Cover Letter Praktikumsbewerbung

[suuub]

Hallo zusammen,

ich möchte mich demnächst auf ein Praktikum für meine Semesterferien in Großbritannien (London) bewerben und habe einen Cover Letter entworfen.

Da meine Englischkenntnisse etwas eingestaubt sind, würde es mich freuen, hier ein paar Korrekturleser mit Verbesserungsvorschlägen zu finden.

Schon mal vielen Dank im Voraus!

Hier der Cover Letter (anonymisiert):


Statement of Professional Objectives

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about opportunities for an internship in your Financial Department.

I am studying business economics at the University of Musterstadt.

In January 2009 I passed my exame in my apprenticeship at the Musterbank as a bank assistant. Afterwards I worked for three months and further two months in the semester break in summer 2009 for this bank as consultant for private customers.

An internship would be a great chance for me to get valuable experiences whilst working in a company abroad. I’m planning to set the special emphasis of my academic studies on finance and taxation. The internship would deliver a good insight in these subjects.
My knowledge about private banking can be useful to carry out a good work.
Furthermore an internship would be a great chance to become acquainted to the international job market and to improve my English skills.

Ideally, I could begin my internship at the beginning of March 2010. I prefer a period of 4-6 weeks and a placement in London. But of course I am available according to your requirements.

I certainly believe that this working experience will be a magnificent contribution to an
International orientated future career. For further information, please feel free to contact me at anytime. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely

Vorname Nachname

[xxneroxx]

Hallo zusammen,

ich möchte mich demnächst auf ein Praktikum für meine Semesterferien in Großbritannien (London) bewerben und habe einen Cover Letter entworfen.

Da meine Englischkenntnisse etwas eingestaubt sind, würde es mich freuen, hier ein paar Korrekturleser mit Verbesserungsvorschlägen zu finden.

Schon mal vielen Dank im Voraus!

Hier der Cover Letter (anonymisiert):


Statement of Professional Objectives

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about opportunities for an internship in your Financial Department.

I am studying business economics at the University of Musterstadt.

In January 2009 I passed my examination in my apprenticeship at the Musterbank as a bank assistant. Afterwards I worked for three months and further two months in the semester break for this bank as consultant for private customers in summer 2009.

An internship would be a great chance for me to get valuable experiences whilst working in a company abroad. I’m planning to set the special emphasis of my academic studies on finance and taxation. The internship would deliver a good insight in these subjects.
My knowledge about private banking can be useful to carry out a good work.
Furthermore an internship would be a great chance to become acquainted to the international job market and to improve my English skills.

Ideally, I could begin my internship at the beginning of March 2010. I prefer a period of 4-6 weeks and a placement in London. But of course I am available according to your requirements.

I certainly believe that this working experience will be a magnificent contribution to an
International orientated future career. For further information, please feel free to contact me at anytime. I am looking forward hearing from you (oder "to hear from you" ...) soon.

Yours sincerely

Vorname Nachname

Ansonsten hört sich das echt gut an und lässt sich auch gut lesen!
Vll nochmal jemand anders drübergucken lassen aber so müsste das schon passen
Viel Glück, dass du auch angenommen wirst!!

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Examination ist hier nicht das richtige Wort. Exam waere richtig. Ansonsten sind einige Worte falsch gewaehlt, also bitte nochmal drueber schauen. Viel Erfolg!

[suuub]

Kannst du mir ein paar Hinweise geben, welche Wörter du meinst?
Selbst kann ich das leider nur schwer herausfinden, da ich den Brief selbst geschrieben habe.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Ich hoffe xxneroxx reisst mir nicht den Kopf ab, weil ich mich zu Verbesserungszwecken einmische .

Statement of Professional Objectives

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about possible opportunities for an internship in your Financial Department.

I am studying business economics at the University of Musterstadt.(Hier wuerde ich ggf. noch einfuegen seit wann du studierst.)

In January 2009, I passed the exam in my apprenticeship at the Musterbank as a bank assistant.(Was meinst du hier genau? Dieser Satz ist ziemlich gestolpert und daher wuerde ich ihn umschreiben, aber dafuer brauche ich ein paar Infos . ) Afterwards I worked for this bank as an consultant for private customers for three months and a further two months in the semester break in summer 2009.

An internship would be a great chance for me to achieve valuable experience1) while working in a company abroad. I am planning to set the special emphasis of my academic studies on finance and taxation. The internship would provide a good insight in these subjects.
My knowledge about private banking can be useful for carrying out good work.
Furthermore an internship would be a great chance to become acquainted with the international job market and a good chance to improve my English skills.

Ideally, I could begin my internship at the beginning of March 2010. I would prefer a period of 4-6 weeks and a placement in London. But of course I would be available according to your requirements.

I certainly believe that this working experience would be a magnificent contribution to an internationally orientated future career. If you require any more information, please feel free to contact me sat[/] anytime. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely

Vorname Nachname

1) experience ist ebenso wie information immer Singular

Wichtig:
Grundsaetzlich macht man selten die Unterscheidung zwischen britischem und amerkanischem Englisch. Aber da du dich explizit in London bewerben moechtest, wuerde ich auf auf britisches Englisch zurueckgreifen. Daher empfehle ich internship (AE) durch placement (BE) ersetzen (als Fehler habe ich es nicht angestrichen).

[suuub]

Ich hoffe xxneroxx reisst mir nicht den Kopf ab, weil ich mich zu Verbesserungszwecken einmische .

In January 2009, I passed the exam in my apprenticeship at the Musterbank as a bank assistant.(Was meinst du hier genau? Dieser Satz ist ziemlich gestolpert und daher wuerde ich ihn umschreiben, aber dafuer brauche ich ein paar Infos . ) Afterwards I worked for this bank as an consultant for private customers for three months and a further two months in the semester break in summer 2009.quote]

Ich habe im Janur 2009 meine Berufsausbildung zum Bankkaufmann in der Musterbank beendet. (Hier: Abschlussprüfung [exam] beendet)

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Ah, danke fuer die Erklaerung!

Ich wuerde das so umschreiben:
In January 2009, I passed my exam as qualified bank clerk at the Musterbank.

(In dem Fall dann wieder my statt mein vorgeschlagenes the)

[suuub]

Toll... ich habe die Verbesserungsvorschläge mal eingearbeitet.
Vielen Dank für eure Hilfe! Ich finde es prima, dass ihr euch hier so bemüht - ist ja keine Selbstverständlichkeit.

Schöne Grüße
Stefan

[lila]

Hey zusammen,

bin gerade an meinem Bewerbungsschrieben für ein Auslands-Praktium bei einem Architekturbüro und verzweifle an meinen etwas eingerosteten Englischkenntnissen...
Wäre super cool wenn mir jemand helfen könnte und das Ganze mal durchliest und auf Fehler überprüft.. Bin mir sicher, dass da einige zu finden sind.. und ich möchte schließlich ein super Anschreiben abschicken. (=

Danke schonmal für eure Mühe (=



Dear Mr. ...,


My name is ........... and I currently am studying Architecture at the .......... in the 5th semester. This summer, I will pass my Bachelor‘s degree. Before continuing with the Master studies, I would like to extend my rather theoretical knowledge with practical experiences and to realise in practice what i have learned at the University. Therefore, I am writing to apply for an internship for about 6 to 9 months.


In my opinion, a multiple change of location during the phase of studying enhances the creativity and advances my openness to new experiences. An internship would be a great chance for me to achieve valuable experience while working in a company abroad. With my internship, I would also like to broaden my architectural horizon and to get to know new methods of designing, building techniques and idea generations. Therefore, in international companies like yours, good command of English is necessary. This is why i am currently participating in a language course of the University called „English for Architecture“.


I am very upfront with new designs and technologies. As you can see in my portfolio, I like using technologies such as laser cutter and 3D printer for my studies.
The combination of such innovative technologies and well-tried theory of architecture constitutes in my opinion a modern, forward-looking architecture. This is a reson why I am fascinated by the work that is done in your company and why I would like to look behind the scenes and to learn more about it.
Each of your projects is a case sui generis and does not follow a visible schema. This great variance of design ideas and that every draft deals with it‘s own topic, shows that there is a lot to learn about methods of designing in your architectural practice.
Your company covers a lot of different domains of achitectural work. This would help me to collect several impressions and to figure my excellences and weaknesses out what is very helpful for setting a special emphasis of my academic Master studies in the future.


As an intern, I could already get to know the work of an office of architecture and urban planning in Munich and of a big building company in Stuttgart. At the end of last year, for about two months, I was permitted to act as an intern in an office for interior design. Like this, I already had the chance to become acquainted with the working environment.
Please find attached the particular certifications of the internships.
During my internships, I learned a lot about the several offices and their architecture.
At the inetrior designer‘s for example, I really liked to see fast progress, to work with all different kinds of material and to develop an eye for detail.


I would be very thankful if you would give me, as a dedicated, motivated and reliable intern, the possibility to work with you and especially to learn from you.
I am an abolutely team-minded an I like to rise to new challenges and chances to achieve new experiences.


From November 2013 I imagine the intership to last about 6 to 9 months.


I‘m looking forward to hearing from you soon and I am at your command for a personal appointment at any time.


Please find attached my CV, a small collection of my work in a portfolio and several certificates.


Yours sincerely

[Delfino]

Statement of Professional Objectives

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about possible opportunities for an placement in your Financial Department.

I am studying Business Economics at the University of Musterstadt. (* this is the title of your course, right?)
(Hier wuerde ich ggf. noch einfuegen seit wann du studierst.)

In January 2009, I passed my exam as qualified bank clerk at the Musterbank. Afterwards I worked for this bank as a consultant for private customers for three months and a further two months in the semester break in summer 2009.

A placement would be a great opportunity for me to gain valuable experience while working in a company abroad. I am planning to set special emphasis of my academic studies on finance and international taxation. (knowledge of German tax regulations wouldn't be of much help there...) I hope, the placement would provide further insight in these subjects. My knowledge and experience in private banking would be helpful for carrying out good work. Furthermore, a placement would be a great chance to become acquainted with the international job market and a good chance to use my English skills. (Do your English skills need to be improved? HR people love to read between the lines... ) I certainly believe that my increased work experience would contribute to my plan to pursue an internationally oriented career.

Ideally, I could start my placement at the beginning of March 201?. I would prefer a period of 4-6 weeks and a placement in London. But of course I would be available according to your requirements.

Please feel free to contact me at any time if you require any more information.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Vorname Nachname

All the advertised graduate internships here in Hampshire, UK are paid work
while a placement sounds more likely to be low or unpaid work.

[Delfino]

@lila

Welcome to the forum. Please create a new thread including your letter.

May I ask you to always create a new tread when you need help.
Otherwise your post will never be listen in the "Unbeantwortete Themen" section of this forum.