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Svenja09

Bitte Korrigieren brauch es bis morgen Danke:D

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Ich sollte aus einem Text die Standpunkte von 2 Personen aufschreiben. Muss die Hausaufgabe morgen abgeben. Wär lieb wenn ihr nochmal drüber schaut. Danke :D

Delaney and Jack met in a supermarket and speak about the immigrants. Jack told Delaney that in the last year the U.S. accepted more immigrants than all the other countries in the world. All this immigrants settled down in Carlifornia. Jack is against the immigrants. According to him are the immigrants people which killing the native Americans. But this factual are old news for him. Delaney is shoked about this attitude compared to the immigrants. She can not believe that Jacks thoughts are so vicious. Delaney is not against the immigrants. Her opinion is that the immigrants are the lifeblood of the country. The U.S. is a nation of immigrants and without them, they would not be standing where they are. Her argues that even her grandmother, which is Irish, and her grandfather, which came from Bremen, are immigrants. Jack is not convinced about this statement. In his opinion the immigrants cost lots of money for the native. He refers about a San Diego Study which implies that the illegals contributed seventy million in tax revenue and on the other hand they used up two hundred and forty million in service. Delaney disagrees. She finds that everyone deserves a chance. The Mexicans would assimilate just like the other countries.
All in all Jack is against the immigrants and he is thinking that they cost a lot of money. Delaney is not against the immigrants. Her opinion is that the immigrants are very important for the nation.
I am not against the immigrants. There are very refined, nice and sincere immigrants but on the other side there are antisocial and rebellious. But we have to think that every native country has nice and antisocial immigrants. I have nothing againgst the immigants, but I think the immigrants should assimilate a little bit at the nation. If I go to England I do not speak German I try to speak English. Because of that I think in Germany are lots of immigrants which do not assimilate to the german culture.

Lg

Delfino

Re: Bitte Korrigieren brauch es bis morgen Danke:D

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Svenja09 hat geschrieben:Ich sollte aus einem Text die Standpunkte von 2 Personen entnehmen und aufschreiben.
Ich muss die Hausaufgabe morgen abgeben. Wäre lieb wenn ihr noch einmal korrekturlesen würdet.
Danke :D


Delaney and Jack met in a supermarket and spoke about the immigrants. Jack told Delaney that in the last year the USA accepted
more immigrants than all the other countries in the world. A large amount of these immigrants settled down in Carlifornia.
Jack is against the acceptance and integration of immigrants. According to him the immigrants are people who kill
the real Americans. These facts are old news for him. But Delaney is shoked about his attitude towards immigrants.
She can not believe that Jack's thoughts are so vicious. Delaney is not against integration of immigrants. In her opinion
the immigrants are the lifeblood of the country. The American nation is a nation of immigrants. Without all of them the USA would not be
what it's today
. Her argument is that even her grandmother, who is Irish, and her grandfather, who came from Bremen, are immigrants.
Jack is not convinced by this statement. In his opinion the immigrants just cost a lot of money. He refers to the San Diego Study
which implies that the illegal immigrants contributed to seventy million in tax revenue. On the other hand they used up two hundred and forty million in service.
Delaney disagrees. She thinks that everyone deserves a chance. The Mexicans will be integrated just like the people from other countries.

All in all Jack is against the immigrants and he thinks that they cost a lot of money.
Delaney is not against the immigrants. Her opinion is that the immigrants are very important for the USA.

I am not against the immigrants. There are very nice and sincere immigrants, on the other hand there are antisocial and rebellious ones too.
However, we have to keep in mind that every country has nice and antisocial immigrants. I have nothing againgst the immigants,
but I think that the immigrants need to try to adapte their customs to integrate themself in the culture of the host country. For instance
if I go to England I try to communicate in English and I do not expect that the people speak German. I think in Germany are a lot of immigrants
which do not try to integrate themself in the German culture.

joy

Re: Bitte Korrigieren brauch es bis morgen Danke:D

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However, we have to keep in mind that every country has nice and antisocial immigrants. I have nothing againgst the IMMIGRANTS (nicht immigants)

but I think that the immigrants need to try to ADAPT their customs to integrate THEMSELVES (nicht themself) in the culture of the host country. For instance

if I go to England I try to communicate in English and I do not expect that the people speak German. I think in Germany are a lot of immigrants
which do not try to integrate THEMSELVES (nicht themself) in the German culture.

Schönen Abend
joy

Delfino

Re: Bitte Korrigieren brauch es bis morgen Danke:D

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Danke für die Korrektur!