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TEENAGER YEARS
THE BEST YEARS OF OUR LIVES!?

The most people say: All was better in my youth. But what is better, when your parents say what to do? I think all kinds of Generations have advantages and disadvantages.
But now I want to tell you about youth.
Deine Jugend prägt dich: Your friends, family school and your hobbies are very important for your development.
Your friend are very very important for you, or? Friends are more important than family for the young people; Friends spend a lot of time together: they make sport go shopping, go to the cinema, have parties, help with problems and do homework.
The second position gets the family or the hobby:
The hobbies of young people are: meet friends, watch TV go to parties or to a youth club do sport, make and hear music, surf in the internet and read books.
A lot of teenagers say: My adults very strict. But your adults are cool, too: You get pocket money, the buy your food, clothes, games and activities, they understand your problems and o on.
Now we are in the last theme. The problems: Teenagers have a lot of problems: for example the school or with friend or with the fist love.
All in all I think the disadvantages are the problems of young people. The advantages are the new discovery in these years.


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Ännchen hat geschrieben:TEENAGE YEARS
THE BEST YEARS OF OUR LIVES?


Most people say: When I was a child everything was better.
But what is so much better when your parents always tell you
what you can do and what you can not do?
I think all stages of our lives have their advantages and disadvantages.

I will tell you something about being young.Your teenage years influence you.
Your friends, your family, your hobbies and the school you attend
are very important for your future development.
For young people friends are often more important than the own family.
Your know your friends are most important for you, right?
You spend a lot of time with each other. Together friends go shopping
or go to the cinema, do sport, do their homework and have great parties.
They help each other with any kind of problem.

The second most important influence is the family or the hobby.
The most common hobbies of todays young people are:
meeting with their friends, watching TV, hearing music,
using the Internet, going to parties or to a youth club.
A lot of teenagers say: My parents are very strict.
But there are some advantages of having parents too.
You get pocket money. They pay for your food, your clothes,
your games and other leisure activities. Most of them try to
understand your problems and want to help you to solve them.

Being a teenager is not always fun. They can have a lot of problems too.
For example there could be problems at school, misunderstandings
with your friends or with your first love.

All in all I think the biggest disadvantage of the teenage years are the individual problems.
The biggest advantages is the chance to discover yourself during these years.

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