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[Awesome]

Hallo,

es waere nett, wenn jemand mal darueber schauen koennte.


Romeo Phillion


Romeo Phillion was born in 1939. He grew up in East of Ottawa and had attended the St. Joseph’s School till he got raped there. After his graduation he studied and then he worked as an accountant. He was in jail for over 31 years.

Timeline what happened:

1967: On the 9th August Ottawa firefighter Leopold was stabbed to death. While this happened Romeo was at a gas station in Trenton, Ontario having his car repaired. The police believed him.

1972: Romeo Phillion and another man were arrested in connection with a robbery. Romeo said he would confess if they let his alleged robbery accomplice go. Romeo was convicted of the murder though he immediately recanted and has maintained his innocence ever since. The trial judge sentenced him to life imprisonment with no chance of parole for ten years.

1974: On the 3rd September an appeal to the Court of Appeal was dismissed.

1977: A further and coincident the last appeal to the Supreme Court of Canada was dismissed on the 22nd of March.

2003: On the 23rd of July Romeo was released on bond based on the discovery of prosecution reports proving the police verified his alibi in 1968, and concluded he could not have committed the murder.

This case is significant because he is the longest wrongful imprisonment in Canada. It illustrates how filthy the police sometimes works and simply ignores evidence as well as it can end when you confess once. It also is amazing how a person can say “I feel like a million bucks” smiling directly after being in prison for over 31 years innocently. It seems that he does not have any disease from this terrible 31 years.



Gruss Awesome

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Hi Awesome,

bevor ich das verbessere, ein Tipp: Timelines werden im Praesens geschrieben, aehnlich eines Nachrichtenberichts. Um 10.23 stuermen bewaffnete Raeuber die Sparkassenfiliale in Potsdam...

[Awesome]

Hi Keswick,

darueber habe ich auch schon nachgedacht, doch ich dachte ich koennte auch das Past benutzen da ich erstens geschirbene habe "Timeline what happened" und zweitens ich auch schon Timelines im Past gesehen habe. Aber ich denke mal dass du genau weisst wovon du sprichst, und somit stelle ich nun eine neuer Version rein, die das Simple Present benutzt.


Romeo Phillion


Romeo Phillion was born in 1939. He grew up in East of Ottawa and had attended the St. Joseph’s School till he got raped there. After his graduation he studied and then he worked as an accountant. He was in jail for over 31 years.

Timeline what happened:

1967: On the 9th August Ottawa firefighter Leopold is stabbed to death. While this happen Romeo is at a gas station in Trenton, Ontario having his car repaired. The police believes him.

1972: Romeo Phillion and another man are arrested in connection with a robbery. Romeo says he will confess if they let his alleged robbery accomplice go. Romeo is convicted of the murder though he immediately recante and maintaines his innocence ever since. The trial judge sentences him to life imprisonment with no chance of parole for ten years.

1974: On the 3rd September an appeal to the Court of Appeal is dismissed.

1977: A further and coincident the last appeal to the Supreme Court of Canada is dismissed on the 22nd of March.

2003: On the 23rd of July Romeo is released on bond based on the discovery of prosecution reports proving the police verifies his alibi in 1968, and concludes he could not have committed the murder.

This case is significant because he is the longest wrongful imprisonment in Canada. It illustrates how filthy the police sometimes works and simply ignores evidence as well as it can end when you confess once. It also is amazing how a person can say “I feel like a million bucks” smiling directly after being in prison for over 31 years innocently. It seems that he does not have any disease from this terrible 31 years.






mfg Awesome

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi Keswick,

darueber habe ich auch schon nachgedacht, doch ich dachte, ich koennte auch das Past benutzen, da ich erstens geschrieben habe "Timeline what happened" und ich zweitens auch schon Timelines im Past gesehen habe. Aber ich denke mal, dass Du genau weisst, wovon du sprichst, und somit stelle ich nun eine neuer Version rein, die das Simple Present benutzt.

Hi Awesome, ich bin's mal wieder .
Ob Timelines im Past oder Present geschrieben werden, das weiß ich nicht, aber ich gucke den Text mal durch, OK?


Romeo Phillion


Romeo Phillion was born in 1939. He grew up in the east of Ottawa (also im Osten der Stadt Ottawa, oder östlich von Ottawa, dann wäre es "in a village east of Ottawa") and had attended the St. Joseph’s School till he got raped there. After his graduation he studied what?? and then he worked as an accountant. He was in jail for over 31 years.

Timeline of what happened:

1967: On the 9th August Ottawa firefighter Leopold is stabbed to death. While this happens, Romeo is having his car repaired at a gas station in Trenton, Ontario. The police believes him.

1972: Romeo Phillion and another man are arrested in connection with a robbery. (Wenn er wegen Mordes angeklagt wird, muss da doch jemand zu Tode gekommen sein?) Romeo says he will confess (to the murder of Leopold??) if they let his alleged robbery accomplice go. Romeo is charged with (= angeklagt wegen Mordes?) murder although he immediately withdraws his confession and has maintained his innocence ever since. The trial judge sentences him to life imprisonment with no chance of parole for ten years.

1974: On the 3rd September an appeal to the Court of Appeal is dismissed.

1977: A further and coincident??? the last verstehe ich nicht appeal to the Supreme Court of Canada is dismissed on the 22nd of March.

2003: On the 23rd of July Romeo is released on (bail?? = auf Kaution, oder on license = auf Bewährung??) based on the discovery of prosecution reports which prove that the police have verified his alibi in 1968, and comes to the conclusion that Phillion cannot have committed the murder.

This case is significant because it is the longest imprisonment based on a wrongful conviction in Canada. It illustrates how neglectful the police sometimes works, how evidence is simply ignored and what the result can be when you try to withdraw a confession. It is also amazing how a person can say “I feel like a million bucks” and smile directly after having innocently been in prison for over 31 years. It seems that he does not suffer any disease (Krankheit???) after those terrible 31 years.






mfg Awesome

Grüße von
Duckduck

[Awesome]

Hi Duckduck,

danke fuer die Korrektur. Ich habe mal die Sachen beantwortet, die du nicht verstanden hast, weil ich sie wohl zu unklar ausgedrueckt habe.

mfg Awesome

Hi Keswick,

darueber habe ich auch schon nachgedacht, doch ich dachte, ich koennte auch das Past benutzen, da ich erstens geschrieben habe "Timeline what happened" und ich zweitens auch schon Timelines im Past gesehen habe. Aber ich denke mal, dass Du genau weisst, wovon du sprichst, und somit stelle ich nun eine neuer Version rein, die das Simple Present benutzt.

Hi Awesome, ich bin's mal wieder .
Ob Timelines im Past oder Present geschrieben werden, das weiß ich nicht, aber ich gucke den Text mal durch, OK?


Romeo Phillion


Romeo Phillion was born in 1939. He grew up in the east of Ottawa (also im Osten der Stadt Ottawa, oder östlich von Ottawa, dann wäre es "in a village east of Ottawa") and had attended the St. Joseph’s School till he got raped there. After his graduation he studied what?? (PONS: to study = sich ausbilden) and then he worked as an accountant. He was in jail for over 31 years.

Timeline of what happened:

1967: On the 9th August Ottawa firefighter Leopold is stabbed to death. While this happens, Romeo is having his car repaired at a gas station in Trenton, Ontario. The police believes him.

1972: Romeo Phillion and another man are arrested in connection with a robbery. (Wenn er wegen Mordes angeklagt wird, muss da doch jemand zu Tode gekommen sein?) (Korrekt, aber es geh um einen Raub)Romeo says he will confess (to the murder of Leopold??) if they let his alleged robbery accomplice go. Romeo is charged with (= angeklagt wegen Mordes?) murder although he immediately withdraws his confession and has maintained his innocence ever since. The trial judge sentences him to life imprisonment with no chance of parole for ten years.

1974: On the 3rd September an appeal to the Court of Appeal is dismissed.

1977: A further and coincident??? the last verstehe ich nicht(ein weiterer und gleichzeitig letzter Einspruch...) appeal to the Supreme Court of Canada is dismissed on the 22nd of March.

2003: On the 23rd of July Romeo is released on (bail?? = auf Kaution, oder on license = auf Bewährung??) based on the discovery of prosecution reports which prove that the police have verified his alibi in 1968, and comes to the conclusion that Phillion cannot have committed the murder.

This case is significant because it is the longest imprisonment based on a wrongful conviction in Canada. It illustrates how neglectful the police sometimes works, how evidence is simply ignored and what the result can be when you try to withdraw a confession. It is also amazing how a person can say “I feel like a million bucks” and smile directly after having innocently been in prison for over 31 years. It seems that he does not suffer any disease (Krankheit???) )(aftermath)after those terrible 31 years.






mfg Awesome

Grüße von
Duckduck

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi Duckduck,

danke fuer die Korrektur. Ich habe mal die Sachen beantwortet, die du nicht verstanden hast, weil ich sie wohl zu unklar ausgedrueckt habe.

mfg Awesome

Hi Keswick,

darueber habe ich auch schon nachgedacht, doch ich dachte, ich koennte auch das Past benutzen, da ich erstens geschrieben habe "Timeline what happened" und ich zweitens auch schon Timelines im Past gesehen habe. Aber ich denke mal, dass Du genau weisst, wovon du sprichst, und somit stelle ich nun eine neuer Version rein, die das Simple Present benutzt.

Hi Awesome, ich bin's mal wieder .
Ob Timelines im Past oder Present geschrieben werden, das weiß ich nicht, aber ich gucke den Text mal durch, OK?


Romeo Phillion


Romeo Phillion was born in 1939. He grew up in the east of Ottawa (also im Osten der Stadt Ottawa, oder östlich von Ottawa, dann wäre es "in a village east of Ottawa") and had attended the St. Joseph’s School till he got raped there. After his graduation he studied what?? (PONS: to study = sich ausbilden)(OK, ich kenne es mehr mit Objekt als studieren, z.B. "study law") and then he worked as an accountant. He was in jail for over 31 years.

Timeline of what happened:

1967: On the 9th August Ottawa firefighter Leopold is stabbed to death. While this happens, Romeo is having his car repaired at a gas station in Trenton, Ontario. The police believes him.

1972: Romeo Phillion and another man are arrested in connection with a robbery. (Wenn er wegen Mordes angeklagt wird, muss da doch jemand zu Tode gekommen sein?) (Korrekt, aber es geh um einen Raub) (Da weiß ich ja nun nicht, wofür Du diesen Text brauchst, aber vielleicht machst Du besser noch klarer, für welchen Mord er verurteilt wird, also an Leopold oder an einem anderen?) Romeo says he will confess (to the murder of Leopold??) if they let his alleged robbery accomplice go. Romeo is charged with (= angeklagt wegen Mordes?) murder although he immediately withdraws his confession and has maintained his innocence ever since. The trial judge sentences him to life imprisonment with no chance of parole for ten years.

1974: On the 3rd September an appeal to the Court of Appeal is dismissed.

1977: A further and coincident??? the last verstehe ich nicht(ein weiterer und gleichzeitig letzter Einspruch...) (Aha, dann müsste es aber das Adverb "coincidently" sein, oder Du sagst etwa "the second and at the same time last appeal..") appeal to the Supreme Court of Canada is dismissed on the 22nd of March.

2003: On the 23rd of July Romeo is released on (bail?? = auf Kaution, oder on license = auf Bewährung??) based on the discovery of prosecution reports which prove that the police have verified his alibi in 1968, and comes to the conclusion that Phillion cannot have committed the murder.

This case is significant because it is the longest imprisonment based on a wrongful conviction in Canada. It illustrates how neglectful the police sometimes works, how evidence is simply ignored and what the result can be when you try to withdraw a confession. It is also amazing how a person can say “I feel like a million bucks” and smile directly after having innocently been in prison for over 31 years. It seems that he does not suffer from any disease (Krankheit???) )(aftermath)after those terrible 31 years.






mfg Awesome

Grüße von
Duckduck

Nochmal Grüße
Duckduck

[Awesome]

Danke nochmals.

Habe gestern aber noch 2 Punkte vergessen.

1. The police believes him.

Warum hast du den Fehler als "spelling" Fehler angestrichen und nicht als stilistischer Fehler? Ich denke naemlich, dass dies nicht falsch ist, sondern einfach nur anders klingt oder anders betont. Bin ich da richtig oder ist das in dieser Sache wirklich falsch(taete mich wundern).

2. released on bond = released on bail (amerikanisches Englisch) Das ist der Grund warum ich es benutzt habe. Vieleicht ist dieser Ausdruck aber auch umganssprachlich.


mfg Awesome

,

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Danke nochmals.

Habe gestern aber noch 2 Punkte vergessen.

1. The police believes him.

Warum hast du den Fehler als "spelling" Fehler angestrichen und nicht als stilistischer Fehler? Ich denke naemlich, dass dies nicht falsch ist, sondern einfach nur anders klingt oder anders betont. Bin ich da richtig oder ist das in dieser Sache wirklich falsch (taete mich wundern).

Hallo Awesome,
in diesem speziellen Fall habe ich selbst erst in diesem Forum gelernt, dass "police" nur im Plural gebraucht wird. Überzeuge Dich auf:
http://www.englisch-hilfen.de/grammar/s ... plural.htm

2. released on bond = released on bail (amerikanisches Englisch) Das ist der Grund warum ich es benutzt habe. Vieleicht ist dieser Ausdruck aber auch umganssprachlich.

Hier ist es einfach so, dass ich den Ausdruck nicht kenne und ihn auch nicht gefunden habe. Das ist aber nur eine Frage des Wörterbuches. Wenn er da steht, kannst Du ihn natürlich nehmen. Sorry

Grüße von
Duckduck

[Awesome]

Hi nochmals,

1. Danke fuer den Tipp mit "police". Ich dachte dieses Wort faelle unter die Katerogie "Singular oder Plural bei Namen für Gruppen von Menschen", wie zum Beispiel "class" oder "family".

2. Ich selbst haette diesen Ausdruck wohl nie benutzt wenn ich ihn nicht bei meiner Internetrecherche nach "Romeo P." gefunden haette und mehr oder weniger ohne nachzudenken ihn kopiert habe.


mfg