Hallo,
muss für den englisch Unterricht eine Inhaltsangabe schreiben die sehr wichtig ist und auch abgegeben wird. habe sie fertig allerdings habe ich niemand der mir die Inhaltangabe auf Rechtschreib und Grammatikfehler prüft. Wäre sehr nett, wenn mir jemand dabei helfen könnte. Anbei der Text:
The novel memoirs of a Geisha, tells the story of a nine year old girl called Sakamoto Chiyo becoming a japanese geisha, in first-person view.
It is 1929 in Japan and the small Chiyo has an easy live in a small Fishing village with her older sister and her parents. But when Chiyo´s mother gets sick of bone cancer live changes and her father decides to sell his two daughters because he thinks he’s too old to raise the girls.
Thus it comes that the sisters are brought to Kyoto where their ways separate. Chiyo´s sister Satsu is sold to a brothel where she has to work as a prostitute while the beautiful Chiyo is sold to a Okiya. This means a house where only women live and where Geishas earn the income.
A Geisha is a Japanese maintenance artist, who presents traditional Japanese arts. In this Okiya Chiyo has at first to do the work of a maid. Everything she needs like clothes, medicine and food has to be paid back. But to be able to afford this money she needs to become a geisha too. So she has to start the hard training of a Geisha and practises the housekeeping too.
The only Geisha of the Okiya is called Hatsumomu and she hates Chiyo because of here beauty and her unusual blue-grey eyes. The arrogant Hatsumomo recognises Chiyo´s potential and is upset at any hint of competition.
After a while she starts the training of a geisha which means training at dance, music instruments, tea ceremony and how to maintain men. But then she finds out that her sister is working at a brothel and visits her.
Satsu tells her that she can’t continue this work and that she wants to run away. Chiyo is also sick of the live in the okiya and both decide to run away together. When Chiyo tries to escape from the okiya she is caught by some people living there and her sister has to leave alone.
After Chiyo tried to run away the Lady of the House called “mother” thinks that Chiyo is no worthwhile investment and breaks off her geisha training. So Chiyo has to stay a made all her live and Hatsumomo continues to insult her and to make her live hard.
One day Chiyo meets a man on the street when she was crying. This man is called “Chairman” and is the only person who was nice to her for a long time. He even gives her some money to buy some ice cream. After this meeting she decides that she really wants to become a Geisha and to be the women of this man when she is older. At first there is no more chance for Chiyo to become a geisha.
But then two years later she meets “Mameha” one of the most popular geishas in Gion and the archenemy of Hatsumomo.
She is despised by Hatsumomo because she outshines her in every aspect and having earned her independence as a geisha, unlike Hatsumomo, cannot be toppled. Mameha takes a fancy on Chiyo and on her beautiful eyes and persuades mother to allow her to continue the geisha lessons.
Mameha takes Chiyo´s as her “younger sister”, she shows her the life of geisha, announces her to many customers and protects and trains Chiyo to rival Hatsumomo.
With the help of Mameha Chiyo gets fast very popular and gets her “mizuage”. This means a financial arrangement with that the maiko would find many interested and wealthy buyers to bid on her virginity so the maiko could fully become a geisha. So Chiyo changes from a maiko to a geisha and is from now on called “Sayuri”.
Mother is so impressed by Sayuri´s success that she adopts her and Sayuri becomes later the leader of the okiya. Sayuri´s “ danna” a man who pays for everything she needs but has the right to sleep with her is also very rich and provides prosperity to the okiya.
Sayuri and Mameha even destroy Hatsumomo´s reputation entirely thereafter and Hatsumomo is thrown out of the okiya.
Sayuri´s life seems to have taken a wonderful turn but she still isn´t happy. Since she met the chairman when she was a little girl she fell in love with him and couldn’t forget him. Even though she met him as a geisha she couldn’t be together with him because geishas are not allowed to choose their man on their own. They have to be with the men who have engaged the geisha. But the Chairman didn’t, only his best friend was always very interested in Sayuri. This men is called “Nobu”. Nobu didn’t succeed in getting Sayuri´s mizuage and he also didn’t become her danna but they had a very close friendship.
Of course Sayuri could not give more attention to the Chairman in view of the interest, which Nobu showed at her, and in such a way her dream of living together couldn’t be fulfilled.
But then in 1944 Japan is very strongly involved in World War II and the nightclub district Gion is closed. Sayuri looses her danna and has to work at kimono production. When the war is over Nobu tries to become Sayuri´s danna. This shocks Sayuri much since she does not want to hurt him, but that would inevitably happen, if she had slept with him, since she did not love and also did not desire him.
So to hold Nobu from becoming her danna she made a plan to get caught by Nobu while she sleeps with an other man. But instead of Nobu, she gets caught by the Chairman. At first this seems like a disaster but then Nobu is so angry at Sayuri that he broke off any contact. This smoothed the way of a common life together with the Chairman as he also desired Sayuri since he met her for the first time. When the Chairman frees her from the okiya to become his mistress, she sets up a lavish teahouse for Japanese businessmen in New York and lives together with him like she always wanted.
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The novel memoirs of a Geisha, (book title should be underlined or in italics)
tells the story of a nine year old girl called (better: named)
Sakamoto Chiyo becoming a japanese geisha,
in first-person view (better: from the first person point of view).
It is 1929 in Japan and the small Chiyo has an easy live (you mean: life)
in a small Fishing (don't capitalize)
village with her older sister and her parents. But when Chiyo´s mother gets sick of (better: with)
bone cancer(,)
live (life)
changes(,)
and her father decides to sell his two daughters(,)
because he thinks he’s too old to raise the girls.
Thus it comes (better: happens)
that the sisters are brought to Kyoto where their ways separate. Chiyo´s sister Satsu is sold to a brothel where she has to work as a prostitute(,)
while the beautiful Chiyo is sold to a Okiya. This means (better: is)
a house where only women live and where Geishas earn the income.
A Geisha is a Japanese maintenance artist, (meaning unclear)
who presents traditional Japanese arts. In this Okiya Chiyo has at first to do the work of a maid. Everything she needs like clothes, medicine and food has to be paid back. (better: paid for out of her own pocket)
But to be able to afford this money she needs to become a geisha too. So she has to start the hard training of a Geisha and practises the housekeeping too.
The only Geisha of the Okiya is called Hatsumomu and she hates Chiyo because of here (you mean: her)
beauty and her unusual blue-grey eyes. The arrogant Hatsumomo recognises Chiyo´s potential and is upset at any hint of competition.
After a while she starts the training of a geisha which means training at (better: in)
dance, music(al)
instruments, tea ceremony and how to maintain men. (meaning unclear)
But then she finds out that her sister is working at a brothel and visits her.
Satsu tells her (better: Chiyo)
that she can’t continue this work and that she wants to run away. Chiyo is also sick of the live (life)
in the okiya and both decide to run away together. When Chiyo tries to escape from the okiya(,)
she is caught by some people living there(,)
and her sister has to leave alone.
After Chiyo tried (better: tries)
to run away the Lady of the House called “mother” thinks that Chiyo is no (better: not a )
worthwhile investment and breaks off her geisha training. So Chiyo has to stay a made (maid)
all her live (life) (,)
and Hatsumomo continues to insult her and to make her live (life)
hard.
One day Chiyo meets a man on the street when she was crying. (better: one day Chiyo, in tears, meets a man on the street)
This man is called “Chairman (,)"
and is the only person who was nice to her for a long time. (unclear: is this the first time they meet, or has he been kind to her on other occasions?)
He even gives her some money to buy some ice cream. After this meeting she decides that she really wants to become a Geisha and to be the women of this man (do you mean: belong to this man?)
when she is older. At first there is no more chance for Chiyo to become a geisha. (better: she has lost her opportunity to become a geisha)
But then two years later she meets “Mameha” one of the most popular geishas in Gion and the archenemy of Hatsumomo.
She (better: Mameha)
is despised by Hatsumomo because she outshines her in every aspect(,)
and having earned her independence as a geisha, unlike Hatsumomo, cannot be toppled. Mameha takes a fancy on (better: to)
Chiyo and on (to)
her beautiful eyes(,)
and persuades (her)
mother (do you mean her actual mother or the "mother of her house"?)
to allow her (better: Chiyo)
to continue the geisha lessons.
Mameha takes Chiyo´s as her “younger sister”, she shows her the life of geisha, announces her to many customers and protects and trains Chiyo to rival Hatsumomo.
With the help of Mameha(,)
Chiyo gets fast very popular (better: becomes popular very quickly)(,)
and gets her “mizuage”. This means (better: refers to)
a financial arrangement with that the (better: in which the)
maiko (you need to define "maiko")
would find many interested and wealthy buyers to bid on her virginity so the maiko could fully become a geisha. So Chiyo changes from a maiko to a geisha and is from now on called “Sayuri”.
Mother (do you mean the mother of the geisha house?)
is so impressed by Sayuri´s success that she adopts her(,)
and Sayuri becomes later (better: later becomes)
the leader of the okiya. Sayuri´s “ danna(,)”
a man who pays for everything she needs but has the right to sleep with her(,)
is also very rich and provides prosperity to the okiya.
Sayuri and Mameha even destroy Hatsumomo´s reputation entirely thereafter(,)
and Hatsumomo is thrown out of the okiya.
Sayuri´s life seems to have taken a wonderful turn but she still isn´t happy. Since she met the chairman when she was a little girl(,)
she fell in love with him and couldn’t (can't)
forget him. Even though she met him as a geisha she couldn’t be together with him because geishas are not allowed to choose their man on their own. They have to be with the men who have engaged the geisha. (better: paid for them)
But the Chairman didn’t, (do you mean: never paid for Sayuri?)
only (better: but)
his best friend was always very interested in Sayuri. This men (man)
is called “Nobu”. Nobu didn’t succeed in getting Sayuri´s mizuage and he also didn’t become her danna but they had a very close friendship.
Of course Sayuri could not give more attention to the Chairman in view of the interest, (remove comma)
which Nobu showed at (remove "at")
her, and in such a way her dream of living together (better: with the chairman)
couldn’t be fulfilled.
But then in 1944 Japan is very strongly (better: deeply)
involved in World War II(,)
and the nightclub district Gion is closed. Sayuri looses her danna and has to work at kimono production. When the war is over Nobu tries to become Sayuri´s danna. This shocks Sayuri much since she does not want to hurt him, but that would inevitably happen, if she had slept with him, since she did not love and also did not desire him.
So to hold (better: prevent)
Nobu from becoming her danna she made (better: makes)
a plan to get caught by Nobu while she sleeps with an other (one word "another")
man. But instead of Nobu, she gets caught by the Chairman. At first this seems like a disaster but then Nobu is so angry at Sayuri that he broke (better: breaks)
off any contact. This smoothed (better: smoothes)
the way of a common life together with the Chairman as he (has)
also desired Sayuri since he met her for the first time. When the Chairman frees her from the okiya to become his mistress, she sets up a lavish teahouse for Japanese businessmen in New York and lives together with him like she always wanted. (better: as she has always wanted)
A final thought: watch your capitization: either "Geisha" or "geisha," "Chairman" or "chariman," not both.
tells the story of a nine year old girl called (better: named)
Sakamoto Chiyo becoming a japanese geisha,
in first-person view (better: from the first person point of view).
It is 1929 in Japan and the small Chiyo has an easy live (you mean: life)
in a small Fishing (don't capitalize)
village with her older sister and her parents. But when Chiyo´s mother gets sick of (better: with)
bone cancer(,)
live (life)
changes(,)
and her father decides to sell his two daughters(,)
because he thinks he’s too old to raise the girls.
Thus it comes (better: happens)
that the sisters are brought to Kyoto where their ways separate. Chiyo´s sister Satsu is sold to a brothel where she has to work as a prostitute(,)
while the beautiful Chiyo is sold to a Okiya. This means (better: is)
a house where only women live and where Geishas earn the income.
A Geisha is a Japanese maintenance artist, (meaning unclear)
who presents traditional Japanese arts. In this Okiya Chiyo has at first to do the work of a maid. Everything she needs like clothes, medicine and food has to be paid back. (better: paid for out of her own pocket)
But to be able to afford this money she needs to become a geisha too. So she has to start the hard training of a Geisha and practises the housekeeping too.
The only Geisha of the Okiya is called Hatsumomu and she hates Chiyo because of here (you mean: her)
beauty and her unusual blue-grey eyes. The arrogant Hatsumomo recognises Chiyo´s potential and is upset at any hint of competition.
After a while she starts the training of a geisha which means training at (better: in)
dance, music(al)
instruments, tea ceremony and how to maintain men. (meaning unclear)
But then she finds out that her sister is working at a brothel and visits her.
Satsu tells her (better: Chiyo)
that she can’t continue this work and that she wants to run away. Chiyo is also sick of the live (life)
in the okiya and both decide to run away together. When Chiyo tries to escape from the okiya(,)
she is caught by some people living there(,)
and her sister has to leave alone.
After Chiyo tried (better: tries)
to run away the Lady of the House called “mother” thinks that Chiyo is no (better: not a )
worthwhile investment and breaks off her geisha training. So Chiyo has to stay a made (maid)
all her live (life) (,)
and Hatsumomo continues to insult her and to make her live (life)
hard.
One day Chiyo meets a man on the street when she was crying. (better: one day Chiyo, in tears, meets a man on the street)
This man is called “Chairman (,)"
and is the only person who was nice to her for a long time. (unclear: is this the first time they meet, or has he been kind to her on other occasions?)
He even gives her some money to buy some ice cream. After this meeting she decides that she really wants to become a Geisha and to be the women of this man (do you mean: belong to this man?)
when she is older. At first there is no more chance for Chiyo to become a geisha. (better: she has lost her opportunity to become a geisha)
But then two years later she meets “Mameha” one of the most popular geishas in Gion and the archenemy of Hatsumomo.
She (better: Mameha)
is despised by Hatsumomo because she outshines her in every aspect(,)
and having earned her independence as a geisha, unlike Hatsumomo, cannot be toppled. Mameha takes a fancy on (better: to)
Chiyo and on (to)
her beautiful eyes(,)
and persuades (her)
mother (do you mean her actual mother or the "mother of her house"?)
to allow her (better: Chiyo)
to continue the geisha lessons.
Mameha takes Chiyo´s as her “younger sister”, she shows her the life of geisha, announces her to many customers and protects and trains Chiyo to rival Hatsumomo.
With the help of Mameha(,)
Chiyo gets fast very popular (better: becomes popular very quickly)(,)
and gets her “mizuage”. This means (better: refers to)
a financial arrangement with that the (better: in which the)
maiko (you need to define "maiko")
would find many interested and wealthy buyers to bid on her virginity so the maiko could fully become a geisha. So Chiyo changes from a maiko to a geisha and is from now on called “Sayuri”.
Mother (do you mean the mother of the geisha house?)
is so impressed by Sayuri´s success that she adopts her(,)
and Sayuri becomes later (better: later becomes)
the leader of the okiya. Sayuri´s “ danna(,)”
a man who pays for everything she needs but has the right to sleep with her(,)
is also very rich and provides prosperity to the okiya.
Sayuri and Mameha even destroy Hatsumomo´s reputation entirely thereafter(,)
and Hatsumomo is thrown out of the okiya.
Sayuri´s life seems to have taken a wonderful turn but she still isn´t happy. Since she met the chairman when she was a little girl(,)
she fell in love with him and couldn’t (can't)
forget him. Even though she met him as a geisha she couldn’t be together with him because geishas are not allowed to choose their man on their own. They have to be with the men who have engaged the geisha. (better: paid for them)
But the Chairman didn’t, (do you mean: never paid for Sayuri?)
only (better: but)
his best friend was always very interested in Sayuri. This men (man)
is called “Nobu”. Nobu didn’t succeed in getting Sayuri´s mizuage and he also didn’t become her danna but they had a very close friendship.
Of course Sayuri could not give more attention to the Chairman in view of the interest, (remove comma)
which Nobu showed at (remove "at")
her, and in such a way her dream of living together (better: with the chairman)
couldn’t be fulfilled.
But then in 1944 Japan is very strongly (better: deeply)
involved in World War II(,)
and the nightclub district Gion is closed. Sayuri looses her danna and has to work at kimono production. When the war is over Nobu tries to become Sayuri´s danna. This shocks Sayuri much since she does not want to hurt him, but that would inevitably happen, if she had slept with him, since she did not love and also did not desire him.
So to hold (better: prevent)
Nobu from becoming her danna she made (better: makes)
a plan to get caught by Nobu while she sleeps with an other (one word "another")
man. But instead of Nobu, she gets caught by the Chairman. At first this seems like a disaster but then Nobu is so angry at Sayuri that he broke (better: breaks)
off any contact. This smoothed (better: smoothes)
the way of a common life together with the Chairman as he (has)
also desired Sayuri since he met her for the first time. When the Chairman frees her from the okiya to become his mistress, she sets up a lavish teahouse for Japanese businessmen in New York and lives together with him like she always wanted. (better: as she has always wanted)
A final thought: watch your capitization: either "Geisha" or "geisha," "Chairman" or "chariman," not both.
