Korrektur meines Textes

[Sassy1331]

Hallo,

ich habe diesen Text geschrieben, weiß aber das meine Englische Grammatik ziemlich schlecht ist.


Es wäre toll wenn mir jemand den Text verbessern könnte.



When I looked back you where always there for me
and whiped my tears
What ever happens you hold my hand
told me everythings gonna be okay

You showed me what it meens to be a family
Im Gratefull about all you done for me
Together we are strong
and cope with everything

I learned from you to be strong.
To stay on the path whatever may happen
you showed me the way
Together we are strong

you supported me everytime
without pressure
we never get into a fight
because we have to much respect of each other

You never do any instructions
leave me freedom
never convict me for anything
you always give me security

Now I leaved my home
but we´ll always be together
in our hearts everyday

So I write this for you
Just wanted to say thank you
for all you done
for always beeing there for me
I love you



Ich weiß es ist noch nicht perfekt ( soll sich auch nicht reimen Wink )
Aber ich hoffe trotzdem, dass ihr mir helft.

LG

[ella85]

Ich habe die grammartik korrigiert, aber es hat nicht zu viele Fehlern enthaltet. Es ist ein süsse Gedicht!


When I looked back you where always there for me
and wiped my tears
What ever happened you held my hand
told me everythings gonna be okay

You showed me what it means to be a family
I'm grateful for all you have done for me
Together we are strong
and cope with everything

I learned from you to be strong.
To stay on the path whatever may happen
you showed me the way
Together we are strong

you supported me everytime
without pressure
we never get into a fight
because we respect each other too much

You never give any instructions
leave me freedom
never punish me for anything
you always give me security

Now I left my home
but we´ll always be together
in our hearts everyday

So I write this for you
Just wanted to say thank you
for all you have done
for always beeing there for me
I love you