What is Germany
Germany is a parliamentary federal republic of sixteen states . The capital city and seat of the government is Berlin.
Moreover Germany is a founding member of the European Union, and with over 82 million people it has the largest population among the EU member states.
Actually Germany is in the world very famous for their Industry.
All over the world everybody know Mercedes, Siemens, AEG and so on.
In fact most of the people in world thinking that Germany is a liberal country but we have also a kind of racism. A good example are the 8 Indians who have been hunted by a group of nationalist or the Athiopian guy who have been beaten into coma.
A survey from n-tv which adopt that racism assault accelerate with 27% confirm my arguments.
But in Germany we have also a social system which we haven’t in other countries.
In Germany nobody have to hunger, nobody have to be homeless.
Of course for the Germans this is self-evident.
Furthermore I notice that the employees are mostly quite polite in the institutions.
In comparison with other countries Germany care for their customers and advise them mostly very good in every case.
Taking a closer look into the German society, however, you will notice that a lot of Germans are dissatisfied with the current bearing. Mostly they are dissatisfied with their money, the time of their work and the way of life.
The Hannoversche Zeitung which adopt that 76% of the Germans are dissatisfied with Germany and 24% are satisfied with Germany confirm my arguments.
In future I think Germany doesn’t still one of the strongest industry countries because other countries like China, UAE and India are much more hard-working.
They work from Monday till Sunday.
If you check their economy you will see that these countries attain the same things like Germany much faster.
In conclusion I can say that sometimes I feel that the Germans a little bit spoilt and because they doesn’t see how life is in Africa.
I think for the Germans to have food, to have a home, to have a Insurance are basic requirements thats why nobody can be satisfied with these items.
Moreover I notice that Germanys economy grow very low which is a sign that the inhabitants don’t work hard enough.
All in all for myself I am very happy to be in this country because I can go to school, I can sleep in my bed without war, I never have to hunger and I feel save ….important things which we should taking into account and compare with other countries.
Bitte um Korrektur
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leon182
quite a few mistakes in there , nothing bad and easy to correct
going to star with :
Wrong order of words
advice how to improve : Germany is actually well know for its industry
never use most of THE people
most people is right
simple present
...everybody KNOWS ....
better :
there is also a kind of racism
A good example IS
from n-tv , which adoptS
nobody has to suffer on hunger
... has to be homeless
In future I think Germany won´t be one the strongest industry ....
that the germans are spoilt , since they don´t see....
quite a good essay ,
going to star with :
Wrong order of words
advice how to improve : Germany is actually well know for its industry
never use most of THE people
most people is right
simple present
...everybody KNOWS ....
better :
there is also a kind of racism
A good example IS
from n-tv , which adoptS
nobody has to suffer on hunger
... has to be homeless
In future I think Germany won´t be one the strongest industry ....
that the germans are spoilt , since they don´t see....
quite a good essay ,
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Asection2
Ich glaube das mit der Satzstellung haut noch nicht ganz so gut hin...
Ich habe noch einige Fehler entdeckt.
All over the world everybody know Mercedes, Siemens, AEG and so on.
An dieser Stelle sagt man eher...
Mercedes, Siemens and so on are well known all over the world...
Dann merke: In fact,most of the people in the[AE] world are thinking,that...
Und vor "but" wird immer ein Komma gesetzt...
but we have also a kind of racism Man sagt hier eher...
we also have...
A good example are the 8 Indians who have been hunted by a group of nationalist or the Athiopian guy who have been beaten into coma. Sage...
A good example for this
Dann stellt sich in diesem Satz die Frage, wie das passiert ist. Wurden sie gejagt [chased] oder gejagt[hunted]...
Kleiner Tipp: Du hast dir mit dem racism ein totales Eigentor geschossen. Schreibst bei dem Ausländischen Mann das Wort "guy". das Wor klingt ja gerade so rassistisch in diesem Zusammenhang, weil es ja eig. Kerl bedeutet oder Typ. Also schreib lieber "man".
But in Germany we have also a social system which we haven’t in other countriesSage...
In Germany we also have a social system, which we havn't got in other countries.
countries Germany cares for their customers and advises them very good in every case.
Mostly they are... sage they are mostly
Germany confirms my arguments.
In future I think Germany doesn’t still one... sage... In future I think Germany won't be one....
Nutze auch greatest anstatt strongest...
Und sage dann they are working, denn das tuen sie ja immer noch...
Wenn attain das Verb ist
dann sage : that these countries are attaining the same things much faster...
sage auch: that I can feel sometimes, that the Germans are l little...
I think for the Germans, lasse dies weg..
Du must in diesen Sätzen das Progressive benutzen, sage:
having food, having a home, having an insurance are basic...
are basic requirements thats why nobody can be satisfied with these items. Lasse hier das "thats" weg...
I notice that Germany's economy grows very slowly, which is a sign that the inhabitants aren't working hard enough...
All in all for myself, I am very lucky to live in this country ,because I can go to school, I can sleep in my bed without war
, I never have to hunger and I feel save ….important things which we should take into account and compare with other countries.
Ich habe noch einige Fehler entdeckt.
All over the world everybody know Mercedes, Siemens, AEG and so on.
An dieser Stelle sagt man eher...
Mercedes, Siemens and so on are well known all over the world...
Dann merke: In fact,most of the people in the[AE] world are thinking,that...
Und vor "but" wird immer ein Komma gesetzt...
but we have also a kind of racism Man sagt hier eher...
we also have...
A good example are the 8 Indians who have been hunted by a group of nationalist or the Athiopian guy who have been beaten into coma. Sage...
A good example for this
Dann stellt sich in diesem Satz die Frage, wie das passiert ist. Wurden sie gejagt [chased] oder gejagt[hunted]...
Kleiner Tipp: Du hast dir mit dem racism ein totales Eigentor geschossen. Schreibst bei dem Ausländischen Mann das Wort "guy". das Wor klingt ja gerade so rassistisch in diesem Zusammenhang, weil es ja eig. Kerl bedeutet oder Typ. Also schreib lieber "man".
But in Germany we have also a social system which we haven’t in other countriesSage...
In Germany we also have a social system, which we havn't got in other countries.
countries Germany cares for their customers and advises them very good in every case.
Mostly they are... sage they are mostly
Germany confirms my arguments.
In future I think Germany doesn’t still one... sage... In future I think Germany won't be one....
Nutze auch greatest anstatt strongest...
Und sage dann they are working, denn das tuen sie ja immer noch...
Wenn attain das Verb ist
dann sage : that these countries are attaining the same things much faster... sage auch: that I can feel sometimes, that the Germans are l little...
I think for the Germans, lasse dies weg..
Du must in diesen Sätzen das Progressive benutzen, sage:
having food, having a home, having an insurance are basic...
are basic requirements thats why nobody can be satisfied with these items. Lasse hier das "thats" weg...
I notice that Germany's economy grows very slowly, which is a sign that the inhabitants aren't working hard enough...
All in all for myself, I am very lucky to live in this country ,because I can go to school, I can sleep in my bed without war
, I never have to hunger and I feel save ….important things which we should take into account and compare with other countries.