Meine Bewerbung - bitte Korrektur lesen -. DANKE

[Tonia]

Dear Mrs. Johnson,

You are looking for a dependable and self-reliant employee to support your team.

Since June 2008 I worked as an assistant to the management and team assistant at *****, an global acting company operating in the automobile sector and maintaining headquarters worldwide. Due to enforced redundancy according to social compensation plan I was laid off on November 30th.Since 1st of December 2009 I am partly working for the coach of the German national riding team to improve my experiences in all sectors of the assisting job.

After my High School degree I went to the United States for one year to deepen my knowledge of the English language. After returning to Germany I had the opportunity to work as an assistant to the management for an American Event company called ***** where I was able to improve my working skills already at very young age. In September 2000 I started my apprenticeship at *****, an international Transportation company. After successfully finishing this apprenticeship, in September 2005 I began to work as a management assistant for ***** and decided to achieve my education at evening school wit the degree of foreign language correspondence clerk which I received in March 2007. Since October 2009 I am graduating from a correspondence course “Business Administration / Management - Sport” which I will be able to apply in a business setting.

The experiences I was able to gain by working as an assistant for several years allow me to apply my organizational talent, my independence and my knowledge of the English language in an optimal way.

I am looking for a position where I am able to use my abilities and qualifications. I would like to have an employment where personal responsibility and initiative are required. I am characterised by a team-minded personality, I have a positive charisma, the ability to communicate, organisation skills and capacity. Absolute loyalty, engagement and a sense of responsibility are in my opinion just as naturally as dependability and sure instinct in working with customers and colleagues.

With these qualifications, I feel confident to be a flexible and reliable employee for your company and I am looking forward seeing you at a one – on – one interview on your premises.

Sincerely yours

[Delfino]

Dear Mrs. Johnson,

You are looking for a dependable and self-reliant employee to support your team.

Since June 2008 I worked as an assistant to the management and team assistant at *****,
a globally active company operating in the automobile sector and maintaining headquarters worldwide.
Due to enforced redundancy according to the social compensation plan I was laid off on November 30th.
Since 1st of December 2009 I am working as a part-time assistant for the coach of the German
national riding team to gain further experience in another sector.

After my High School degree I went to the United States for one year to deepen my knowledge of the English language.
(What did you do there? work/language course/...)
After my return to Germany in 19xx I worked as an assistant to the management for an American event company
called ***. I used this opportunity to improve my organisational skills which I already had at a very young age.
In September 2000 I started my qualification as a wholesale, import, and export merchant [Groß- und Außenhandelskaufmann?] at ***,
an international transportation company. After successfully finishing this apprenticeship in September 2005 I began to work as a
management assistant for ***. At the same time I decided to broaden my horizon at an evening school with the
pursuit of a degree as a foreign language correspondence clerk which I received in March 2007. Since October 2009 I have gone
on a(n English?) distance learning course “Business Administration / Management - Sport” which I will be finishing in *month/year*.
I am sure I can apply this knowledge in any business setting.

The experience I was able to gain by working as an (management?) assistant for several years enables me
to use my organizational talent, my independent working skills and my knowledge of the English language in an optimal way.

I am looking for a position where I am able to use all my abilities and qualifications. I would like to be employed
where personal responsibility and initiative are required. I am characterised as a team-minded personality. I have positive charisma,
the ability to communicate in English and in German, good organisation skills and the capacity to *?*.
In my opinion, absolute loyalty to the company, full engagement in the tasks at hand and a sense of responsibility
are just as natural as dependability and a sure instinct how to work with customers and colleagues.

With my qualifications, my skills and my experience, I feel confident to be a flexible and reliable employee for your company.
I am looking forward to meeting you for a one-on-one interview on your premises.

Sincerely yours

A management assistant may also be expected to be able to work as a personal secretary
which would include to independently write and proof-read the outgoing correspondence.
So your proficiency of English should be a bit higher than demonstrated by this first draft.

You'll need to focus your skills a bit more and you'll get the job...

Good luck,
Delfino