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Proposal Korrektur

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Dear Committee,
The weekend trip of our college is almost here and last week I asked as many students as possible what kind of trip they would like to have. The following suggestions should express the student’s preferences.
Of course everybody has another point of view, but to many students it is important to have on the one hand silence to relax on the other hand excitement in the evening. So the location should offer a wide range of leisure activities on the day and the night. As an example you can see a cinema, a theatre or a bar. Furthermore the students would like to do exercise after a stressful day, so sport facilities like a swimming pool or a tennis court should be available. Besides that also the meals should be joinable and offer a wide range of variety. In addition, especially the female students would like to have an opportunity to buy presents for their family and friends during this trip. So include a lot of free time for the students.
Not only the leisure time is important, also a suitable accommodation is necessary. There are two opportunities. The first one is called ‘’Briar Park Hotel’’ and it is outside Leightonbury, but there are free buses to and from the city centre. Furthermore this hotel offers a lot of sports facilities like a swimming and an international food is guaranteed. The second choice is ‘’Lakeside Activity Centre’’ which is the perfect place for walking or sailing in the nature. It is like a lodge and therefore it is surrounded by a lot of woodland. The most important fact is that the students would have to care for their food on their own.
The best choice would be the ‘’Briar Park Hotel’’, because it offers the opportunity to go in the city in the night and to do a lot of sports exercises. It is perfect for all the wishes of the students, no matter if somebody would like to have silence or action.
I hope, that this proposal underlined the student’s preferences and that you now found a suitable venue.
Yours sincerely, Anna


Wäre super nett wenn wer zeit hätte :D

Delfino

Re: Proposal Korrektur

Beitrag von Delfino »

diamOnd hat geschrieben:Dear members of the committee,
The time for the weekend trip of our college is coming up very soon.
Last week I asked as many students as possible what kind of trip they would like.
The following suggestions express the student’s preferences.
Although everybody has his own views, but for many students
it is important to have some quiet place to relax and also the chance for excitement in the evening.
So the location should offer a wide range of leisure activities during the day and the night.
In the evening you can go to the cinema, a theatre or a bar.
Furthermore, the students would like to do exercise after a stressful day,
so sport facilities like a swimming pool or a tennis court should be available too.
Besides that the food should be good with a wide range of various meals.
In addition, especially the female students would like to have the opportunity
to buy presents for their family and friends during this trip.
Therefore the schedule for the students should include a lot of free time.
Many students said that a suitable accommodation is also necessary.
There are two opportunities:

The first one is called ‘’Briar Park Hotel’’ and it is outside Leightonbury, but there are free buses to and from the city centre.
Furthermore, this hotel offers a lot of sports facilities, for example a swimming pool and international food is guaranteed.

The second option is ‘’Lakeside Activity Centre’’, which is the perfect place for sailing or walking in the nature.
It is like a lodge and therefore it is surrounded by a lot of woodland.
The most important fact is that the students would have to care for their food on their own.

I think, the "Briar Park Hotel" would be the best choice,
because it offers the opportunity to go in the city in the night and to do a lot of sports.
It fits the requierements of the students perfectly,
So it doesn't matter if somebody prefers to have some silence or more action.
I hope, that this proposal describes the student’s preferences well and
that you will now find a suitable place for our venue.

Yours sincerely,
Anna

Wäre super nett wenn jemand Zeit hätte :D

diamOnd

Re: Proposal Korrektur

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vielen dank für die wirklich schnelle und ausgezeichnet antwort :D
DANKE DANKE DANKE :D