of him. Unfortunately, it was not nicely to hear the sound all the day long. (His bedroom is next to mine.), but today, how I said, it sounds very good.


Würde mich über eine Korrektur sehr freuen.

LGC

[joy]

Hi Chris
Hier ist meine Korrekturversion. Schön, wenn noch jemand ein Auge darauf werfen könnte.


My brothers

My parents have, besides me, two other children. I am the first-born child, and my second-born brother’s name is Marvin. He is twenty years old. At the moment, he attends the university in Berlin. The subject, which he studies is “Informatics”. Every two weeks he spends his weekend at home. Unfortunately, the distance between Berlin and our home is round about 150 km. If he spends a weekend at home, he tells me a lot about his experiences he did during the past two weeks. I mostly like the things (oder thoughts?) he tells me. Sometimes we talk about the problems with his homework, which he has to solve. He must declare the problems by a short statement and answer them by a (mostly) small application. (was ist hier gemeint? Ev. …usually answer them by a short application?) Sometimes he asks me about some programming languages, because I have a lot of programming experience. I spend hours of my leisure time on programming. After I pass the A level, I will study electrical engineering at a university.

The third-born child of my parents is Martin. He is nineteen years old and is a pupil as I am. (Hier bin ich nicht ganz sicher, ob ich recht habe.) During the next 2 months, he will finish his A level. After that, he would like to become a teacher. I think that is a very interesting job, too. I hope he will pass all exams with good grades.

Besides the school, he plays the guitar, I suppose, for five years already. he did it since for five years. If I remember the way he played five years ago, I fall in faint. Today his skills in playing the guitar are really well good (bezieht sich auf skills) and I am a little bit proud of him. Unfortunately, it was unpleasant to hear the sound all the day long. (His bedroom is next to mine), but today, how I said, it sounds very good well. (sounds good bedeutet “das hört sich gut an, im Sinne von “Deine Meinung hört sich gut an”)


Have a nice day
joy

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi Chris, ich gucke eben auch noch mal drüber, OK?

My brothers

My parents have three children. I am the oldest one, my younger brother's name is Marvin. He is twenty years old. At the moment, he is a student at Berlin university. He studies informatics. Every two weeks he spends his weekend at home. Unfortunately, the distance between Berlin and our home is round about 150 km. When he is at home, he tells me a lot about what he did during the last two weeks. Mostly, I like the things he tells me. (oder: Most of the things he tells me are very interesting.). Sometimes we talk about problems he has in doing his assignments. Normally, he has to solve a problem by a short statement or a (mostly) small application. Sometimes he asks me about some programming languages, because I have a lot of experiences with programming. During my leisure-time, I spend a lot of time with programming. After I will have passed the A-level, I will attend an university and study “electrical engineering”.

My youngest brother's name is Martin. He is nineteen years old and - like me - he still goes to school. He will finish his A-level within the next 2 months. After that, he wants to become a teacher. I think that is a very interesting job, too. I hope he will pass all exams with good grades.

Besides going to school, he plays the guitar. I suppose, he has been at it for five years. When I think back to how he used to play five years ago, I fall in faint, metaphorically speaking. It was not at all nicely to listen to the sounds he made all the day long. (His bedroom is next to mine.) Today his skills on his guitar are really improved and I am a little bit proud of him.

Nice family and nice text!
Well done!

Good luck says
Duckduck

[Chris00]

Hi,

vielen vielen Dank euch beiden!

LGC