Hello, pls correct my text and show me, what I can make better next time.
In first, read the exercise text Wink
1.
The difference between a normal holiday and the holiday described
in the text is that you have to spend your holiday like a vagrant! In a normal holiday, you lay on the beach during the day and then you go to your hotel for sleep. When you book "rough sleeper holidays" you lay on the pavement. An other aspect is that you can't go to the hotel restaurant and book a warm meal.
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Yes, I'm agree with the charities and the police. I think it's not good for the real vagrants , when they rival with bogus tramps for food. Furthermore it's danger for the tourists in the streets of London. They could become victims by gangsters because they don't know the area and the rules of the street.
3.
In my opinion is an ideal holiday combined with plenty of sun, beach and alcohol. I need party at night and a very good breakfast at morning.
4.
Going on holiday is good for your body and mind. You can relax, make sport or lay on the beach with a drink in your hand only. An other aspect of going on holiday is, that you can learn something about an other country.
Need help, pls correct my test, i am going to write a test:)
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michael123
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The difference between a normal holiday and the holiday described
in the text is that you have to spend your holiday like a vagrant! In a normal holiday, you "lay-should be lie" on the beach during the day and then you go back to your hotel to sleep. When you book "rough sleeper holidays" you lay-should be "lie" on the pavement. An other-another (all one word) aspect is that you can't go to the hotel restaurant and book a warm meal.
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Yes, I'm-only use one verb (should be "I agree...") agree with the charities and the police. I also think it's not good for the real vagrants, who must rival with bogus tramps for food - sounds better. Furthermore it's - technically you should not use abbreviations in written work (should be it is). It is fine to speak with abbreviations. danger - you need an adjective, not a noun (should be dangerous) for the tourists in - should be "on" (in is only used when something is inside something, for example "in a house" or "in London") the streets of London. They could become victims by gangsters - of gangsters because they don't know the area and the rules of the street.
3.
In my opinion is an ideal holiday combined with plenty of sun, beach and alcohol. I need party at night and a very good breakfast at morning. - word order and word use - should be "In my opinion an ideal holiday has plenty of sun, combined with beaches and alcohol. I need to party at night and have a very good breakfast in the morning.
4.
Going on holiday is good for your body and mind saying "your body and your mind" here would sound a tiny bit more natural, but what you said (without the second "your") was perfect gramatically. You can relax, make - should be do sport or lay - lie on... on the beach with a drink in your hand only - do not say only. An other - all one word (another) aspect - good aspect sounds better here of going on holiday is, no comma (,) that you can learn something about an other all one word country.
The difference between a normal holiday and the holiday described
in the text is that you have to spend your holiday like a vagrant! In a normal holiday, you "lay-should be lie" on the beach during the day and then you go back to your hotel to sleep. When you book "rough sleeper holidays" you lay-should be "lie" on the pavement. An other-another (all one word) aspect is that you can't go to the hotel restaurant and book a warm meal.
2.
Yes, I'm-only use one verb (should be "I agree...") agree with the charities and the police. I also think it's not good for the real vagrants, who must rival with bogus tramps for food - sounds better. Furthermore it's - technically you should not use abbreviations in written work (should be it is). It is fine to speak with abbreviations. danger - you need an adjective, not a noun (should be dangerous) for the tourists in - should be "on" (in is only used when something is inside something, for example "in a house" or "in London") the streets of London. They could become victims by gangsters - of gangsters because they don't know the area and the rules of the street.
3.
In my opinion is an ideal holiday combined with plenty of sun, beach and alcohol. I need party at night and a very good breakfast at morning. - word order and word use - should be "In my opinion an ideal holiday has plenty of sun, combined with beaches and alcohol. I need to party at night and have a very good breakfast in the morning.
4.
Going on holiday is good for your body and mind saying "your body and your mind" here would sound a tiny bit more natural, but what you said (without the second "your") was perfect gramatically. You can relax, make - should be do sport or lay - lie on... on the beach with a drink in your hand only - do not say only. An other - all one word (another) aspect - good aspect sounds better here of going on holiday is, no comma (,) that you can learn something about an other all one word country.