The Smiths stayed at a camping last summer becouse all other kinds of holiday accommodations are too expensive for them. Every day Mrs Smith had a sunbath, Mr Smith made a sightseeing and the children made a travel around the island. One day they made an excursion to a local castle.
The Smiths stayed at a campsite last summer because all other kinds of vacation accommodations were too expensive for them. Mrs Smith took a sunbath every day. Mr Smith went on a sightseeing tour and the children travelled around the island. One day they went on an excursion to a local castle.
Do you think the second one is better English? Or is it even worse than first?
Thanks in advance for your help!
Which text is the better one?
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freckle
Thank you.
In the first sample there are six bad mistakes and the purpose of the excercise is to find and correct them.
I was not sure wether we found them all.
As you write, that also the second one is not correct, I think we missed something.
We'll see...
Maybe someone likes to dye the mistakes in the second text? Please don't misunderstand me - I don't want a correction of the text, just markings of the parts on which we will have to work on again.
In the first sample there are six bad mistakes and the purpose of the excercise is to find and correct them.
I was not sure wether we found them all.
As you write, that also the second one is not correct, I think we missed something.
We'll see...
Maybe someone likes to dye the mistakes in the second text? Please don't misunderstand me - I don't want a correction of the text, just markings of the parts on which we will have to work on again.