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wäre super :D
danke lg kathi.


Guidebook Entry

If you are spending a day in front of television you aren’t allowed miss the Tv program Two and a Half Man.
Description:
Two and a Half Men is an American television series which centers around a man named Charlie Harper, whose lifestyle is interrupted when his brother Alan, who had just been divorced from his wife, moves in, along with his son Jake. The lifestyle of the brothers is totally different, while Charlie is a ladies’ man; Alan has always bad luck after his separation. Charlie and Alan have just one thing in common - they both love Jake and want the best for him. As a result, they manage to create a little family unit that promises to make each of them a better man.
Why is this TV Program so popular?
One fact why this program is so popular is that a lot of people, especially men love the life of Charlie. Nearly all of alls would like to have such a careless life with a huge house by the sea. In particular teenagers watch this program and no episode is boring, because it is totally comical.
Does it really deserve such popularity?
It has to be said that some jokes are below the belt, but if you don’t take it too seriously it won’t disturb. All of my friends watch Two and a Half which shows that it definitely deserves its popularity. All in all it has to be said, that everybody has its own taste and therefore it is difficult to say whether everybody likes it or not. WATCH it und decide. !

friendly2004

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diamOnd hat geschrieben:Hallo :D

hat wer zeit kurz diesen text durchzschauen ?
wäre super :D
danke lg kathi.


Guidebook Entry

The next time you watch TV you have to watch Two and a Half Men.

Description:
Two and a Half Men is an American television series which centres on a man (oder: "which is about a man/guy...") named Charlie Harper. His lifestyle is/gets suddenly interrupted when his brother Alan, who had just been divorced from his wife, moves in along with his son, Jake. The lifestyle of the two brothers is totally different. While Charlie is a womaniser (oder dein: "ladies’ man") Alan does always have bad luck since his separation. Charlie's and Alan's only thing in common is that both of them love Jake and want the best for him. As a result they manage to create a little family unit that promises to make each of them a better man.

Why is this (TV) series so popular?

One fact is certainly because a lot of people, especially men, love Charlies' life. Nearly all of them (oder: "nearly everybody") would love to have such a easygoing/laid-back/untroubled/quiet life with a huge house by the sea. It's in particular teenagers who watch this programme and no episode is boring because it is totally comical.

Does it really deserve such popularity?

It has to be said that some jokes are below the belt. But if you don’t take it too seriously it won’t disturb you. All of my friends watch Two and a Half Men which shows that it definitely deserves its popularity. All in all it has to be said that everybody has its own taste and therefore it is difficult to say whether everybody likes it or not. Watch it and decide for yourself!
Insgesamt find ich den Text ganz gut. Was ich bearbeitet habe, fällt dir sicher auf. Sorry, aber mir ist es zu umständlich, Dinge farbig zu markieren, etc.

Drei Dinge:

a) "Why is this (TV) series so popular?" "One fact why this program is so popular". Zwei mal hintereinander fast das gleiche zu schreiben klingt - in meinen Ohren - gar nicht gut. Du würdest ja auf die Frage "warum schmeckt dir Pizza" auch nicht sagen "mir schmeckt Pizza, weil...", sondern einfach mit "weil..." antworten.

b) "careless life" - careless ist in meinen Augen falsch, weil es etwas negatives ausdrückt und nicht das, was du möchtest. Du meinst dieses unbeschwerte Leben, das Charlie führt.

c) dass deine Freunde diese Serie anschauen ist sicherlich kein Argument dafür, dass "TaaHM" so populär ist bzw. sein "darf". Da musst du schon was anderes bringen.

diamOnd

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vielen danke für die antwort. und verbesserung des textes :)
ok ich werde mir ein anderes argument überleben, nut mir fällt fast keins mehr ein :(