Ich have many problems with the english language. I make a lot of mistakes when I must write a text. Now, my homework is to write an essay about the personal relationships, and why they are not immune to the society conflicts. I hope it is comprehensibly.
I`ve wrote a text but I don`t like it.
Ich finde es ist nicht flüssig genug und fehler gibt es sicherlich zu genügend. Ein Essay muss ja mehrere Punkte erfüllen und ich bin mir sicher das mein Text diese Punkte sicherlich nicht erfüllt. Vielleicht findet sich eine nette person, die mich auf die fehler aufmerksam macht und sie korrigiert, besonders die sprachlichen.
Ich bedanke mich bei allen die mir helfen können. Liebe grüße Helrose.
here my text:
In our fast moving world many relationships are not immune to the conflicts and problems this world hold ready for the people. Many couples break up under the pressure to be perfect in a job and in the family. To accommodate job and family in everyday life is very hard especially for the women.
After the emancipation of the women, the traditional family changed. Women want be independent. They do not want to be a housewife. Now they go to work, enjoy their life without a partner and do not want to commit one. They want make a career and a life partner would to annoy this ambition aim. A temporary partner is more confortable. The values like to be a good mom and a good housewife are not more current. Many young women and men are afraid to miss something in their life like parties and sexuall expirience and don`t want have a partner.
On the other hand after a long and stressful day many women and men come home and have nobody to talk with. That`s why the people try to replace relationships with pets. But it can`t replace a human communication. They start to be very depressive. Also many people believe that they cannot find the real love between all the break ups. The Hollywood films shows romantic film and best looking couples which are not grounded in reality.
The fast- moving world don`t permit have time for relationships. Especially in big cities the life is very stressful. The people live anonym and are only engaged with own problems. Many people decide to be single or childless, because a family disable the personal career.
The faster city life forces people to try to build relationships quicker. But relationships only grow strong and deep when they built slowly and steadily. And so, haste in relationships tends to build weaker ones, which are easily broken.
Up to a point, maybe in the thirtys, women start to look for a partner. Many women realize that career cannot be everything in their life. They wnt to fulfill the desire to have a relationship or a real family. But the time is sometimes against the aim. It is difficult to change their habits. Some women are very desperate when they do not have or cannot get children because they don`t find a life partner or they can not conceive.
In the country the life is more quietly. The people hold together and help each other. The relationships are more resistant to the conflicts that tear society apart. Some people decide to change their home and move on the country.
The problems like long unemployment, no time are hard tests for relationships. The people have to work more and more to have enough money for the every day life. Money has always been important in a relationship, but today financial security is urged as an absolute necessity. The jobs require more efficient and time, that miss in a relationship.
On the contrary women and men who invest more time in their relationships have enough compensation and support in their life. They can discuss problems they have for example in jobs and with the environment. In a relationship you can share feelings like anger, love and fear. Most important of all, is the fact that a lot of couples recognize that it is not impossible to connect career and family.
I agree with this statement that personal relationships are not immune to the conflicts that tear society apart. In Germany every third marriage will divorced. We are careless with our partners. More and more people forget to invest time and patience in a relationship. We must have more consideration.
The relationships are more cursorily. Today in a relationships questions such as -- Do I look good with her? Does he look good with me? Are we sexually good together? -- are paramount. S.x get better of a relationship. Of course, s.x has always been a major part of relationships, but today it has become the only part for many couples. I thing our attitude must change. We must appreciate more the character and inner values.
I have seen many woman in the 40 age, who had nobody,only a pet. They are very regret to be without partner. The desire of a perfect partner (having money, being without mistakes, and so on) deform the reality. Especially hollywood films show us conspicuously often happy and romantical couple without problems. The real world is not so easy to manage it. But many women are dreaming about her perfekt prince sharming.
In my opinion the mankind is not made for loneliness and it is only natural to look always after a partner.We cannot change the culture, but we can change the way we think. If you have a partner, take time, converse, communicate with them. View your partner as a person, not just as an object that makes you feel good and try to invest more time in the relationship.
I did a list with pros and contr.
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