Hallo,
ich muss in englisch ein plakat zum thema traum-reiseziel gestalten und habe mich dabei für kalifornien entschieden. da sich aber fehler sehr schlecht machen auf einem plakat, wollte ich fragen ob vielleicht mal jemand auf fahler rübergucken könnte. ich bin nämlich nicht so super in englischer grammatik.
das wäre echt nett.
danke schon im voraus.
I have decided for California as my dream Holiday destination. This is because I have seen very often things about California on television and that impressed me a lot. I would like to go there to visit different sights and to get impressions about the country and the people living there.
California
Area: 424.000 square kilometer
population: 35 Mio. (82,5 pro km²)
Capitol: Sacramento (435.000 population)
California is a land of contrasts. You can find the highest mountain (Mount Whitney 4,418 metres) only some miles away from the lowest point on the western hemisphere in Death Valley (86 metres below sea level).
Since the 12.01.2009, the USA-travelers from specific country's have to book after a special application procedure (ESTA) among the USA-authorities.
Who is not declared is not allowed to enter the country! The US-authorities advice to announce at least 72 hours before the trip starts. At these process you will become many questions to your person. The German citizen require an own machine-readable passport (color Bordeaux), which has to be valid for the period of your stay. Older ones, not machine_readable or temporary passports are unaccepted for the entry without visa.
Los Angles has an area of 1200 square kilometers and for that is L.A. the largest city in the state of California and the second largest in the United States. It has 15 million inhabitants, thereof 3.5 million inhabitants in the Downtown. Los Angeles is one of the world centers of business, international trade, entertainment, culture, media, fashion, science, technology and education.
The highest Skyscraper is the Interstate Bank with 257 meters and the most famous sights are the Walk of Fame and the Chinese Theater at the Hollywood Boulevard.
Aground the famous promenade of the Walk of Fame are about 2000 floorboards vanished for stars.
About a one_hour drive from L.A. is the Disneyland, it was founded in 1958. In the west of L.A. is Beverly Hills and Bel Air and these two parts of Los Angeles are the most popular residences of the High Society.
Sights of California
The Golden Gate bridge: the Bridge is a suspension bridge spanning the Golden Gate, the opening of the San Francisco Bay into the Pacific Ocean.
In Hollywood are the greatest moviestudios located. The Universal studios and Warner bros.
Orange County (O.C.)
The county is famous for its tourism and for Disneyland as well as several beaches along more than 40 miles. Several movies and TV shows have been filmed there.
Korrektur
-
neuropandemonium
Re: Korrektur
I have decided for California as my dream Holiday destination. -->"I have chosen California..."
This is because I have seen very often things about California on television and that impressed me a lot. -->"This is because, very often I have seen things about California, which have impressed me a lot."
I would like to go there to visit different sights and to get impressions about the country and the people living there. -->"get familiar with the country and the people living there"
California
Area: 424.000 square kilometer
population: 35 Mio. (82,5 pro km²)
Capitol: Sacramento (435.000 population)
California is a land of contrasts. --> Nicht gut. Sondern, etwas wie, "The Californian terrain varies much throughout" oder "California is a very heterogeneous land" u.s.w.
You can find the highest mountain (Mount Whitney 4,418 metres) only some miles away from the lowest point on the western hemisphere in Death Valley (86 metres below sea level). "...only a few miles away from the lowest..."
Since the (Lassen Sie "the" aus) 12.01.2009,
the USA-travelers from specific country's have to book after a special application procedure (ESTA) among the USA-authorities.
Who is not declared is not allowed to enter the country! Nein. "Travelers to the USA must file a special application through the USA-authorities. Anyone who's application is not approved, is not allowed to enter the country!"
The US-authorities advice to announce (The US authorities advise you to announce your trip at least 72 hours in advance.)
At these process you will become many questions to your person. --> "During this process, you will be asked many questions."
The German citizen requires an own (???) machine-readable passport (color Bordeaux), which has to ( = must be) be valid for the period of your stay. Older ones, not machine_readable or temporary passports are unaccepted for the ( second largest in the United States.
It has 15 million inhabitants, thereof 3.5 million inhabitants in the Downtown. -->"...of which 3.5 million are inhabitants of the downtown area."
Los Angeles is one of the world centers of business (= for business), international trade, entertainment, culture, media, fashion, science, technology and education.
The highest Skyscraper is the Interstate Bank with (= at 257 meters) 257 meters[size=200].[/size] sondern, "The greatest moviestudios are located in Hollywood."
The Universal studios and Warner bros.Orange County (O.C.) ?????
The county is famous for its tourism and for Disneyland, as well as several beaches along more than 40 miles. Several movies and TV shows have been filmed there.
This is because I have seen very often things about California on television and that impressed me a lot. -->"This is because, very often I have seen things about California, which have impressed me a lot."
I would like to go there to visit different sights and to get impressions about the country and the people living there. -->"get familiar with the country and the people living there"
California
Area: 424.000 square kilometer
population: 35 Mio. (82,5 pro km²)
Capitol: Sacramento (435.000 population)
California is a land of contrasts. --> Nicht gut. Sondern, etwas wie, "The Californian terrain varies much throughout" oder "California is a very heterogeneous land" u.s.w.
You can find the highest mountain (Mount Whitney 4,418 metres) only some miles away from the lowest point on the western hemisphere in Death Valley (86 metres below sea level). "...only a few miles away from the lowest..."
Since the (Lassen Sie "the" aus) 12.01.2009,
the USA-travelers from specific country's have to book after a special application procedure (ESTA) among the USA-authorities.
Who is not declared is not allowed to enter the country! Nein. "Travelers to the USA must file a special application through the USA-authorities. Anyone who's application is not approved, is not allowed to enter the country!"
The US-authorities advice to announce (The US authorities advise you to announce your trip at least 72 hours in advance.)
At these process you will become many questions to your person. --> "During this process, you will be asked many questions."
The German citizen requires an own (???) machine-readable passport (color Bordeaux), which has to ( = must be) be valid for the period of your stay. Older ones, not machine_readable or temporary passports are unaccepted for the ( second largest in the United States.
It has 15 million inhabitants, thereof 3.5 million inhabitants in the Downtown. -->"...of which 3.5 million are inhabitants of the downtown area."
Los Angeles is one of the world centers of business (= for business), international trade, entertainment, culture, media, fashion, science, technology and education.
The highest Skyscraper is the Interstate Bank with (= at 257 meters) 257 meters[size=200].[/size] sondern, "The greatest moviestudios are located in Hollywood."
The Universal studios and Warner bros.Orange County (O.C.) ?????
The county is famous for its tourism and for Disneyland, as well as several beaches along more than 40 miles. Several movies and TV shows have been filmed there.