Der text sollte am besten auf grammatikfehler,rechtschreibfehler und satzstellung geprüft werden.Auch den inhalt könnt ihr euch anschauen wenn ihr was besser findet ändert es einfach.Die frage ist ob es richtig ist in america einen jugendlichen der dreimal was gestohlen hat in den gefängnis zu schicken .
Ich bedanke mich schon ma bei euch allen!!!
Hier ist mein text:
In my opinion it is not right to send a teenager,who shoplift at example for three times cigarettes , to a prison
for teenager because after the third shoplift he would be punished as a manslaughter. It is not fair that
both persons become the same sentence. I think a teenager is to young for the prison. The prison can destroit his future.
In a teenager-prison a teenager can learn more criminal methodes from other prisoner who commit a offence that
is more seriously. Additional he can entry in a clan or a gang who are mugger , burglar or persons that deal with drugs.
The young teenager would commit more crime in the future with better methodes if he left the terrible prison.
It is not good for the teenager if he is coming out of the prison maybe it is possible that he can not get a training
or a job.So he is forced to go on with shoplifting because he has not the money to survive.They influence his
psychology and his private life.His friends lost him and the society have a bad impression of him and maybe
of his family. It is better for the teenager if he become social work.He can learn better things with the social work.
Or he can become a suspenden sentence and his family can help him with the money.
Than the police can be send the teenager to a psychologe an I think his behavior would be better.
In a little time the judge , the family , his friends and the society can see a improvment.The prison
commit a negative increase , but the psychologe commit a positive increase for the teenager.
