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NEWSPAPER ARTICLE – The growing of violence among teenagers?

We cannot deny that there weren’t any scraps if we were young, but it might be true if we maintain that there are more aggressive teenagers that search for fights today.
What have changed in the last 30 years? What are the reasons for the growing of violence among teenagers?

One reason might be that parents have no time for their children. These parents work all day long and if they are at home they don’t want to educate their children. Nowadays even women prefer their careers and give their children to childminders. (Many of today’s teenagers don’t know their parents very well.)
But some single parents get forced to let their children alone (at home) because they have to work to survive. There are only a few subsidies for single parents. [So all in one teenagers are more violent because they are not well educated.]
Furthermore, many teenagers of today are educated anti-authoritarian. Parents let their children do what they want. They are free to do as one pleases and so they don’t know where are the limits.
Another significant point is that today’s teenagers grow up WITH? violence. If you turn on (the) TV, you may not find any channel that is free of violence. Even the news show terror and violence all over the world. Teenagers are influenced by (the) media, above all by (the) TV.
Another aspect is that teenagers have no perspectives. Because of the high unemployment figures, many young people don’t find a job or a place to train. Some teenagers band together to groups and use forces because of boredom.

In conclusion (the) violence among teenagers will still increase if the government won’t do something against (the unemployment and if parents don’t educate their children.
There might be many other reasons for the growing of violence but discussing all of them would go beyond the limits of this article.

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