Hallo zusammen,
kann sich jmd. mal diesen Text angucken? =(
A fox meet during a walk a mouse. He observed she a while and saw, that the mouse ran always nervous forth and back. She seemed to look for something. The Fox approached and asked: „What are you looking for “? The mouse answered completely frightened: „My children ran away!“ He answered politely, that he wanted to help her to look for their children. He was scented a meat. The mouse said: “You search on the left side, I search on the other one!”
The fox came on a meadow, where the mouse children played with other. He jumped to the kids, eat them and went back.
Finally he told to the mouse, that he had found nothing und go away.
Danke =(
Kleiner Text zum kontrollieren =(
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Keswick (Contributor)
Re: Kleiner Text zum kontrollieren =(
Sag mal ehrlich, der Text ist nicht komplett von dir, oder? Ich markiere mal gruen, welche Textstellen grammatikalisch absolut abweichen.
Hier die Verbesserung:Pax90 hat geschrieben: A fox meet during a walk a mouse. He observed she a while and saw, that the mouse ran always nervous forth and back. She seemed to look for something. The Fox approached and asked: „What are you looking for “? The mouse answered completely frightened: „My children ran away!“ He answered politely, that he wanted to help her to look for their children. He was scented a meat. The mouse said: “You search on the left side, I search on the other one!”
The fox came on a meadow, where the mouse children played with other. He jumped to the kids, eat them and went back.
Finally he told to the mouse, that he had found nothing und go away.
Pax90 hat geschrieben: A fox met a mouse on a walk. He observed it for a while and realised, that the mouse was running nervously back and forth. She seemed to look for something. The fox approached and asked: „What are you looking for “? The mouse answered completely frightened: „My children ran away!“ He answered politely, that he wanted to help it to look for its children. He was scented a meat (Er roch ein Fleisch? - Oder meinst du "er witterte Fleisch"? Aber auch das nicht wirklich Sinn.). The mouse said: “You search on the left side, I search on the other one!” The fox came to a meadow, where the mouse children played with each other. He jumped towards the kids, ate them and went back.
Finally he told to the mouse, that he had found nothing und went away.
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Keswick (Contributor)
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Spintus1990
. Gern geschehen!