introduction of an essay - correction

[Joefish]

Hi,

ich würde mich freuen wenn jemand meine Einleitung zum Thema "Life in a big city - would that be better" korrigieren könnte.

Street crime and ethnical variety or solitude and a quiet neighbourhood.
What would you prefer?
In this essay, I will try to show up the advantages, disadvantages and possible consequences of living in a big city,
which contains for example the high air pollution caused by cars and public transports in a "small" area.


Thanks in advance

Joe

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Street crime and ethnical variety or solitude and a quiet neighbourhood.
What would you prefer?
In this essay, I will try to show up the advantages, disadvantages and possible consequences of living in a big city, which contains for example the high air pollution caused by cars and public transports in a "small" area.

[Joefish]

Danke :)