Hallo,
ich habe folgenden summary geschrieben, ich wäre bei jeder hilfe dankbar.
The text *A Dangerous Rage* deals with the dangers of music.
Nowadays, music is very dangerous for the kids, because there are a lot of bad words or bad thinks like dru*s, alc*hol etc.
This kind of music affects the childrens behaviour against their parents, friends or clasmates.
Reason for that kind of bad behaviour is for example that children identify the artists for his idols.
The consequenses of bad music is that children commit suicide or leave their homes.
However, there are good artists that want wo help the childrens and make better music.
Summary (zum korriegieren)
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Delfino
Hallo,
ich habe folgende Zusammenfassung (summary) geschrieben.
Ich wäre für jede Hilfe dankbar.
The text *A Dangerous Rage* deals with the dangers of contemporary music.
Nowadays, the lyrics of certain music is very dangerous for the kids,
because they include a lot of bad words or bad thinks like dru*s, alc*hol etc.
This kind of music can affect the behaviour of children
towards their parents, friends or classmates.
A common reason for bad behaviour is that children idolise these artists
and try to imitate their behaviour.
The worst consequence of bad music is that children commit suicide or leave their homes.
However, there are also some good artists who want to help children
and therefore they create music with much better lyrics.
ich habe folgende Zusammenfassung (summary) geschrieben.
Ich wäre für jede Hilfe dankbar.
The text *A Dangerous Rage* deals with the dangers of contemporary music.
Nowadays, the lyrics of certain music is very dangerous for the kids,
because they include a lot of bad words or bad thinks like dru*s, alc*hol etc.
This kind of music can affect the behaviour of children
towards their parents, friends or classmates.
A common reason for bad behaviour is that children idolise these artists
and try to imitate their behaviour.
The worst consequence of bad music is that children commit suicide or leave their homes.
However, there are also some good artists who want to help children
and therefore they create music with much better lyrics.
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Delfino
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barca-fan22
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Delfino
Nowadays, the lyrics of certain songs is very dangerous for young children and teenager,
because they include a lot of bad words or describe bad things like drugs, alcohol and alike.
Your teacher won't choose the right character for the words in your text.
bad things = schlimme Dinge
Ich habe den Text "A Dangerous Rage" nicht gelesen.
Aber ich denke die o.g. Formulierungen sind etwas zu allgemein.
Der Leser muß sich zu sehr seine eigenen Gedanken machen.
- Was ist das Gefährliche/Bedrohliche am Slang, Fluchen usw. ?
- Du meinst wohl eher das beschriebene Verhalten bzw.
das Auftreten mancher Künstler, oder?
because they include a lot of bad words or describe bad things like drugs, alcohol and alike.
* is not a valid character in an English summary!dru*s, alc*hol etc.
Your teacher won't choose the right character for the words in your text.
bad words = schlimme WörterAuf was muß ich denn noch achten, um mich zu verbessern?
Ist die summary eigentlich auch gut verständlich - habt ihr verstanden worum es geht ?
Ich möchte mich auf jeden Fall verbessern, das ist mir sehr wichtig.
bad things = schlimme Dinge
Ich habe den Text "A Dangerous Rage" nicht gelesen.
Aber ich denke die o.g. Formulierungen sind etwas zu allgemein.
Der Leser muß sich zu sehr seine eigenen Gedanken machen.
- Was ist das Gefährliche/Bedrohliche am Slang, Fluchen usw. ?
- Du meinst wohl eher das beschriebene Verhalten bzw.
das Auftreten mancher Künstler, oder?
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FiendishMinx
Warum fragst du eigentlich dreimal das gleiche? Ich glaube, du hast das Thema hier schon dreimal gehabt... 
