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Ich bin Schüler in Ba-Wü und brauche hilfe. Ich musste ein essay machen, welchen ich auch gemacht habe, doch ich bin nicht der Beste in der englischen Grammatik und brauche von euch hilfe. Am Mittwoch muss ich ihn abgeben wär aber wirklich nett wenn ihr in mal korregiern könntet wegen der Grammatik, da bin ich mir nicht sicher ob das richtig ist. Rechtschreibfehler können auch drinne sein. ^^
danke schon mal im Vorraus!!!!
In the 21 century there are a lots of advantages and disadvantages. A topic in the 21 century is the Internet because there are a lot of good things and bad things. The Internet is a large group of computers that are connected to each other, used to send information quickly between computers around the world. It was created in the end of the 20 century but first, in the beginning on the 21 century the Internet was used in the whole world. The Internet is used for many things, such as electronic mail (e-mail), online chat, and the World Wide Web.
Today there are many critic people they said the Internet is a very dangerous platform. The dangerous things are:
• Viruses and worms
• Steal data from personally
• Costs
• Violence (Mobbing)
•
• Addiction
The viruses and worms are created by people they want destroy or manipulate a other computer. They delete or changed dates from the afflicted PC.
Other people do not destroy the data but they steal for example pictures or even more badly the banking information.
In the Internet you can compare prices and taken the cheapest but the case has a chop because there are a lot of people who cheat and collect the money and not send the ware.
A other big problem is the violence on the Internet, especially the mobbing in children. Stupid folks chat with young boys or girls and they destroy the children physically with insults.
The problem of is that every people can went of every side in the Internet, including young teenagers because almost no side is protection for the people under 18 years.
Another problem is the addiction because of this many people are sitting a long time for the own computer and looking in the world wide web. But do not forget, the Internet is a disease like any other addictions (alcoholism and smoking).
But there are many good things that made the Internet so inimitable even:
• Quick information
• Contact
• Shopping
One of the most things that the Internet is used is the information. You can search very fast information for the school. But not all information are true.
Today not all found the right partner in the Disco or on the streets and a good alternative is the Internet because there are a lot of singles dating agency where you can find your right partner. In addition you can chat with your friends.
Besides singles dating agency in the Internet there are a lot of shopping companies with whom you can shop easily and fast. Furthermore the prices are very cheap in contrast to other companies.
The statement “Living in the 21” century has lots of advantages and disadvantages is true because as you can see in my text about this, there are many pros and contras. I use the Internet because I think it is very helpful, for example I search information for the school or I ask my friends in the chat if I don’t kno w the homework. Yes that’s true that the Internet had many disadvantages but I m clever and I know what I do in this situation like the viruses and worms.
English essay Korrektur
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joy
Re: English essay Korrektur
Hi
Bei dieser Korrektur sind die falschen Wörter in Klammern und die Berichtigungen gross geschrieben.
Es wäre gut, wenn noch jemand nachschaut.
Mir ist aufgefallen, dass für das Wort „viele“ fast immer „a lot of“ geschrieben steht. Ich habe hier nichts geändert, würde aber ein bisschen abwechseln mit anderen Worten.
Z.B.: there are a lot of … – das kann man fast nicht aussprechen. Many oder plenty wäre besser.
Gestern 20:11 deutschland111
Ich bin Schüler in Ba-Wü und brauche Hilfe. Ich musste ein essay machen, welchen ich auch gemacht habe, doch ich bin nicht der Beste in der englischen Grammatik und brauche von euch Hilfe. Am Mittwoch muss ich ihn abgeben. Es wäre aber wirklich nett wenn ihr in mal korrigieren könntet wegen der Grammatik, da bin ich mir nicht sicher ob das richtig ist. Rechtschreibfehler können auch drinnen sein.
Danke schon mal im Voraus!!!!
In the 21 century there are a lots of A LOT OF oder LOTS OF advantages and disadvantages. A topic in the 21th
century is the Internet because there are a lot of good things and bad things. The Internet is a large group of computers that are connected to each other, used to send information quickly between computers around the world. It was created in the end of the 20th century but first, in the beginning on the 21th century the Internet was used in the whole world. The Internet is used for many things, such as electronic mail (e-mail), online chat, and the World Wide Web.
Today (there are STREICHEN) many critic people SAY THAT the Internet is a very dangerous platform. The dangerous things are:
• Viruses and worms
• Steal (data from) personally DATA
• Costs
• Violence (Mobbing)
•
• Addiction
The viruses and worms are created by people (they) WHO want TO destroy or manipulate (a) AN other computer. They delete or (changed) CHANGE dates from the afflicted PC.
Other people do not destroy the data but they steal for example pictures or even (more badly) WORSE, the banking information.
In the Internet you can compare prices and taken the cheapest but (the case has a chop) THERE IS A CATCH because there are a lot of people who cheat and collect the money and not send the (ware) GOODS.
(A) AN other big problem is the violence on the Internet, especially the mobbing (in) TOWARDS children. Stupid folks chat with young boys or girls (and they destroy the children physically with insults.) WHO HURT THE CHILDREN’S PSYCHE (or FEELINGS) THROUGH INSULTS.) The problem (of WEGLASSEN) is that every people can (went of) GO TO every (side) SITE in the Internet, including young teenagers because almost no (side is) SITE OFFERS protection for the people under 18 years.
Another problem is the addiction (because of this many) OF THOSE people WHO are sitting a long time (for) IN FRONT OF the own computer and looking in the (world wide web) WORLD WIDE WEB. But do not forget, the Internet ADDICTION is a disease like (any WÜRDE ICH WEGLASSEN) other addictions (alcoholism and smoking).
But there are many good things that (made) MAKES the Internet (so inimitable) SO INDISPENSABLE or SOMETHING UNIQUE? even: (EVEN, SOGAR? oder ESPECIALLY OR MAINLY?
• Quick information
• Contact
• Shopping
One of the most things that the Internet is used is the information. You can (search) FIND INFROMATION very fast for the school. But not all information are true.
Today not (all found) ALL PEOPLE or EVERYBODY FINDS the right partner in the (Disco) disco KLEIN SCHREIBEN or on the streets, and a good alternative is the Internet because there are a lot of singles dating (agency) AGENCIES where you can find your right partner. In addition you can chat with your friends.
Besides singles dating (agency) AGENCIES in the Internet there are a lot of shopping companies with whom you can shop easily and fast. Furthermore the prices are very cheap in contrast to other companies.
The statement, “Living in the 21” century has lots of advantages and disadvantages, SIEHE KOMMAS is true because as you can see in my text about this, there are many pros and contras. I use the Internet because I think it is very helpful, for example I search information for the school or I ask my friends in the chat if I don’t (kno w) KNOW the homework. Yes that’s true that the Internet (had) HAS many disadvantages but I’m clever and I know what (I do in this situation like) I MUST DO IN THE CASE OF viruses and worms.
nice day
joy
Bei dieser Korrektur sind die falschen Wörter in Klammern und die Berichtigungen gross geschrieben.
Es wäre gut, wenn noch jemand nachschaut.
Mir ist aufgefallen, dass für das Wort „viele“ fast immer „a lot of“ geschrieben steht. Ich habe hier nichts geändert, würde aber ein bisschen abwechseln mit anderen Worten.
Z.B.: there are a lot of … – das kann man fast nicht aussprechen. Many oder plenty wäre besser.
Gestern 20:11 deutschland111
Ich bin Schüler in Ba-Wü und brauche Hilfe. Ich musste ein essay machen, welchen ich auch gemacht habe, doch ich bin nicht der Beste in der englischen Grammatik und brauche von euch Hilfe. Am Mittwoch muss ich ihn abgeben. Es wäre aber wirklich nett wenn ihr in mal korrigieren könntet wegen der Grammatik, da bin ich mir nicht sicher ob das richtig ist. Rechtschreibfehler können auch drinnen sein.
Danke schon mal im Voraus!!!!
In the 21 century there are a lots of A LOT OF oder LOTS OF advantages and disadvantages. A topic in the 21th
century is the Internet because there are a lot of good things and bad things. The Internet is a large group of computers that are connected to each other, used to send information quickly between computers around the world. It was created in the end of the 20th century but first, in the beginning on the 21th century the Internet was used in the whole world. The Internet is used for many things, such as electronic mail (e-mail), online chat, and the World Wide Web.
Today (there are STREICHEN) many critic people SAY THAT the Internet is a very dangerous platform. The dangerous things are:
• Viruses and worms
• Steal (data from) personally DATA
• Costs
• Violence (Mobbing)
•
• Addiction
The viruses and worms are created by people (they) WHO want TO destroy or manipulate (a) AN other computer. They delete or (changed) CHANGE dates from the afflicted PC.
Other people do not destroy the data but they steal for example pictures or even (more badly) WORSE, the banking information.
In the Internet you can compare prices and taken the cheapest but (the case has a chop) THERE IS A CATCH because there are a lot of people who cheat and collect the money and not send the (ware) GOODS.
(A) AN other big problem is the violence on the Internet, especially the mobbing (in) TOWARDS children. Stupid folks chat with young boys or girls (and they destroy the children physically with insults.) WHO HURT THE CHILDREN’S PSYCHE (or FEELINGS) THROUGH INSULTS.) The problem (of WEGLASSEN) is that every people can (went of) GO TO every (side) SITE in the Internet, including young teenagers because almost no (side is) SITE OFFERS protection for the people under 18 years.
Another problem is the addiction (because of this many) OF THOSE people WHO are sitting a long time (for) IN FRONT OF the own computer and looking in the (world wide web) WORLD WIDE WEB. But do not forget, the Internet ADDICTION is a disease like (any WÜRDE ICH WEGLASSEN) other addictions (alcoholism and smoking).
But there are many good things that (made) MAKES the Internet (so inimitable) SO INDISPENSABLE or SOMETHING UNIQUE? even: (EVEN, SOGAR? oder ESPECIALLY OR MAINLY?
• Quick information
• Contact
• Shopping
One of the most things that the Internet is used is the information. You can (search) FIND INFROMATION very fast for the school. But not all information are true.
Today not (all found) ALL PEOPLE or EVERYBODY FINDS the right partner in the (Disco) disco KLEIN SCHREIBEN or on the streets, and a good alternative is the Internet because there are a lot of singles dating (agency) AGENCIES where you can find your right partner. In addition you can chat with your friends.
Besides singles dating (agency) AGENCIES in the Internet there are a lot of shopping companies with whom you can shop easily and fast. Furthermore the prices are very cheap in contrast to other companies.
The statement, “Living in the 21” century has lots of advantages and disadvantages, SIEHE KOMMAS is true because as you can see in my text about this, there are many pros and contras. I use the Internet because I think it is very helpful, for example I search information for the school or I ask my friends in the chat if I don’t (kno w) KNOW the homework. Yes that’s true that the Internet (had) HAS many disadvantages but I’m clever and I know what (I do in this situation like) I MUST DO IN THE CASE OF viruses and worms.
nice day
joy