I need your help!

[311Paddy]

HELLO!
Please help me! I must write essays in English, I have already written some, but I'm not sure whether they are right,would you please take a look of it and say what's wrong there?
thanks a lot!



Going abroad

Introduction
Do you dream of escaping from the living conditions in Germany to begin somewhere else a quite new life? You are not the only one. Every year thousands of Germans leave the land, in order to find a job, better weather, less paternalism by the state and a new attitude to life. So, let's go out of Germany and emigrate, but what should be observed?
Every day we can watch on TV how people emigrate or return, but what are the risks?

Main task:
The first question is: Why would people like to imigrate?
I think there are many reasons why. At first the want to change something, learn and gain experiences, otherwise they are going to abscond. Escaping from their situation, the problems and maybe of themselves.
Sometimes changing the country isn’t the best way to resolve a problem. Usually many people emigrate and think that they will find better living conditions, but this isn’t simply true.
Now and then it can help certainly, but what really deals with a change, lies close to someone himself! (Ab und zu kann es sicher helfen, aber was wirklich mit einer Änderung zu tun hat, liegt an und in einem selber!) ?? ist das so richtig?
Every country has got pros and cons.
You musn’t expect the paradise on the earth. You have to be aware that it exists everywhere something good and something bad.
If you accepts this fact from the beginning then nevertheless, the bad isn't as bad as it looks like.
Everyone who wants to go abroad should think about if he really wants to leave Germany and wheter the foreign country is a better decision. Moreover you should set oneself a target.
Before the final step everybody should be on holiday in the foreign country, get a taste of it, learning the language and talking with people or other emigrants.

[Paddy92]

Main task:
The first question is: Why would people like to immigrate?
I think there are many reasons why. At first the want to change something, learn and gain experiences, otherwise they are going to abscond. Escaping from their situation, the problems and maybe of themselves.
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You mustn’t expect the paradise on the earth. You have to be aware that it exists everywhere something good and something bad.

das sind nicht viele fehler aber ich glaub es sind alle