Brauche Hilfe bei Englisch-Text für Schule

[Spintus1990]

Hallo,
ich bräuchte mal eure Hilfe, ob alles bei mir richtig geschrieben ist und wo meine Fehler noch stecken...
Zur Erklärung:
Ich mache einen Kurzfilm und spreche den Text dazu.
Ich bedanke mich schon einmal für alle die mithelfen

Ich unterteile den Text einfach mal, damit nicht jeder gleich alles machen muss, natürlich darf er aber =)
Dankkkeeeee, nochmal

• After a flight time of seven hours, we reach America. The Double Continent lies to the west of Europe and consists of North America includes Central America and South America.
  At first, I would like to talk about subdivision.
  To North America belongs Greenland, Canada, USA, Mexico and many Island States.
  Below North America lies South America. It has a surface of 17 Million km². Among other belongs Brazil, fr. Guiana, Suriname, Guiana, Venezuela, Colombia, Ecuador, Peru, Belivia, Paraguay, Chile, Uruguay and Argentina.
  Let´s take a look at some countries.
  At first Greenland.
  Greenland is the biggest Island of the world. It has a Area of 2 Million km². It fascinates with his very varied fauna. A currently problem is the melt of the ice. It´s amounts 240km³ annually since 2004.

Now let´s take a look at Canada.
Canada is the second biggest state of the world. His Area encloses 10 Million km². Toronto is with 2,5 Million people the biggest City of Canada. The Chinatown of Toronto is the biggest of North America.
Immediately below Canada lie the USA with his 50 Federal States, the 3rd target of our virtual travel.
Who isn`t: Denver, San Francisco, Los Angeles, Chicago, Washington DC and New York a BEGRIFF?
New York has in his metropolis almost 19 Million people. Let`s take a look on the map. You can see the 5 boroughs of New York.
In blue: Manhattan
In yellow: Brooklyn
In orange: Queens
In red: The Bronx
In purple: Staten Island

• Immediately with the entry over the Atlantic, you can see the 93 m statue of Liberty on the Liberty Iceland. It was Inaugurated on 28. September 1886 and show the Goddess of Liberty.
  Other attractions of the city include the Empire State Building, the Chrysler Building, the Brooklyn Bridge, the Broadway and 6 years ago the famous WTC, which destroyed on 11.September by a terrorist act with 2 airplanes. Since 2006, there is the WCT Memorial, a memorial museum in memory of the victims who has died by this act. Also, there will build the 541meters high Freedom Tower. 541 meters correspond 1776 foot, the year of the Independence of the United States of America.
  
  Next it goes to Mexico.
  Mexico has a Area of 2 Million km, this is more than six times as largely as Germany.

Directly it goes from Mexico the Brasilia in South America. von Mexico geht es nach Brasilien in Südamerika. World-famous city of Brazil are Sao Paulo, Salvador de Bahia and Rio de Janeiro with his never ending beach.
The 396m high Sugarloaf Mountain, a granite Mountain, is famous for Rio de Janeiro.
Our last Trip goes to Argentina.

[babel]

OK, British English suggestions.
Some changes are for the "travelogue style"
Sorry if I missed anything


After a seven hour flight, we reach America. The Double Continent lies to the west of Europe and consists of North, America includesCentral America and South America.
At first, I would like to talk about subdivision. better --> First let's look at how the continent is subdivided.
North America includes Greenland, Canada, USA, Mexico and many Island States.
Below I would use South of rather than below North America lies South America. It has a surface of 17 Million km². Its nations include Brazil, fr. Guiana, Suriname, Guiana, Venezuela, Colombia, Ecuador, Peru, Bolivia, Paraguay, Chile, Uruguay and Argentina.
Let´s take a look at some countries.
First Greenland.
Greenland is the world's biggest island. It has an area of 2 Million km². It is fascinating on account of its very varied fauna. A current problem is the melting of the ice there OR: the melting of its ice OR: the melting of the permafrost at an annual rate of 240km³ since 2004.



Now let´s take a look at Canada.
Canada is the second biggest state in the world, encompassing an area of 10 Million km². Toronto iswith 2,5 Million people is the biggest City in Canada. Toronto's Chinatown is the biggest in North America. Lots of biggests there. Try a largest and a most extensive
Immediately below OR to the south of Canada lies I know, singular verb, plural States, naughty English grammar!!! the USA with its 50 Federal States, the 3rd destination for our virtual travel.
Who isn`t: Denver, San Francisco, Los Angeles, Chicago, Washington DC and New York a BEGRIFF? I don't understand. Do you you mean Denver, San Francisco, Los Angeles, Chicago, Washington DC and New York. Which of these is not an icon?
New York has in its metropolis almost 19 Million people. Let`s take a look on the map. You I prefer If we take a look at the map we can see the 5 boroughs of New York.
In blue: Manhattan
In yellow: Brooklyn
In orange: Queens
In red: The Bronx
In purple: Staten Island

Immediately with the entry over the Atlantic you can't have an entrance to the sea. How about At the very entrance to the harbour OR At the threshold of the Atlantic , you can see the 93 m statue of Liberty on the Liberty Island. It was Inaugurated on 28. September 1886 and shows the Goddess of Liberty.
The city's other attractions include the Empire State Building, the Chrysler Building, theBrooklyn Bridge, theBroadway and until 6 years ago the famous WTC, whichdestroyed on 11th September by aterrorists using 2 airplanes British English aircraft. Since 2006, there is the WTC Memorial, a memorial museum in memory of the victims who hasdied as a result of the terrorist action. Also, there will buildthe 541 meters high Freedom Tower is to be built there . 541 meters, corresponding to 1776 feet, represent the year of the Independence of the United States of America.

Next we visit Mexico.
Mexico has a Area of 2 Million km, this is more than six times as largely as Germany.



Next we travel straight from Mexico to Brazil in South America. Brazil's world famous cities are Sao Paulo, Salvador de Bahia and Rio de Janeiro with its never ending beach.
Rio de Janeiro is famous for the 396m high Sugarloaf Mountain, a granite mountain.
Our last Trip is to Argentina.

[Spintus1990]

Hallo,
dankeschön.
Ist das jetzt amerikanisches eng.?

Da ich @ Abi bin, brauch ich am. Englisch =(

[babel]

Well, I am British but I can't see anything that would be different in Am. Eng. Good luck with your presentation!

[Spintus1990]

thank you =)

[CPB]

Only thing not American english is the spelling of "harbour," but that's irrelevant since you will be reading the text out loud.

"Airplanes" or "aircraft," both work fine, maybe you should say "passenger aricraft."

[Spintus1990]

my last sentenses:
That should be our short virtual travel to america. I hope I was able to give a little insight.

is that right :/ ?

[CPB]

That should be our short virtual travel visit to America. I hope I was able to give a little insight.

[Spintus1990]

Der letzte Teil fehlt mir noch und ich bekomm kein klaren gedanken zusammen =(

of 2,8million km² and is the 2nd biggest country in America. Buenos Aires is the capital. Very famous is Patagonien. It is on the most southern part of Southamerica located. Ther is a big Vielfalt of plant and animals. For example: Seeelefanten, Schwertwale, Pinguine and the big Greifvogel Kondor. And now let us encounter the area a little.

[Spintus1990]

All okay?

The capitol of Mexico is Mexico City.Our last trip is to Argentina. It has an area of 2,8million km² and is the 2nd biggest country in America. Buenos Aires is the capital. Very famous is is Patagonia. It is on the most southern part of Southamerica located. There is a big Diversity of plant and animals. For example: Elephant seals, Schwertwale, Penguins and the Condor.