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A flower girl trying to hit a professor was a big insubordination at that time that can also be seen as an act of revolution. A revolution in two ways. First it’s the lower class that strikes back and secondly it symbolises women fighting for emancipation.

sind diese sätze von der grammatik her korrekt??

[Keswick (Contributor)]

A flower girl trying to hit a professor was a big insubordination at that time which could also be seen as an act of revolution. A revolution in two ways. Firstly it can be seen as the lower class striking back and secondly it symbolises women fighting for emancipation.

Mir gefaellt das Wort insubordination in diesem Zusammenhang weder im Englischen, noch im Deutschen. Es war eine grosse Ungehorsamkeit.. irgendwie passt das nicht.